Asylum
Back with the morning,
white-coated greetings,
stinging questions,
drone straight at me,
then swarm past,
turmoil in their wake,
a whirlpool of noise,
muddying the air,
spinning, sucking me
into its still-centre
of thrumming silence;
and I curl myself up
in my rolled-up vacuum,
my solitary
where I hang out my days,
one by one, back turned
to the here-and-now
peeping in, rattling keys.
Still, after the pills,
a nightingale sings;
the trees have sparkles
in their hair;
wide-armed, I can
inhale the world,
roam knee-deep in darkness,
and be myself till dawn.
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© Nemo 2023
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hi, i liked it very much
Thank you for finding this and commenting. I’m pleased you liked it. Many thanks, if it was you, for the nomination. Or thanks to whoever.
I think you need a comma after ‘roam’ in the last couple of lines.
Thanks for the suggestion. I don’t think a comma would add anything. ‘Knee-deep in darkness’ is an adverbial phrase and we don’t normally separate the verb from an adverb, do we? For instance, we say ‘fall over heels in love’ and don’t put a comma after fall, do we?