Too Late.
Long ago dreams
in a far away heart,
stolen by time, and
drifting apart.
One gifted moment,
eternity held.
Memories unbroken,
and a faded love
token.
© sweetwater 2023
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Long ago dreams
in a far away heart,
stolen by time, and
drifting apart.
One gifted moment,
eternity held.
Memories unbroken,
and a faded love
token.
Beautifully expressed. I have come to truly adore poems such as this, that use supreme economy of words.
To me it makes the poem become a true ‘perfume’ concentrated and divine as opposed to a weaker Eau de toilette to use that analogy.
We do not need to use an abundance of words to distil a strong feeling in the reader.
Alison x
Thank you very much Alison, I love the perfume analogy I hadn’t thought of short poems that way but I see what you mean. Every time I write I have Mike’s voice in my head, ‘ remember no unnecessary words sue’. 🙂 sue.
Loved reading this one! Keeping it crisp and clear. An art I have to sincerely learn. Perfume analogy was a good one Alison! A very beautiful thought put so well Sue.
Best Wishes, Gomathi.
Thank you Gomathi, A few words seemed to sum up all I wanted to say, but I have no idea why it suddenly appeared in my head. Sue x
Nice and concise with good rhythm and rhyming. Well done Sue, one of your best,
Much appreciated Luigi, thank you very much. Sue x