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Z. wrote a poem about a man
Who sat not to write poems
But to message with the world.
She, of course, nailed it.
I did an interview for the local
Paper, The Daily Leader.
The reporter asked why I wrote.
I said to find people like me.
My poems are messages,
Put into bottles, thrown out beyond
The breakers, as far as I can.
So I have watched, waited,
For her who has fished a bottle
From the sea, at my door,
Come to return a poem to me.
© slovitt 2023
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Knock knock
Open the door! I’m standing here, seaweed in my hair, carrying a bottle
Your poetry always has a personal touch that speaks to the reader.
Alison x
hand me the bottle, get out of those wet clothes, i’ll pour us a couple of cocktails and stoke the fire. there’s nothing like the gleam of a wolf’s eyes in firelight.
nice edits I still think, however, your mentioning the book title etc those lines are utterly redundant lengthening the poem unnecessarily thus losing the great sentiment compact thoughts have without this in my humble opinion pointless interval. You wrote a poem about a man Who didn’t sit to write poems, But to message with the world. You, of course, intuited correctly. I did an interview for the local Paper, THE DAILY LEADER, The reporter asked why I wrote. I said I’ve spent a lot of years Searching for people like me. My poems are messages, Put into bottles, thrown out… Read more »
one is always fortunate to have a reader who is willing to brave the poet’s opinion to restate their case. thank you. i will take your suggestion under consideration, and sit with it. i think the title of the book establishes a certain validity/identity of he who is messaging with the world. not just a scribbler but one who for better-or-worse has been serious about his missives to the world.
a) the Daily Leader from what I see has a nice big very functional updated site at least, and I doubt that there are many local papers that bother with just internet writers called by a professor here “grafiades tou diadiktyou” “scribblers of the web” who never published their work that there isn’t a single hard copy available. the name of the paper the fact you were interviewed are more than enough but b) you could just say “for one of my books” since/and by the time let’s say a future reader reads this poem in 2145 it would then… Read more »
as a reader i would ask “why is he being interviewed?” thus i supplied the info, always looking for clarity. not interested in a reader having to research anything to fully get my poem, to be stumbled unnecessarily. i want to skip to the heart of the matter.
“distressful thing” is puzzling to me. simple info getting ready for the final lines. anyway,
don’t see or share your concerns. thanks for your engagement.
I did an interview for a local
Paper for my second book
The reporter asked why I wrote.
it’s more than enough.
it was an engaging poem.
you’re welcome. bye
I enjoyed the read uncritically, accepting that’s what you wanted to express. A poem about a non-poetry writer?
Quite novel! (Pun intended) :-).
just seeing this, last 4 lines revised. thanks for reading Pronto, Swep