Beyond you

You can snatch my land,
My property, severe
Everything as far as I can see,
But you cannot separate
Me from my memories.

You can go away
For good, asunder
All that belonged to us
But the stories
We wrote together.

© supratik 2020
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this is interesting, perhaps you could end it without the question mark, full stop. without the last two lines, make it a five lines pair of strophes.

You can snatch my land,
My property, severe
Everything as far as I can see,
But you cannot separate
Me from my memories.

You can go away
For good, asunder
All that belonged to us
But the stories
We wrote together.

sorry I had ideas and I boldly shared them with you.

Ifyouplease

thank you too for liking my edit. that’s very uplifting!

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