Dualism (Edited)
The view that the world consists of two fundamental entities, such as mind and matter.
We know that Cynthia is extravagant
but that’s not why she wears hot pants;
being a fervid follower of fashion
she’s an admirer of Mrs. Plunket Greene
who’s better known as Mary Quant.
Though the teenager had developed a passion
for the haute couture of Yves Saint Laurent,
those skimpy shorts were an innovation
that transformed the London scene.
The opportunity to show her shapely legs
was a temptation difficult to ignore
and the youngster after some hesitation
did, in the end, succumb to the lure.
But Artemis, her always alert alter ego,
a model of decorum and sobriety
who believes in the correctness of propriety,
is at hand to urge moderation.
The Moon Goddess is a single entity
whether she’s Cynthia or Artemis
but just like Dr. Jekyll and Mr. Hyde
each one has a separate identity:
Cynthia’s is purely corporeal,
The other’s is positively spiritual.
© Luigi Pagano 2020
© ionicus 2023
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Another little gemette!
Your 4th verse is fantastic. But the last one, especially the last 2 lines are forced, and I know where you’re going, and just don’t resonate. Maybe a slight re-ordering would help.
What I was trying to do, and obviously I haven’t succeeded, is to speculate that as in Greek mythology Cynthia and Artemis are a single entity with two different names the personality of the Moon Goddess might also be twofold, corporeal and spiritual.
I’ll try to rewrite the ending.
Thanks for the useful feedback.
I have re-written the final stanza of this surreal poem, Bhi. Hope it resonates more than the previous one.
Luigi, you are a true wordsmith.
I took a shot at further polishing this final stanza
The Moon Goddess is a single entity
whether she’s Cynthia or Artemis
but just like Dr. Jekyll and Mr. Hyde
each one has a separate identity:
Cynthia’s is purely corporeal,
The other’s is positively spiritual.
Bhi
Thanks for chiselling the rough corners, Bhi. Much appreciated.
My pleasure, Luigi. I did not mean to presume; the poetic jewel is absolutely yours.
Bhi
That’s OK, Bhi.I don’t mind suggestions that are useful to improve the style rather than the substance of a poem. There have been instances in the past when a poem was changed in its entirety and that would have annoyed the author who’d be entitled to feel irritated.