The End of Something
It was just milliseconds.
You turned away from me.
A late night biopsy.
A slicing separation silence.
A vitrification of eyes across a room.
A house housed on a fault line.
An erosion failure scenario.
A storm event.
Now,
dead decades
are malignant memories.
At times,
moments masquerading as being meaningful,
sometimes catch me out.
And yet,
a quarter of a century later,
I saw a woman on my street.
And although it could never have been.
I stopped and thought
it was you.
© swissterrace 2023
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Your unique style carries this poem into a memorable ending.
Hi
Thank-you for reading this poem and for the feedback. It’s that somebody enjoys it.
Cheers
Like the haunting effect produced by line breaks and imagery. You might consider dropping the comma after the word decades and adding a comma after the word later as well as perhaps dropping the phrase I know in the the third to last line. Cheers.
Thanks Ross. Your suggestions were good and I have made them. Thanks for taking the time.
just brilliant! I’m in awe….
Thankyou that is a very inspiring comment to receive. It is nice to be able to write something and for other people to enjoy it. Many thanks.