Mending a chair
When life becomes too much for me, I like to work with my hands.
Mending a chair
There is something that I like about wood.
Then, one morning the chair was there,
just perched precariously upon a pile
of rubble from our building work;
and where it came from I had no idea;
it’d just been left there – an old chair,
waiting to be taken away and crushed.
So, I brought it down for a closer look,
that I could better gauge its weight.
Lifting it told me at once it was oak,
well-weathered, as an outdoor chair;
and I could see that all that was missing
from its back was a vertical slat,
that I easily replaced from my store.
I took the time to sand by hand,
taking special care to preserve the grain.
Once smooth I applied a varnish,
to protect it from future wind and rain.
It’s redeemed now, in our garden,
and I’m content to be sitting in it,
my hands resting along the arms.
And I like to think it will outlast me;
and by my doing practical good,
I’ve preserved the life that’s still in its wood.
© 2021 D G Moody
This prose poem reminds me of my father and grandfather. Granddad was always fixing things and Dad loved to work in wood.
Thanks for that.
A good example: Both in the prose poem, and the war on waste. Well done, Dougie.
The chair looks good too. 🙂
Guaj, Allen. It still needs some tweaking, but I appreciate your comments. As far as a prose poem is considered, I’m not so sure if that was my aim; I was working toward some internal
rhyming and rhythm, so I’ll look at that again. The difficulty (for me) is in finding the language that is poetic, but in plain English.
Best to both of you…..Dougie
this has great potential, yes it looks like it’s a prose poem but those are a bit different and I prefer calling them free verse poetry when the layout is like yours. this needs some trimming and honing and it will shine like a diamond. If I were you I’d start with this line Well-weathered, it was an outdoor chair, and do the following: Well-weathered, an outdoor chair, and I could see all that was missing; a vertical slat for its back, replaced from my wood store, a piece that’d fit. There is something I like about wood; an old… Read more »
Thanks Nic, for taking the time to both read and offer a critique. As I’ve said above, it definitely needs some polishing – I liked your expression ‘shining like a diamond’. With your re-write I shall bear it in mind when revisiting it. I wouldn’t change the first line as it sets the theme for me, but I do appreciate your constructive advice.
thank you too Dougie, sometimes a gentlemanly reply like yours to a sensitive comment containing edit suggestions during a dry period of the person commenting helps psychologically. I tend especially when I have zero or just one poem to show to look at other poems the way I look at mine.
I’m always happy to receive constructive comments Nic, even if I don’t always incorporate all of them in any re-write. I sometimes submit a piece before its in its finished state – so I’m glad to get fresh ideas. I’m going to put this one ‘back on the stocks tonight’. And I know what you mean about dry periods.
I’ve revised the work; and I feel it improves the reading. As to it being a prose poem, it should be in good company. Thanks again all, for the comments.