The Silent Valley
Born in nineteen-seventy.
Salvation Army hospital for
an unmarried mother.
Twelve weeks work and a baby born for free.
For some reason
you decided to keep me,
like a pointless present,
left in a drab, dusty,
chest of drawers,
rarely used or opened.
A tot terrorised
in a two and a half storey maisonette,
somewhere between the new Ikea store
and the slum clearances
in the Don Revie years.
Then, at some point,
driving through the Silent Valley
in two thousand and two,
I lost my mind in the Mourne Mountains.
Taking tablets twice daily since my forty-second birthday,
three hundred and
eighty pills later,
I rattle like
the Captain’s collection tin
on a wet Whitsunday
Love this especially the closing stanza, and who can forget the Don Revie years 🙂
Hi thanks for the comment. Yes, Revie and Clough would make mincemeat of today’s managers.
I couldn’t agree more with Savvi’s admiration for The Silent Valley. This is one of the most effectively contrived and moving poems I’ve read on here in a very long time. If I could, I’d make it a great read or pick! Had to look up many of the references for although I’m a born and raised Brit, I’m long distanced from the country, its politics, sociology, geology and traditions. Yet I was blown away when I finally recognized the nuanced and powerful connections between all the images. The ending is especially stunning and meaningful in the way it brings… Read more »
Hello, thanks for the comment which is really appreciated as you like the words. It is positive to get feedback and I have never really had any so positive so thank-you. I told my wife and she was really happy that somebody read it. Thanks for the suggestions too and I will have a look at it when I have chance.
followed Shelagh’s comment to your good poem.
perhaps, hyphens needed, “two-and-a-half”
agree “Captain’s collection tin” very effective tie-in to the Salvation Army reference of early lines.
“I lost my mind in the Mourne mountains.” is pure,
googled and found Mourne Mountains in Ireland. “Mountains” needs to be capitalized.
Hello, many thanks for commenting on my poem. I have amended the word mountains and when I have more time I will rewrite it. The Mourne area really is worth a visit and Newcastle is a very nice little seaside town on the coast. Ironically, GMTV weather girl put Newcastle, County Down on the weather map one morning. The presenter Piers Morgan made a complete fool of himself which isnt hard when he said it was Newcastle, Tyne and Wear.
This is a truly remarkable poem. The pace and imagery all combine to create a stunning piece of art.
Thanks for the positive comments. I haven’t been on this site at all this year so it was was nice to see that you read one of my poems and liked it.
You should visit this site more often, Sue. Your poetry is always appreciated.
Regards, Luigi x
thanks…I’m not sure who Sue is though…