Parkland Tryst
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From the starlit lake
a suggestion of mist
drifts towards the bench
where I sit every time.
I’m slow and often late,
but she forgives me,
graciously as always,
no doubt delighted that
I love the way she models
each year’s grandest dress
and the seductive way
she lets slip its leaves,
yellowed and rustling,
till she’s naked and shivers
as the mist thickens
in the hardening cold.
I would embrace her,
warm her if I could,
but she prefers to wait:
I’ll be hers soon enough.
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© Nemo 2023
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A well-inspired poem very far from a ‘humble effort’.
Thank you, Luigi. But the use of language is simple, unadorned and devoid of metaphor, which is why I have relegated it to the humble division.
The clarity of the language and the absence of obscure metaphors is what appealed to me, Gerald, but then I am a simple soul.
As they say, I don’t know much about Art but I know what I like.
Cheers.
Thanks, Luigi.
How much work have you done on spirituality, Trevor? I wonder if it exists because, like religious belief, the notion of it has been instilled by others or is it there in the air, in the scene, waiting to be picked up? You refer to emotional feeling – if I haven’t shared with you with reference to your Burberry piece – it is because I didn’t pick it up, sorry, maybe a use of language thing. Ah, the Bubble poem, it goes back to my best days but there are plenty more emotive poems on the old UKA posted when… Read more »
Oh I loved every line, every verse of this gorgeous poem. 🙂 Sue.
Thanks, Sue. I got the idea for it after reading Trevor’s idyll poem. Gerald.
I have said before that my comments tend to upset or get taken the wrong way. There was no personal agenda on my part. My poem is not a copy of yours. Yours did inspire to get writing again and gave me the idea of writing about a tryst – with a twist. I am grateful for the inspiration you gave me and I put many hours’ work into the poem. I have often had my inspiration triggered by other people’s work. I genuinely thought you welcomed, nay, even invited, critique of your work. There was a point in time… Read more »
I wasn’t deriding your personal moment – I was.seeking clarification about whethed such moment occur without the prior knowledge of spirituality. Sorry I can’t explain it any better.
I like the poem for its simplicity, I personally do not prefer verbosity of any kind, A very sincere effort, as always.
Many thanks, Supratik. Pleased you liked it.
Gerald