Time Falls Cold.
I woke up with this in my head. It’s personal, think emotion rather than nature.
The day blinks dark…
Winter sets in long before
its time.
Bitter winds circle through
the hours, as ice begins to form
around your heart, once more.
Time falls short as winter runs
her race. I have no wish
to travel cold about the past.
I wonder if spring will
hold the key, but I fear
it will be too late.
© sweetwater 2023
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Quite a sense of foreboding in this, Sue.
My daughter took exception to something I said, shut me out of her family for months, just got back on track, then a throwaway ironic comment to a friend on line about babysitting,and here we go again. When one passes 60 the future is never certain, and do I really need her policing everything I say to decide if I can still see the young grandchildren. That’s why I added the last verse. Many thanks, I appreciate you commenting 🙂 Sue.
Thank you very much Trevor, I didn’t dare write it straightforwardly in case she saw it somewhere, I’m getting paranoid now! 😉 Don McLean’s long time (ex) girlfriend from the early 80’s friended me ages ago and we were talking about me riding with other rockers and her hanging out with The Kinks and other top groups ( not as a groupie I hasten to add ) I said ‘ Its not really my thing’ but I’m off to babysit. I saw Lol in my mind, as it was so different from our conversation. But unfortunately… I am really happy… Read more »
It was because I always stuck up for him online whenever he was verbally attacked for his behaviour, I suppose my name got recognised, and out of the blue a marriage therapist who has known the whole family as a friend since Jackie Lee and Wyatt were born contacted me and sent me several messages explaining the situation and why in his opinion it had gone wrong. Then Don’s ex girlfriend messaged me, saying she had been talking to the therapist generally and I was mentioned so she contacted me too. And it went from there. Plus I’ve spoken online… Read more »
Such personal words are beyond critique, just to say I’m so pleased with the way you have taken to poetry. You express your feelings so well now Sue. We all need critique from time to time, it’s pleasing that you, like me, can be so receptive.
Mike XxX