Paid In Full.


Dusk rides in on the heels

of dawn, charcoal etches

dampened boughs,

November’s drapes so early

drawn, pull sullen tears

from roaming mist.

Lost the golden coins

of autumn paid in full

to winters chest.


© sweetwater 2023
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This is a perfect ‘word picture’ of how fast time seems to move, especially when leaving Autumn for the darker season of Winter. It could also describe time passing as we grow older. I liked the evocative language which did not seem strained but flowed nicely.
A very good read, for me. Thank you.


brilliant start “dusk rides on the heel of dawn” leads to an interesting metaphor, winter is charging autumn…

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