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Well-written and gripping. You made the reader feel some empathy for the main character even though he is impulsive and dangerous. The other reviewers made valid points re details, apostrophes etc, but I would also say that I would have liked this story to have been longer. In fact, I think you have a strong enough character for something novelette-length if that was where you wanted to take it.

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