Priory Cottage Night.
A perfect country evening.
Silence, softly pressed
upon the ear
holding the grace
of night on
lamplit wing.
In amber tones
the moon shall
call the whispers
of the hour,
and bring to me
the scent of peace.
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Nice one, Sue. You have mastered the art of writing atmospheric poems to perfection.
Thank you so much Luigi, to be honest I wasn’t expecting a comment at all, and to get such a kind one is a double pleasure. 🙂 Sue.
Still trying to comment & critique, easy with this one…it’s beautiful. Luigi has it right Sue, it took you a while to find your niche; no holding you back now. On the critique side, I would look at punctuation.
Mike XxX
Thank you very much for giving this poem your time Mike, as always I deeply appreciate your words and sound advice. I think I need a punctuation fairy to be honest, I have looked into punctuation and read so many different things… it’s not really used these days in poetry, just put in the minimal amount, put it wherever it reads best, or such complicated deeply intellectual instructions I’m left reeling. Trouble is these days things go in but never hang around long enough to be used so I stick to what my English teacher taught us at school which… Read more »
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Stunning! Another one for the anthology definitely. I am also taking into favs.
Alison x
Hi Alison I must have missed your comment as I have just been emailed about it. I am so sorry. Thank you for nominating and putting it into favs it’s hugely appreciated and unexpected. Sue xx
Hi Sue,
Something seems to be going amiss. I posted twice because after I commented, the comment was nowhere to be seen so I commented again! ;-(
Someone beat me to the nomination but I would have nominated it so you have two haha
Alison x
Hi Alison, how strange I wonder who the kind nominator was? Thank you for saying you would have nominated it though 🙂
I was looking through the selected poems for this year’s book and I noticed one of mine from 2015 was selected, I thought that was rather weird. Anyway I mentioned it on the forum. There do seem to be a few glitches on the site still.
Sue xxx
I don’t know how I missed this one Sue it a delightful poem bursting with atmospheric lines, so good I can feel the night air, top draw. Best Keith
Hi Keith, thank you for such a kind compliment on the poem, I’m so pleased it came across as I had hoped. I haven’t been on here as much as I had would have liked these last few weeks, my dog and main companion, has been very poorly lately with heart problems in and out of the vets so the fear of possibly losing him, plus the added fear of the costs of treatment my mind has been taken over completely. Sue.