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Gomathi
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Enjoyed listening to your Winter’s Song, Sweetwater. A poem as refreshing, crisp and cool as winter’s breath. One more beautiful night scene captured for us readers. Thankyou for sharing!
Warm Regards, Gomathi

Nemo
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This instantly conveys the sensation of being outdoors on a frosty night. However, sorry to point out a small nit (horrible word): but midnight cannot drift; it is a time and as soon as it changes it becomes one minute after midnight, and so on. Also it is not a concrete thing that can drift like a boat on a river. I suggest something like – “Midnight, my thoughts drift away into darkness….” The lone voice is very eerie but would it be a human voice? I would suggest an owl.. “Across the night, an owl’s lone cry, crisp and… Read more »

Jolen
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Lovely work. Sparse wording which nevertheless allows the reader to view an abundance of music with this winter song. Much enjoyed it.

blessings,
jolen

Stormwolf
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I have come to love your poems which have a style all of their own. You always manage to capture so much in so few lines.
Alison x

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