Fallen Dreams.
There’s no personal meaning in this, it just came to me as I was out with my dog just mooching about in the park behind my house.
Leaves drift down,
mere moments in time
quickly lost,
falling beyond the hand.
Catching our dreams
as they pass,
to lie broken beneath
our feet.
© sweetwater 2023
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I hadn’t even thought of ‘ falling out of reach’, so I have given it a lot of thought now but I think ‘ beyond the hand’ feels you almost caught them but not quite, whereas out of reach makes them sound a lot further away. Does that make sense? Thank you Trevor I am very grateful for your interest and the suggestion you offered, I may well change my mind and use it yet 🙂 I’m beginning to wonder where everyone else has gone, I cannot understand why more people aren’t posting, or even just leaving comments on some… Read more »
broken or crumpling perhaps lie or lay?
Catching our dreams
as they pass,
broken beneath our feet
they lay.
(i liked it very much – had to share my ideas hope you don’t mind – comment edited. )
Thank you, I appreciate your interest and will take another look at the poem. 🙂 Sue.