Seduction in Suburbia
200 words. Flash fiction posted on Droubbles.com
We are on the dance floor at the Café de Paris.
Divorced, she tells me. Widower, I say.
It elicits sympathy – even though it’s not true – and increases the chances of getting my leg over.
We sit at a table and we have a few drinks. I give her the usual spiel, how attractive I find her and, to be honest, she ain’t bad.
I inflate the state of my finances, promise her a ruby ring when I receive my inheritance, and she is putty in my hands.
It isn’t far from the ballroom to a small hotel where Mr. and Mrs. Smith book a room for rest and recuperation.
I sit on the bed and my head feels muzzy; I must have had one too many.
“Give me a few minutes”, I say and she smiles sweetly.
I wake up few hours later and discover that she has gone and so has my wallet.
On the bedside table there is a photograph and note which says: ‘Sorry that I could not wait for your inheritance to come through. I have taken something on account. I have left the picture of your wife; give her my regards.’
© Luigi Pagano 2015
Excellent comeuppance tale. There but for the grace of god… and all that! 😉
Hi, Tony. I would reserve judgement for the time being.
‘Seduction in Suburbia (2)’ might bring about further revelations.
Glad to note part 2 might bring about further revelations because I really got into this piece. I love the way you create an atmospheric situation so quickly and effectively in such a short tale. More please!
That piece was originally titled ‘The Other Side of the Coin’ but I changed it as I thought people would not see the connection. Despite my exhortation no one has commented on it. So perhaps Part 1 should stand on its own merit. Let me know what you think.
I think ‘The Other Side of the Coin’ is a good title, grabbing attention to see what it’s all about. My personal choice would be revert to the original title and combine the two parts – or more. But that’s just me.
Thanks Jezz for your suggestion. As Seduction in Suburbia (1) has been nominated for the Anthology I am reluctant to combine the two but I might revert Part 2 to the original title.