Sunset
A free verse poem
I climbed our hill today,
I felt you, inhaled you,
Heard you whisper in the wind
‘I love you.’
The clouds blazed,
Red as the roses you so loved.
‘Lonely up here, isn’t it?’
I turned.
The old man was kneeling,
Patting his terrier,
His face a bleak mask.
‘I used to come up here with my dear wife’ he said.
‘Lonely isn’t a place’ I told him
‘Lonely lives in the soul.’
A tear leaked down his creased face,
He nodded, turned and left.
I wept into the setting sun.
© pronto 2023
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May I say that I feel this comes right from the core of you? It tells a story and a truth at one and the same time in what I personally find to be a beautiful way.
I personally wouldn’t have used ‘smelt’ but that’s just me: Artist’s licence and all that jazz.
Thanks Griff, much appreciated, I wondered about smelt myself but decided to leave it unchanged I could use smelled, I suppose. The jury is still out. 🙂
Thank you for your kind comment, I suppose “smelt” stinks so I will alter it.