Pieces of Me (re-edited)
A very old poem updated
A piece of me dried up
Shrivelled away
like early rose buds.
Claret ears caught napping
by late spring frosts.
they say old soldiers do that
I will not miss it.
Ignore now the whining
of headmistress voices
that burrowed through walls.
Extracted drops of golden
Elixir de Compassion
from my hard heart.
Stolen by capricious thieves.
Taken under false pretences
to claim as their own.
Bits of me have died before.
Layers of love’s cat-like lives
flaking and falling away
leaving onion tears that quickly dry.
Few go though life never losing one.
Some have every layer torn free
by others’ weaknesses
or their own.
leaving them as brittle fallen leaves.
Most shed sadness a few times
embracing the fresh flesh beneath
and die with unused layers.
Such is love.
I have layers left.
And I plan to use them wisely.
Very moving and I really love to see pieces being re-submitted if they feel they can be improved. Don’t we owe it to ourselves to put the very best foot forward?
Thanks for reposting this very emotive poem.
Alison x
Thank you Alison this is certainly a big improvement on the original thanks to a couple of excellent poets on here.
I guess that’s what it’s all about.
Thanks for the nib!
and also thanks to Nic and Bhi
Nibbers are anonymous!
x
Thank you, Annie Mouse. 🙂