Some people have a rosy view of winter, as represented by picture postcards of pristine snow, robins and sprigs of holly; others see the flip side with no redeeming features but that season’s bleakness and the desolate landscape.
Your poem is in the second category and the analogy between winter and a violent brute creates an almost menacing atmosphere.
You’ve captured a lot of violence in such a verbless poem. Question: wouldn’t the stain be red rather than yellow? I really like the line ‘the blue of bruise’ and your use of colour in contrast to the cold colourlessness of winter. A good challenge entry.
Yes, it did drift in a violent direction. And yes, it could better be red perhaps. When I wrote the line re yellow stain, I was thinking of the yellowish colour of winter skies, especially snowy ones. However, perhaps this is lost in the growing violence? Thanks for commenting.
Thanks for commenting. Yes, the verbless challenge has produced some good effects for all our entries, I think. A good challenge. And yes, best to be indoors before ‘lighting up time’ as my nan used to call it!
Rachel 🙂
Wow! another very good poem I missed it earlier maybe there are more?
Thanks for joining R!
Thank you for the challenge! It felt nice to write something again!
Some people have a rosy view of winter, as represented by picture postcards of pristine snow, robins and sprigs of holly; others see the flip side with no redeeming features but that season’s bleakness and the desolate landscape.
Your poem is in the second category and the analogy between winter and a violent brute creates an almost menacing atmosphere.
I know. And oddly, I like winter, but yes, I clearly went for the dark side!
Well done, this is really interesting, sorry I missed it now.
You haven’t! The challenge’s deadline is November 26
Thank you for commenting! Though, as Nic says, you haven’t, the deadline is 26th November.
Rachel 🙂
You’ve captured a lot of violence in such a verbless poem. Question: wouldn’t the stain be red rather than yellow? I really like the line ‘the blue of bruise’ and your use of colour in contrast to the cold colourlessness of winter. A good challenge entry.
Yes, it did drift in a violent direction. And yes, it could better be red perhaps. When I wrote the line re yellow stain, I was thinking of the yellowish colour of winter skies, especially snowy ones. However, perhaps this is lost in the growing violence? Thanks for commenting.
Rachel 🙂
Thanks for commenting. Yes, the verbless challenge has produced some good effects for all our entries, I think. A good challenge. And yes, best to be indoors before ‘lighting up time’ as my nan used to call it!
Rachel 🙂