Where is Thy Land?
In darkish fervour;
Tainted moon …
Painted moments,
Gone too soon.
Laugh out loud!
No hand in hand …
Waiting moments,
My aim too proud?
Thy tarnished wings
To challenge sun …
A cry out loud;
Piano sings …
A silent smile,
And eyes turned blue;
To cast a spell …
Let’s pause a while.
Thou lie awake,
In bloom refined …
Of dark and heart;
My senses take!
No words of sand;
No melody …
An eve to trust …
Where is thy land?
“Where is thy land?”, I think you mean.
You’re absolutely right. I need to edit that away…already 🙂 The more archaic part of my mind mistook something important. Thank you for commenting.
Edited. Hopefully ok.
Aye, thou hast made a goodly job of thy editing.
I was hoping my Mimetic Moments to be published today but alas! for some reason the poem was not published, I wonder what happened, not that it was for the poetry challenge, but the poem would become a triptych for the challenge, and I wanted to have the first one (old enough) published before the poetry challenge part.
well done Fred!
Thank you very much indeed.It won’t win the contest for various reasons but as for Me I think it’s one of my finer moments in poetry this year. I wrote it really quick. Scary in a way… 🙂
this is not a contest, it used to be something like a contest, there is no other prize other than selecting a person to continue challenging and even that doesn’t always work or is one of the rules. basically you can just go set a challenge whenever you want. I suppose if there are too many open challenges and people start complaining somebody will become a moderator and set rules.
Diary of Dreams style of music for this one (in my opinion of course), probably needs a male voice. Has gothic vibes.
Thank you. Having a cup of tea I raise my cup for you on that one. Thanks!!!
the lyrics in my opinion again, should come after you find the music, I think it’s wrong the other way around. I think that Pulp worked like that the band found the music Jarvis wrote the lyrics.
yep.
music is more inspiring and should come first.
pms take ages to load so, check this link not the chosen dummies the Great exodus is the one
https://ukauthors.com/2019/01/26/the-great-exodus/