Perchance to Dream
Short poem, slightly amended since posting (thanks to Swep) 
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They found her three days later.
A strange half-smile,
still gentle upon her lips
confounding physiology.
As always,
the one to break the rules.
Her sightless eyes held no clue.
Only her special things around her
whispered of her yearning
to belong.
© stormwolf 2023
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l. 5, “the one to break the rules”
instead of “betrayed” perhaps
“spoke of her yearning” or
“whispered of her yearning”
OMG! Do you know, I read this poem many times and never saw it! Even when asked to attend to that line I still could not see it! 😉 It just goes to show the brain compensates sometimes and tells you what you want to see. I am so glad you pointed it out. It may have stayed like that. Will have to apologise to Val. As for the suggestions for 8th line..perfect! Suggests a gentler scenario in keeping with the subject matter. Thanks so much Swep. Alison x PS to be honest, I am not sure about ‘belong’ I… Read more »
the hidden side of rule breakers: yearning to belong. “belong” seems right to me.
“a half-smile still gentle upon her lips”
Lovely! thanks
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