Silence that Echoes

 

A silence so stifling, 
Its echoes deafening;
With a shrill sound,
Reverberating around.
When will we awake
From this slumber that we fake?
Until a day when silence will be heard no more,
As it bores through ears, leaving fragments on the floor.
 
 
 
 
 
 

© Gomathi 2020
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Ionicus

Hi Gomathi. I was attracted by the title of your poem as silence was the subject of one of the early poems in my collection “Idle Thoughts”. Here are some points for you to consider: 1) I believe that ‘a surround sound’, which the dictionary describes as “A system of recording and playing back audio that uses four or more separate channels” is not what you meant to use to define the sound of silence. A suitable adjective is needed. 2) Personally, I would transfer the question mark from ‘awake’ to ‘fake’. 3) On the penultimate line I would discard… Read more »

Ionicus

Glad to be of help. Looking forward to your next contributions.
Regards, Luigi x

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