April Day.
It was a beautiful warm dawn, promising a lovely day…
The day rose with beauty
a smile blossomed
with the dawning,
yet held a hint of cruelty
within the beating
of her heart.
Harsh were words
upon her breath
and mighty fell her
swords of ice
as dawn dissolved
to grey.
© sweetwater 2020
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Very descriptive of a typical April day, I liked it 😉
Gerry.
Thank you :-). Sue.
Yes, that’s how the weather is here now during this season switchover period, Sue. The mornings open at dawn with a crimson horizon as night clouds float off away behind us. But, then comes cloud pushed in rapidly by the north wind, snowy-rain, and hail-stones; Winter’s not finished yet! Another little poetic gem in your inimitable style. A soothing lozenge on the dry tongue!
Trevor
Hi Trevor, I think those must be the most poetic opening lines of a comment I have had they are lovely, thank you so much 🙂
And then you compare it to a dry lozenge hehe love it.
Seriously though, thank you for commenting I’m pleased you liked it, I always hesitate when it’s ‘another’ nature one. Sue.
I like this very much, but may I suggest a full stop after “heart” (and upper case H on “Harsh”). The poem reads as two sentences, so make the punctuation fit that? Very descriptive of the weather here this last week! Elfstone
Thank you Elfstone, I’d been messing about with that on and off and still hadn’t really decided, so I appreciate your suggestion and will amend.
I’m hopeful May will be more favourable. 🙂 Sue.