I’m Sorry
You’d probably remember me
As the one who caused you pain
For ‘tho I loved you – I still hurt you
And now sadly I feel shame
I’m sure you must despise me
And I guess you hate my name
But that’s the way that things turned out
And for that I am to blame.
In time gone by you loved me
And I loved you with a fire
You filled me up with happiness
And feelings of desire
But I treated you so badly
I was unsure what to do
Eventually I broke your heart
when I said we were through.
Now years on I am older
Somewhat wiser, somewhat blue
And I find that I spend idle hours
Deep in thought of you
I wonder if you’re happy
Where you go and what you do
And I wonder who now has the love
Back then I shared with you.
I never shall forget you
Or the heartache and the worry
And with that thought its fair to say
I miss you and I’m sorry.
It seem a bit late for this to be make up poetry, but I guess one never knows. A nice sentiment throughout this, you could cut some of the filling words to give it more punch without losing the flow. I think we can all relate to looking back with regret, so its nice to say sorry.
We enjoy inflicting ourselves with feelings of guilt and regret. In the case of your poem I’m not sure about the use of the second person. Yes, they are your thoughts but they would be equally valid in the the third person. After all you don’t where she is so you can’t send her the poem.
I’m going to agree with Savvi, just a few to many unnecessary words that spoil the flow. In saying this it’s still a good poem and I like it.
In friendship
Mike