My Famous Dad
What were you doing, John Kennedy
the day my father died?
And Luther King, what words did sing
from you on his demise?
John Lennon, did you write a note
or Orson venture pawky quote?
And Marilyn never slit her throat
The day my father died.
© albermund 2023
Very amusing, Albo.
I’d get rid of “what words did sing” though. Maybe something like…
Luther King, what words did you sing
on the day of his… (insert adjective here)… demise?
Ta for your thoughts, Alf. I did give them a try out but i do feel that my version works better. There’s a certain music to the wording that i love and i also feel it’s more evocative. Also Luther King is not actually singing but the words sang from him. There’s quite a difference in my opinion. As you can imagine this is a very dear poem to me and has been with me for many years. I really couldn’t change one iota of it now even if you put a banana to my head. Cheers matey and thanks… Read more »
Albermund I suppose this applies to a lot of us, but I understand your feelings.
Who amongst the countries great leaders said a single word when My dad died. The country he fought to keep free.
Perhaps they didn’t know my dad, at least not like me…Tony
Cheers, Tony. I’m glad it resonated with you. Our dads were the greatest. Mind you he’d be gobsmacked if he knew I was writing poems about him. Rgds albert .:-)