an unknown middle-aged woman

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passing my cafe window

dignified, dressed demurely,

and yet still beautiful

 

beautiful, and unaware

that behind the misty glass

she is quietly admired

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

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if I were a young man I would never fancy younger women or as young as me, but older than me, I am always surprised to read or hear this ‘she is beautiful still’, why not be beautiful or something of similar appealing value, there is a lot of social discrimination against older women. someone told me one day ” you still look hot for your age” and he actually thought it was a compliment. it’s not. this is a man’s world, unfortunately.

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why not:

passing my cafe window

unhurried, dressed modestly,

beautiful, and unaware

that behind the misty glass

she is quietly admired

for getting better with age

or something like that.

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the title, avoid still, we got the picture, still means something else now because of the title.
if the title was

An unknown woman

then still beautiful would be ok and just a hint.

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