Not Letting Go.

 


One breath falls beyond

another, each beat of heart

calls to its brother,

time unnoticed fades

the day: yet time that was

can’t break away.

© sweetwater 2020
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Pommer

Hi Sue,
a very touching heartfelt creation..I read it once or twice, and it stirred memories in my mind.As usual another on of your contributions that says so much in few words. Thank you for sharing.I have just one advice, ln line two I would use heartbeat instead of beat of the heart.IMO it aids the flow. Hope you don’t mind. Be lucky.
Peter xxx.

Potleek

We never seem to take notice of what comes natural to the body, yet is very important.
Yet in a heartbeat it can all be gone, like time once it’s gone you can never get it back…Tony

Albermund

Reads lovely. Cheers Albert

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