An account of Mary’s birth
No 3 in the series “The Life and Times of Mary” providing one version of the account of her birth.
Mary’s ripe, her architecture
Almost, not entirely complete –
Only God and close family
Are without an imperfection,
And she’s just nature’s selection –
But she’s ready to face the world,
Declare Babylon her birth-right.
The Earth begins to shake, its cunts dilate,
Tectonic plates grind and sunder
Volcanos erupt, ash, thunder;
Blocked the sun, soothsayers wonder
Whether this is the end, the date
Predicted, a new poetic trait
Burying the old voices of late
Lamented souls – those vigorous throats
Upon whom she’ll hang her coats,
Multicoloured, in dimensions
Unknown, unseen, creations
Some will say are the devil’s work,
Others a literary quirk….
But enough! The head’s emerging,
A final push! All encouraging
Out she slithers bloodlines tethered,
Soon to be dismantled, gathered
In museums while she perfects,
Hones her skills in all dialects.
Breathless her mother, highly charged,
“Child, you’re absolutely divine.”
And Mary begins spinning, singing,
“I am, I am my own design,
I am the first, my every line
A virgin birth; I am the Earth.”
Hi BHI I am not sure why you have an introduction stanza that does not rhyme then you go on into rhyme for the rest. Second stanza brilliant and descriptive in an original way. I am sure I am missing lots of meaning in the poem. Probably needs to be read several times. I loved the last stanza. The great wonder and joy both of the mother but also of Mary. She realises her unique position and the esoteric nature of events for the earth. A very unusual poem. I understand it is one of a set. I could see… Read more »
This is part of a set – this is the 3rd.
The rhyme begins in the 2nd stanza as the poem moves away from the “imperfection” of the 1st and starts to anticipate a new beginning, Mary born of the earth, from the earth and heading into an orbit which is totally hers.
Look forward to the day when we can wander outside and not just to the shops!
“One account of Mary’s birth” The naturally selected imperfect universal from the tiny perfect bloodlines that are dismantled, bridges burnt, i think. Mary as the new reality? No miracle in any religion matches the reality of how the universe popped out of nothingness. It only had to happen once, the atheist say! Deep poem.
Indeed CW, we are all part of a miraculous pop!
Now if there is space/void between all cells and atoms etc when exactly does the sperm fertilize an egg? what is conception? it’s the thought and other forces, but can anyone imagine what this would mean? there is no ‘friction’ no ‘contact’ ever, it’s just in the mind and this has a lot to do with parthenogenesis, in the movie the Matrix were do all those babies come from? the men and women are in those tubes and live in the matrix a virtual life.. they never meet as actual bodies, they never have sex. there is a whole new… Read more »
Nic, you pose many interesting and searching questions!
we are all descended from an immaculate conception, and our thoughts, transferred into a non organic machine are capable of creating multiple forms and realities. There has to be a notion of organic life for these non organic machines to function as they have been programmed to. And yes Mary is the code name for an enigma.
not exactly. divine conception has happened according to Christians and other more ancient religions, if this is a matrix and Virgin Mary was in it and pre-selected to serve as the mother of Christ the divine intervention would not need sperm the movie practically proves that there is a parthenogenesis but the interaction is not the same for all. the sperm exists in the physical realm and so does the egg (and they both await the interaction of thought-forms and intentions). the sperm is the some times good some times bad parasite that triggers the formulation of a pre-designed design… Read more »
The “immaculate conception” I was referring to was the Big Bang singularity – as CW succinctly put it; “the universe popped out of nothingness”. That is the point in time of Mary’s birth, and that is why she declares she “is the first,” and everything that comes after her will be “a virgin birth.”
Has she extracted herself out of the matrix? we shall have to see, and she will have a lot of fun with language and form while doing so. Perhaps even extend the 240 dimensions of the theory of everything.
Look Bhi, I am not a scientist or a proper poet that studied any kind of literature so anything that has to do with rhyming and stuff like that go unnoticed by me, I only search for musicality and different meaning and I am more than glad when I see people exploring theories like you do here. I often act spontaneously and start replying to other people’s theories with my own as if there is nothing literary to talk about. Thank God because I can’t. I won’t be able in your future submissions to talk about form and language at… Read more »
I am glad that I am able to explore beyond the poem with you. I don’t want to talk about literary theory and it is much better when the comments come from the gut, the feeling that there is music and meaning. sometimes overt, sometimes hidden.
Well that’s interesting. I find myself assessing a poem on many things. For instance, to me at least, it has to make sense as sometimes I feel the writer gets too carried away with a concept that makes sense to them but not to the reader at large. That does not make it a bad poem. It only means that to that reader they lose out on the emotion or the theme. Appreciation of a poem is very subjective I know. I go where a poem (like a dream say) leaves a lasting impression on me. That means it has… Read more »
Editors must do their job and sometimes their critique is evem necessary to defend their nibs.
Simple members like me have an obligation to never express themselves with animosity and impoliteness but if they want, whether they can or not, they should feel free to offer friendly critique.
Editors’ critique has a lot more gravity, however, and this is good.
WE need more editors.
Well written, Bhi. Having read your response to stormwolf, I can see the structure that you have created here: That’s skillful.
I think the subject matter is bound to be questioned and discussed, and sadly, whilst ultimately necessary, it diverts from the basic appreciation of your poetry. I myself would call you a co-creator because you are a fellow human being, let alone that you are a fellow artist.
Nicely created, Bhi. 🙂
Allen, Thanks for the encouraging comments. There will always be a discussion about the subject matter, and am happy to dissect the entrails of poem, but going back to structure; after the imperfection of the first the 2nd starts to take on some shape before the 3rd and 4th stanzas which have the classic AABBCC, as Mary shows she has mastery of the old, and the 5th has ABCBB and then an internal rhyme as she begins to experiment in preparation for her own “Devil’s work” or “literary quirk” style of poetry. We’ll have to see if she is precocious… Read more »