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Silhouettes revealed in the stark moonlight
Ancient ruins heavy with memories from a different life
Haunted halls and corridors where once you had walked your dark night
Endless, or so you thought, an existence of bitterness, ridden with strife
Crafted beauty its architectural splendour fallen into decay
Its heartrending voice a piercing melody, an echoing sorrow
The fortress reveals its face once again with the failing of day
Tears mingle with the pelting rain as you fall to your knees from the torture you borrow
Its smile, the smile of an old friend inviting you to play
Break the cycle your emptiness craves lest you find yourself here tomorrow
© Raistlinrev 2023
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Hi There, I LOVED the feeling this gave me. I entered the moonlight and the energy of the poem. Atmospheric. A voice of authority, wisdom and chastisement. Some small alterations. needing apostrophes …its to it’s (belonging to it) see below 😉 Home Silhouettes revealed in the stark moonlight Ancient ruins heavy with memories from a different life Haunted halls and corridors where once you had walked your dark night Endless, or so you thought, an existence of bitterness, ridden with strife Crafted beauty its architectural splendour fallen into decay It (‘) s heartrending voice a piercing melody, an echoing sorrow… Read more »
Thank you I wrote a reply and it didn’t. Save. I appreciate the help. I’ve been speaking German for the better part of my life and I was under the impression that: it is = it’s and belonging to is its. Thank you for the corrections.
Know for certain now after a little research. Belonging to- its, has no apostrophe. But thanks for the advice on the last line.