Moving Forward.

Letting go of grief.

You who seek to weep

at sorrows knee,

draw forth the seeping

wound of grief

to flow beyond the reach

of pain, there cast aside

the shattered heart

your soul once more

to gain.

© sweetwater 2023
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Hi Sue,
One of your best, gets right down to the soul. I love it. I don’t think I can ever let go, but you givs me some hope.Short but so true.
Be lucky,
Peter xxx


Loved this, so brief yet saying so much. Beautiful..


That’s lovely ๐Ÿ™‚

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Sue, you had me at the Bronte sentiment all over again! You have such a talent to evoke their kind of emotional expression. The way those particular women spoke their truth in the only manner their generation, their culture allowed. Yes, you had me at hello! At that softly insistent internal rhyme and repeated vowel sound: the wEEping, knEE, grIEf, sEEping; the pain and gain. I not only relate to such heartfelt and painful sincerity, I believe! Writing can help to heal us and you do it particularly well.


Lovely short – and good use of internal alliteration in the first half.

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