Spring Platitudes

Sonnet for two voices

“Never thought he’d do this on a spring day,
not when the house is paid for and us kids
are off his hands; filling time’s easy – hey,
he could have got started on all those weeds!
Today’s most definitely one for getting
out there, for getting stuck in; no sense is
there, just staring through the window, letting
time go by, rather than fix those fences.”

“It’s the bookmark feeling that’s put him out:
flat as a pressed flower in a tiresome book –
like when you open the garden door that
lets in the smell of blossom and sets you back
another year – he’s just marking the last
chapter at the point where people get lost.”



© Nemo 2023
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I like the second half apart from bookmark and book so close together which jars for me. I find the rhythm of this difficult. Don’t know a lot about sonnets other than they tend to read beautifully. I’ve never attempted to comment on your poetry before because whilst I’ve enjoyed bits of them I could never quite fathom clearly what was actually going on. Anyways I just wanted to pop in so you know that at least I’m interested in your stuff. Cheers albert 🙂

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