Hewn in Rock
One from the archives re-posted with audio. A special moment in time from my memory bank. I have written quite a few in rhyme.
Slain’s Castle, Cruden Bay. Scene of the poem.
We climbed the hill
in breathless strides
our hands were clasped together,
we cared not for the slippery paths
nor dark and stormy weather.
I stood outlined
by rough-hewn rock
where once, a window framed
the endless home of watery myths
and rocky bays, untamed.
On turning, smiling,
to your face
at once I was transfixed
by such a look I’d never known…
it seemed we were bewitched.
We kissed among
the grey clad skies
with hearts in tandem, spellbound.
Our love was sealed, in passion loosed
upon the muddy ground.
We’ve left the cliff
and gone our ways
but know, whatever ails you
I shared that love shown on your face
I’m here, if life e’re fails you.
I like to read your rhyming poetry, Alison. This one is very good… One small quibble:- ‘at once I was transfixed’ is a little out of kilter for me. I reckon it might be better ‘I was, at once, transfixed.’
Cheers,
Jim xx
Hi Jim, To be honest I feel it is six of one and half a dozen of another here. 😉 Both say the same thing and neither is better grammar I don’t think. I try to write as I speak and so the way I have it is the way I would say it. I do not on this occasion see it merits changing the poem but more so the recitation. I always listen to crit though and so if I feel later on that it would be improved I may change it. I am up to my neck with… Read more »
I wonder sometimes, can such cliffs ever be left because of what we felt? Or do we carry them throughout our lives? Modern Atlas is a poem I never finished or published, and your poem reminded me I have to one day.
Enjoyed
xx
Hi Nic,
You are quite right! I do carry that cliff within me. It will always be there when I think about it.
Alison xx
I loved listening to this. The rhythm was perfect.
Oh dear!
Hi Bhi,
I replied to you yesterday then see to my dismay, it is no longer here. I think there are still some gremlins in the works.
Anyway, I was saying thank you so much for your lovely comment.
Alison x
you are a passionate woman.
Swep! 🙂
Yes, I reckon you are right. 😉
So good to see you back here.
Alison x