A poem.

Just a tiny scrap of night sky
Set with
A single star,
In shining evensong
And tied
With a ribbon
Of moonlight,
Kept with me
To remind me
That no darkness
Is total.

Just a quiet soft green valley
Washed with
A gentle rain,
From sadness and regret
And touched
With a feeling
Of deep peace,
Kept with me
To remind me
That no despair
Is final.

Just a small pressed flower
Saved from
A Wedding bouquet,
With memories of the heart
And faded
With the feelings
Of long ago,
Kept with me
To remind me
Is but a moment in time…

critique and comments welcome.
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Hello there., Welcome to the site 😉
I don’t know how I missed this one yesterday as it is simply delightful. Three gentle stanzas each one bringing something precious to be remembered. There is a prevailing air of sadness but not regret. More the deep feeling of having been touched by something that has opened you up and been life enhancing. I can relate too.
Alison x

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Storm has already described my take on your poem, essentially, so I won’t repeat her impressions. But I was wondering if this piece could be even more effective with longer lines?

Just a tiny scrap of night sky
Set with a single star,
Wrapped in shining evensong…

And so on. Good concept, with smooth transitions, stanza to stanza.

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