Dark Dreamer.

Just jotting a few lines down and I arrived here.


All things wild

are dancing,

dancing where 

the night winds

haunt,

 

to carry dreams

across the sky,

in folds

of midnight’s

blue,

 

there capture

you with sirens

song,

and bind within

a silver cage.

 

To be forever

mine.

© sweetwater 2020
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Mikeverdi

Nothing wrong with words Sue, not keen on the lay out.
Mike XxX

Mikeverdi

All things wild are dancing,
dancing where
the night winds haunt,

to carry dreams across the sky,
in folds of midnight’s blue.

There capture you
with sirens song, and bind within
a silver cage.

To be forever
mine.

this was centered when I posted it, cant seem to work the new system.

Savvi

Re layout- Just a suggestion Sue.
Re Poem- I like the feeling of abandonment that suddenly becomes trapped, it made me think of Meet Joe Black when William Parish says to his daughter “I want you to sing with rapture and dance like a dervish” enjoyed Keith

All things wild are dancing, dancing
where the night winds haunt,
to carry dreams across the sky,

in folds of midnight’s blue,
there capture you with sirens song,
and bind within a silver cage.

To be forever mine

Capricorn

Lovely imagery in this Sue. I do quite like Keith’s suggestion for layout too.
Eira

Whale

Are you still thinking of the songster in this poem? I don’t know why you break into the rhythm with your format. Why not
‘All things wild are dancing,
dancing where the night winds haunt,’

Your images confuse me. Maybe I’m just not able to understand your metaphors, but I wonder if you can indeed capture anyone in a siren’s song, whether in the folds of midnight blue or not, and put him in a silver cage. Silver cage is too solid. Am I being too pragmatic? if so, pay no attention to me.

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