Something needs fixing to see the poem but if I click on 2 I get the poem shown below, I need to read this a few more times but you have some very strong lines that kept me fully engaged as a reader, your use of language is bold and bright, even uplifting. Great work with the internal rhymes and a super piece of free verse. You obviously know what you are doing so please take my comments on your other poem with a pinch of salt. Best Keith The Doom of Vigilance Visions of the seeress: A poem that’s… Read more »
Thank you Keith I don’t always know what I’m doing but out it comes and usually it works out. I try to create very different pieces. I’m surprised you would say uplifting though for I deem this to be an extremely dark poem. Thank you. Dave.
Yes poor choice of word on my part, stirring would have been better, but it does depend on perspective I was referring to the style you write in rather than topic, and what undreamt steed will carry you my king etc.
Oh dear. You must have deleted this. Welcome to the site. It takes time to get to know the ropes but please resubmit again.
Alison x
Yes it’s on page 2 for some reason and I can’t actually see the artwork I included. I’ll get there.
The issues been fixed I hope. Dave.
Something needs fixing to see the poem but if I click on 2 I get the poem shown below, I need to read this a few more times but you have some very strong lines that kept me fully engaged as a reader, your use of language is bold and bright, even uplifting. Great work with the internal rhymes and a super piece of free verse. You obviously know what you are doing so please take my comments on your other poem with a pinch of salt. Best Keith The Doom of Vigilance Visions of the seeress: A poem that’s… Read more »
Thank you Keith I don’t always know what I’m doing but out it comes and usually it works out. I try to create very different pieces. I’m surprised you would say uplifting though for I deem this to be an extremely dark poem. Thank you. Dave.
Yes poor choice of word on my part, stirring would have been better, but it does depend on perspective I was referring to the style you write in rather than topic, and what undreamt steed will carry you my king etc.
Ok I see. A misunderstanding on my part. Thankyou.