The End of Something
It was just milliseconds.
You turned away from me.
A late night biopsy.
A slicing separation silence.
A vitrification of eyes across a room.
A house housed on a fault line.
An erosion failure scenario.
A storm event.
Now,
dead decades
are malignant memories.
At times,
moments masquerading as being meaningful,
sometimes catch me out.
And yet,
a quarter of a century later,
I saw a woman on my street.
And although it could never have been.
I stopped and thought
it was you.
© swissterrace 2022
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This is very poignant, swissterrace. Well constructed and an easy read, I found.
“dead decades,
are malignant memories.”
… is particularly inciteful. You can actually feel the pain of the separation. Well done.
Allen
Hello
Thanks for the comment. Appreciate the feedback.
A poem of loss and separation. I liked the punched sentences; the lists like blows of regret. A well wrought poem, thank you.
Dodge
hi many thanks for the feedback. You have an interesting profile. What a life.
Thanks. Always glad to offer appreciation. Re the profile; it’s what I left out that is interesting.
The pain of a cruelly broken relationship can be hard to forget even if you get on with life and think you’ve put everything behind you. I still remember the day my first love put me down over the phone when I was just 17. And that was a long time ago! Scars always remain no matter how insignificant.
You have made excellent work of putting those feelings into this (as Griff said) poignant piece.
Thanks for the great words and the memories.
Ah yes! Strange how our minds work and the things we thought were dead and gone or dealt with, can catch us off guard and resurrect old memories.
Well written poem.
Alison x
Hi, The past is meant to be a foreign country. Maybe it needs its passport removing. Thanks for the comment.
A common thing that was written in a striking way right from the beginning. I like your clever use of punctuation. Nothing is dead and final. The end of something has reminded me of that.
Thanks for the positive comment much appreciated.