December Mission – 3 linked Haiku



Pine sharp resin tang
Hazy slice of winter sun
Cruel axe biting

Snow crunched dragging
Sibilant whispers wind borne
Smiling assassins

Clear points of pure light
Single bright star paramount
Carnage justified.

© ellieg 2023
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True to the haiku resolutions – very clever.

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Ellie, just returning from holidays so I’m very late in getting back to your poem, as promised. But YOU, at least, already know I thought this a great first attempt at a poem, let alone one written using a haiku format! Very good on meeting the challenge of three connecting haiku that form a continued ‘story’ or conceit. And it is a conceit I thought delightfully clever and well developed. Your title really made your meaning/intent clear to me, and that pleases too. Admire your poetic inner ear in its use of repetitive vowels and consonants as well as lovely… Read more »

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