Summer’s Love.

Just trying out different layout.


Come, solstice sun

come loose these chains

set free this winter-mind,

let flow those streams

of spring’s delight,

to purify the soul.

 

Then wrap me round in

night’s embrace, enfold

in velvet sighs,

there whisper songs

of my love’s heart

and call him close

to me.

© sweetwater 2020
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TheRecluse

Another of your brief and beautiful gems, Sue, and you’re quite unique on here in penning this type of poetic verse. Congrats on centring, which is as it should be. (If you go in edit and place the cursor marker at the end of that line, and then BACKSPACE once, and then ENTER three times, it will look more balanced?). Should it be ‘to my love’s heart’ ?
Anyway, loved it. Reading your poems Sue, I feel you have a contented, peaceful life philosophy, even if you had to resign yourself to it after many setbacks.
Trevor x

Gerry

Sue I have just sensed pain in one of goth’s poems – and now I sense it in this… Or have I had too much sun today in my beautiful garden ?
gerry x.

Jolen

Some lovely images here and it reads as delicately and sensual as the words you’ve chosen.
blessings,
jolen

Savvi

I like the layout it works really well with the short lines. Your poem is both beautiful and sensual Sue, a delight to read. Keith

Shackleton

Sad and wistful, but like a soft summer breeze, Sue. Enjoyed the read. regards, Mick.

Whale

This is good but a bit too sweet for my taste. It’s a woman’s overflowing emotions. I like emotions contained within the cup and not brimming over. Did your songwriter get to whisper his songs in your ear?

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