If I could love you as I wish
I’d count the stars within
your eyes, I’d know the
contours of your heart,
enfold your every breath.
If I could love you as I should
I’d walk the forest mile, cross
all hungered oceans, skim
the wind burnt sky.
If I could only love you,
the way I know I can
I’d offer you my very soul
to crush within your hand.
© sweetwater 2023
Hi Sue, good to see you back once again.What poignant statements there are in this little short poem.So much said in so few words.I love the last verse in particular, expressing my feelings now I have lost the love of my life.Oh yes, I would , gladly give my soul to love her once more..It brought tears to my eyes.Thank you for sharing Sue..PS:. I miss all our old friends from this site. Be lucky, Peter xxx
Hi Peter, thank you it’s a relief to be back, I did wonder if I would ever write again, heartbreak floors you doesn’t it, and it doesn’t go away or lessen, you just breath from day to day, pointlessly it seems.
But while we are still here the loved one is also here, carried forwards on the beat of our heart.
I too miss those we don’t see on here anymore. I always think of Mike and wonder how he is doing.
Beautiful expression of love and longing here. Some great phrases too.
I think we all need our time to grieve but it can help to express that love and loss when we’re ready. Good to see you back and posting.
Thank you very much Gee, it’s a huge relief to be back. 🙂 Sue.
Just read your comments about the subject of the poem. I read it as being from someone in love with someone completely unattainable. A love lost through sad circumstances.
It is interesting to see how people see different things in it but I think that’s the mark of a really good piece of writing.
Thank you Gee, I hadn’t meant to mislead anyone it just didn’t occur to me that it could be read so differently.
Socrates sent away just before his execution his wife and children, because he didn’t want grief, unfortunately when he drank the poison his male friends started crying like babies.
he told them to stop, mourning is the worst thing that can happen to a dead person, worse than death.
very interesting poem
I know very little about Socrates I must read up about him. Thank you for your comment It’s much appreciated. Mourning is a very difficult emotion to pin down and even harder to deny oneself isn’t it.
yes, exactly it is very difficult to deny oneself. for example when my father was dressed wearing the suit he wore in my wedding and was placed in the coffin, i was the only one who started crying, mother and brother followed my instructions and I failed big time. thankfully none of us shed a tear at the funeral. we were sad but above all we were all able to release him. the first days are critical according to all traditions, the more you want them back the less they are able to break free to get out to finally… Read more »
I must say I found your words and advice very freeing, but I am wondering why so many see this as a poem about mourning a lost loved one, yes I am grieving for my dearly loved and hugely missed Spaniel Harvey, but this poem is about unrequited love of a living person ( purely imagined ) I didn’t think for one minute it would be seen as anything else, I’m fascinated that other’s see it so differently.
I see. The comments made me think that this is a poem about death of a loved one, I read it again because I hadn’t seen such a thing the first time. Then I thought perhaps it is! What could I say that would be freeing? I could mention Socrates. I thought Now you tell me it’s about unrequited love which I’ve never felt. I dont exactly understand if I have felt it too or not to be honest. In my opinion unrequited love is when you decide to make yourself available for erotic interaction too and the other person… Read more »
and another thing: people say “oh i have felt unrequited love” but they never said anything to the other person, they never sent a crystal clear message of sexual attraction and romantic tendencies, they never even said it with their eyes. Shy or not they avoided revealing what they felt, this is not unrequited love at all. There is unrequited love which may be persisting too for many years when the message was there, the eyes and lips said it all, the proposal was made, the other person said no for whatever reason but you were still in love still… Read more »
It’s the second scenario I was writing about, the love that lasts a lifetime, sometimes overpowering with the wanting, sometimes quiescent in the background but never leaving. The knowledge that nobody else will have the same hold on you, never draw the same feelings towards them as the loved one always does. Your arms ache to hold them but you know they never will.
as I said to coolhermit, it must be horrible. never felt such a thing. yeah I have been in love when I was a teenager for four years with someone, there was mutual attraction it never became something clear enough, at some point he moved on because he was in search (he was 13 years older I was 17 by then) when he did i understood I was too shy, I wanted him to wait for me until I was an adult too I could boldly say to him then that I want him, next time I have to be… Read more »
The best way if something is going nowhere is to move on I think. Saves a lot of heartache if you can do that.
the sooner the better and the faster you can. 🙂 and no hard feelings by the way.