XY Chromosomes


 

Young boys playing

 

Young men laying

 

Work men haying

 

War men slaying

 

Show men swaying

 

Hard men flaying

 

Rich men weighing

 

Poor men paying

 

Bad men preying

 

Dad men praying

 

Loud men braying

 

Wise men saying

 

Old men greying

 

Old boys playing

 

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Sweetwater
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I liked this very much, not too sure the typos fit in though 😉 Sue x

Gothicman
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This is very concisely clever, Mick, it’s akin to the seven ages of Man +. I’m afraid I’m at the Old Boys Playing stage, completing the whole loop. I suppose I’m more X than Y, but thankfully not XXY! You should write the female YY version, it would presumably be much the same in this toyboy age? Lol. No, I’m not suggesting everybody! *runs for cover*
A clever idea, well presented.
Trevor

Jolen
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The circle of life in rhyme. As it was, so shall it ever be. You have managed to put a whole lot in those short lines. Well done.

blessings,
jolen

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