It’s All in the Eye
Intro: up to 50 words (delete this text and enter your own)
IT’S ALL IN THE EYE
I look at her and sigh
For the firmness of her lips,
Her subtly curving thigh.
Yet if her eyes but glance
I’m struck giddy and possessed;
Caught by violent hands
And spun by the sudden chance.
I know what I see
But what image comes to her?
I guess, I cringe, I flee.
Fleeing I curse and praise
The folly of this distress:
Confidence it disarrays;
Insignificance it slays.
It is indeed all in the eye. The first tentative steps to anything. I have to confess I read this at first as non rhyming, then I saw that there is a rhyme but it comes and goes so much it kept throwing me off. I feel it would be better to be one thing or the other. In that way the poem flows better for the reader. It left me feeling discombobulated. (for that I am grateful as I always wanted to use that word) lol I hope you don’t mind my crit. I feel the poem is good… Read more »
Thank you for your comments. I take them to heart and I hope that you have since recovered from your discombobulation!