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The Kindling (posted on: 24-02-14)
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My mother is an installation artist, an origami expert folding yesterday's newspapers. She places them in the grate swept clean of ash and cinder. Dry sticks balance like acrobats, shiny coal nuggets take centre stage. Later father will return from work, fetch the toasting fork. The room will fill with scents, with laughter and family, each of us unaware of what is to come, how the wind quickens and mother sits alone listening to the rain.
Archived comments for The Kindling
Ionicus on 24-02-2014
The Kindling
I very much enjoyed this highly original poem, Leila. Taking inspiration from a simple, mundane task was a stroke of genius. Well done.

Author's Reply:
Thank you very much Luigi, you are very generous with your comments. It is indeed the simplest of tasks that inspired the poem...Leila

e-griff on 24-02-2014
The Kindling
Nice evocative poem - my mum too!

Author's Reply:
Thanks e-griff, I am glad it stirred that memory...Leila

barenib on 24-02-2014
The Kindling
Excellent poem that conjures up a lot in a small space and I keep wanting to return to it to read it again! John x

Author's Reply:
Thank you John it's a pleasure to see your name here, couldn't wish for more that you want to read it again. Keep well...Leila

Mikeverdi on 24-02-2014
The Kindling
Beautifully written and composed, the memory box opened and there it was; just as you have said. I understand their may have been more for you, reading the ending; this was touchingly covered. I loved this poem.
Mike

Author's Reply:
Thanks Mike what a lovely comment, I write a lot about my mum who was sadly widowed very young, which of course leads to a different kind of life for all involved. Leila

Slovitt on 24-02-2014
The Kindling
Leila: very strong. had a thought about the very strong imagery to close your poem, to your attention

how the wind will quicken
and mother sit alone listening
to the rain.

i know there is a "will" shortly before but as i said a thought. very good poem. swep

Author's Reply:
Swep, very much appreciate your thoughts on this and once upon a time it was indeed as you write it and then changed for the exact reason you give...the will in a previous line. However I will ponder on it now you have brought it again to my attention. I am delighted you found it strong...Leila

franciman on 24-02-2014
The Kindling
Hi Leila,
Beautiful verse. I love how you put the fire at the centre of family life, where it was to be sure. Then the emptiness at the centre is there for all to see.
Evocative, endearing, and ultimately sad.
cheers,
Jim

Author's Reply:
Jim, thanks so much for reading this and for your generous and thoughtful words, I am very pleased you enjoyed the poem...Leila



ifyouplease on 24-02-2014
The Kindling
very very good Leila


Author's Reply:
Thank you very much for reading and I am really glad you liked the poem...Leila

Tasha-ann on 24-02-2014
The Kindling
I really like this πŸ™‚

Author's Reply:
Thank you very much Tasha-ann, glad you liked it...Leila

Nemo on 24-02-2014
The Kindling
I love the sweep of this, from the everyday to something implied. I remember those fires, too. Lovely.
Gerald.

Author's Reply:
Thank you Gerald for reading and lovely to hear you enjoyed the poem and that it held memories for you too...Leila

pommer on 24-02-2014
The Kindling
What a beautifully composed poem with such feeling.Loved it. Peter

Author's Reply:
Thank you Peter for taking time to read this and for leaving this great comment, I am so happy you liked the poem...Leila

ValDohren on 24-02-2014
The Kindling
Beautiful Leila, brings back memories both happy and sad, just as the poem is meant to convey. Congrats on the nib and nom.
Val

Author's Reply:
Thanks Val for reading this and your kind comment, and glad you felt the connection to the poem...Leila

Kipper on 24-02-2014
The Kindling
Hi Leila
Been missing for a little while; glad I am back in time for this. How I remember the old Yorkshire grate and the paper spirals. The toast and the warm slippers. My siblings and parents happy, despite the uncertain future. Most of them gone now but your poem brought them back for a little while.
Thank you for that.
Michael

Author's Reply:
Thank you very much Michael, that's a lovely comment. I just had a quick look on your website and mini blog, you have recorded some special memories of your own there...Leila

chant_z on 24-02-2014
The Kindling
This seems like an out of the ordinary piece. Intelligent write leaving me with no more to add...:)

Author's Reply:
Thank you very much for reading the poem and taking time to leave your positive comment...Leila

stormwolf on 25-02-2014
The Kindling
Hi Leila
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I think this brings memories back for many of us.
However, the poem is skilled in its portrayal of the deeper issues, that's what makes great poetry.
We had the same but sadly my memories of round the fire were of my father being grumpy, moody and my mum finally being free in her grief.

Alison x

Author's Reply:
Thanks Alison for this thoughtful and very positive response, and yes of course some will have happier memories than others. I am sorry to hear your memories are sad...Leila x

jdm4454 on 25-02-2014
The Kindling
I really like this---a Norman Rockwell painting...thanks for the read........jim

Author's Reply:
Thank you Jim for that lovely comment...yes everyday scenarios for sure...Leila

Slovitt on 26-02-2014
The Kindling
okay, too good a poem not to continue, how about

the room fill with scents,
with laughter and family, each
of us unaware what is to come,
the wind will quicken
and mother left alone, to listen
to the rain.

Author's Reply:
Dear Swep, thank you so much for giving the poem such consideration, I like this idea, I also liked the first thought of putting the 'will' back in...much to consider and all helpful for the revision of the work...especially if there is a 3rd book. With many thanks...Leila

Buschell on 26-02-2014
The Kindling
Leila, you and Swep are the dog's dangly bits! Your words paint a thousand pictures of bliss. Dazza.

Author's Reply:
And your comments are always a joy, thank you for reading and this smile...Leila

ruadh on 02-03-2014
The Kindling
Beautiful Leila

Author's Reply:
ah, so pleased you thought so, thanks for stopping by and hope all is well with you...Leila

Kat on 02-03-2014
The Kindling
Beautiful. Can say no more.

Kat x

Author's Reply:
Thanks Kat x

amman on 30-04-2014
The Kindling
Hi Leila.
I almost missed this one which would have been inexcusable. Great imagery showing a nostalgic snapshot of family life, leavened with underlying sadness in the last three lines. No changes necessary; it's perfect as is.
Thank you. I'm inspired to start writing again.
Regards.
Tony.

Author's Reply:
Thank you Tony, that's a lovely comment and I am grateful for your words. If the poem has inspired you to get back to writing then I'm delighted. Best regards, Leila.

chant_z on 30-04-2014
The Kindling
Very "fine tuned" (so to speak). I could make use of a great deal more than 80 words commenting this really. The wording for example is very fine and everything. Delicate write throughout. I discovered that I've already commented on it (woops) but well, I had to add something



Fred

Author's Reply:
Fred, absolutely delighted that you commented for a second time with such positivity and good words, thank you very much. Leila


After Rain (posted on: 16-08-13)
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Pavements run to pools of neglect or regret he walks without an anchor A blind date and thirty years in the bed he made and the home she created Now he is sea-sprung slamming into walls wading through doors His heart pressed against a window the rain drove him out to pavement walk At two in the morning not drunk but in need of a drink in need of an ocean, the anchor still in it.
Archived comments for After Rain
Weefatfella on 16-08-2013
After Rain
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Hi Leila.
Very visual this.
I'm not a poet but I like this style of quick visual instructions.
Not many words but very precise in the choosing to relate emotion and the tale.
I enjoyed this.
Weefatfella.

Author's Reply:
Many thanks for your kind words and glad you enjoyed the poem. I've had a bit of a problem trying to get on the site to reply or comment, anyway thanks again...Leila

Bozzz on 17-08-2013
After Rain
You have the drifter to a t - good lines "In need of an ocean, the anchor still in it"... Like it ...Bozzz

Author's Reply:
Cheers and thank you for reading and taking time to leave your positive comment, much appreciated...Leila

amman on 18-08-2013
After Rain
Hi Leila. The almost staccato delivery of your words conveys a stark restlessness. The nautical theme throughout the poem is very effective. I like this a lot. thank you for showing that less is often better than more.
Regards and welcome back.


Author's Reply:
Many thanks amman for the welcome back and the positive response to reading the poem, I am definitely a less is more writer, good wishes Leila

ValDohren on 18-08-2013
After Rain
Excellent Leila - I'm trying my hand at the 'less is more' kinda write, and this one is a great example.
Val

Author's Reply:
Thanks Val for taking the time to read and comment, your words are kind and I appreciate them...good luck with the less is more approach...Leila

Ionicus on 18-08-2013
After Rain
An excellent contribution. The 'Great Read' label and the anthology nomination complement the second prize deservedly awarded in the poetry competition.
Congratulations on your success.

Author's Reply:
Thanks Luigi you are as ever most generous with your reading and comments...Leila

orangedream on 18-08-2013
After Rain
Ditto, Leila. Well deserving of its accolades;-)



Tina

Author's Reply:
Thanks Tina, appreciate you took the time to read and leave your kind words...Leila

anth2014ed on 04-09-2013
After Rain
sorry this is not a comment, but could you provide permission for work to go in the Anth (see forums and FP)

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Buschell on 29-10-2013
After Rain
Leila, an old friend (Dazza) told me about you. He was right.

Author's Reply:
Oh dear sorry, I do apologise, I was certain I had responded but my response may be somewhere in the ether. Thank you for reading and a big hi to Dazza. Leila

Buschell on 29-10-2013
After Rain
Leila, an old friend (Dazza) told me about you. He was right.

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Looking at Jane Morris (posted on: 19-03-12)
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I have no blue silk dress no figure or face to tempt an artist there is no photograph of me at birth none with my father an Enniskillen man post war master butcher whose hands boned and dressed dead flesh planted choruses of daffodils to chant their cosmic mantra scooped an impatient daughter on to his knee slowing time hiding an open wound. At six a funeral is putting on your best clothes Hail Marys watching the door.
Archived comments for Looking at Jane Morris
Andrea on 19-03-2012
Looking at Jane Morris
Love the pre-Raphaelites (particularly Rossetti) and JM was very beautiful, as is your poem. And it's lovely to see you posting again!

Author's Reply:
Hi Andrea I am overwhelmed and overjoyed at the responses to this poem and I thank you for yours. I too love the pre-Raphaelites. Thanks for the lovely words, as I have often said of late I don't like to post if I don't have the time to comment on other poet's work that's what the site has always been about for me, reading and supporting each other. I look forward to responding to all the comments here...Leila x

stormwolf on 19-03-2012
Looking at Jane Morris
Hi Leila
yes, it's great to read you again.
This poem has so much in it I had to read it several times. It is economy of words that speak volumes, the mark of a true poet.
Alison x

Author's Reply:
Hi Alison you are as ever very generous with your commenting and I am very happy to read your good thoughts on this poem...Leila x

bluepootle on 19-03-2012
Looking at Jane Morris
Hi Leila - I really enjoyed this too. Beautifully put together.

Author's Reply:
Hi bluepootle great to hear from you, I am delighted you stopped by and left a comment, many thanks...Leila

orangedream on 19-03-2012
Looking at Jane Morris
Hi there, Leila;-)

Fantastic!

Tina

Author's Reply:
Hi Tina lovely to hear from you again and many thanks for commenting, I am glad you liked this...Leila

Bradene on 19-03-2012
Looking at Jane Morris
Hi Leila Beautiful poetry, compliments Rossetti's Blue Silk Dress very well. I also loved the portrait of Jane morris when she ws an older woman by Evelyn de Morgan. Great work. Valx

Author's Reply:
Hi Val I do hope you are keeping well. I know the portrait you are speaking of, Jane Morris was beautiful wasn't she and what we know of her makes interesting reading. It was while looking at the Blue Silk Dress that this poem came and I am thrilled you think it beautiful, many thanks... Leila x

sunken on 19-03-2012
Looking at Jane Morris
Hello Ms. Leila. What can I say that hasn't already been said? Mushrooms are more closely related to humans than they are to plants, perhaps. I bet no one has said that yet? It's true by the way. Just saying is all. So glad you got nibbed for this. Had the nib fairy failed in her duty I would have kicked up a right fuss. I have, in the past, been known to post dog poo through her letterbox for failing to nib pieces that both Bernard and myself have thought deserving. We make quite a team. Bernard shits, I post. Ahem. This comment is going tits up already. I shall just say that your poem has class stamped all over it. Well done on the nib and nom. Commiserations on the Bernard. He is insistent though. He just likes to be seen in all the best places. And this is currently one of the very best places, in a comment box beneath a poem by your good self.

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Author's Reply:
Ha ha sunken great to hear from you and to receive the top accolade of a Bernard. You are a star and no mistake and now you have got me thinking very seriously about mushrooms...should I be worried. Perhaps I should ask Unkle Munky. Loving your new website and blog by the way...thank you for being here...Leila

ruadh on 19-03-2012
Looking at Jane Morris
Wonderful piece Leila

Author's Reply:
Thanks ruadh great to have your support on this piece, many thanks...Leila

amman on 20-03-2012
Looking at Jane Morris
Hello Leila..Nice to meet ya, so to speak.
So that's how real poetry is composed;
'planted choruses of daffodils
to chant their cosmic mantra'.
love it.

Author's Reply:
Hello there and good to meet you too, thanks very much for popping by for a read and leaving a lovely comment...I think your current poem is very real and well written and I look forward to reading more of your work...Leila

Ionicus on 20-03-2012
Looking at Jane Morris
How can I fail to add my name to the other accolades? Nicely done.
I would have liked to see the painting with the poem but I am not complaining.

Luigi x

Author's Reply:
Well thank you very much Luigi it is always a delight to find your name in the commenting box...I am not very good with technical stuff but you can google the painting The Blue Silk Dress by Dante Gabriel Rossetti...it was while looking at it that the first lines of the poem came and of course as I said to Val we don't really know much about her childhood except that the family would have been very poor...and it just got me thinking of my own childhood and so a poem was born...Leila x

ChairmanWow on 20-03-2012
Looking at Jane Morris
This poem evokes much in its compressed space. Impressive economy and grace, great work.

Ralph

Author's Reply:
Hello Ralph your words here are much appreciated, thank you very much for taking the time to read the poem and post your thoughts...Leila


Tree Alphabet (posted on: 17-10-11)
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Sun tap taps through skeletal trees like some morse code of strange contentment- if such a thing exists The bus snakes through small villages familiar landscapes soften to still heartpain My past etched on broad oak and pine the road turns to Findhorn Bay- the year we rented the sea blue caravan We ate less than sparrows blamed everything on the wind and on endless moon-shaped walks you taught me the Ogham alphabet You said this will be our secret language, the language of trees and as each day closed we spoke in birch, willow and rowan.
Archived comments for Tree Alphabet
sunken on 17-10-2011
Tree Alphabet
Hello Ms. Leila. Good to see you back on Uka. And what a piece to return with! You're in a class of your own. I was once in a class of my own - Detention. It's not the same thing is it?
A truly smashing poem. Full of longing for past happiness. If this doesn't get nibbed I'll eat my window cleaner's hat. I'm not eating my own as itt's taken me ages to procure one that fits me properly. I have a small head you see. Well I think I do. This isn't important. Well done!

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Author's Reply:
Dear Sunken it is worth posting a poem just to receive a comment from you. I am so glad you do not have to eat your window cleaner's hat because I was wondering how you would obtain said hat and worry that it might involve ladders and broken bones!!

Thanks again Sunken and Bernard and thanks to the nibber and the nomer?...Leila

Ionicus on 17-10-2011
Tree Alphabet
You have performed a kind of magic with your own individual Ogham alphabet. Well done on the nomination.

Luigi x

Author's Reply:
Luigi what a lovely comment I am grateful for your kind words and glad you liked the poem...Leila

Kat on 17-10-2011
Tree Alphabet
Hi Leila

This poem is indeed in a class of its own. I love any mention of Findhorn Bay. It makes me think of Mike Scott (The Waterboys) who wrote some great songs after being there on retreat.

I can't critique this in any way - it's just too classy.

Kat x

Author's Reply:
Dear Kat how lovely to find another old friend here! Thank you so much for reading and taking time to comment. Yes of course you are right about Mike, sadly he recently sold his house in Findhorn but I am sure he will return to visit in the future. He has been touring with his new work, amazing stuff he has created the music to and recorded a selection of poems by Yeats.
Hope this finds you well and writing...Leila x

stormwolf on 20-10-2011
Tree Alphabet
Absolutely beautiful. The last line is so poignant suggesting all the emotions from passion to intimacy to even sadness.
I see it all very clearly being well aquainted with Findhorn and the magical qualities of the land.
The feeling in the poem to me is of deep reverie, almost sadness.
I felt I was with you on the bus.
Alison x
well deserving of the nomination

Author's Reply:
hello Alison what a lovely thoughtful comment, I appreciate it very much. I am so happy you can make the connection to Findhorn and to my poem. I am so pleased the last line suggested all of those emotions, it was what I hoped for, you are a generous reader. Leila x

Buschell on 28-02-2014
Tree Alphabet
Leila, you tug at the most primeval of pangs, the deep seated need to belong, the muzzy mash up that is a matter of life and death for us all. You always take me on the scenic route....Dazza.

Author's Reply:
The most fabulous poetic comment, thank you Dazza...Leila


Life waits inside us (posted on: 29-11-10)
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Like a Sunday morning peeling back light to find a winter sky drowned by dull rain and driftwood stars gathered at the window, you think perhaps you should let them in, these damp stars, that once you wished upon on another Sunday, summer huddled in the dunes moulded skin to skin to your midnight lover, no, close the curtains stop and think how long it takes for stars to dry out to cease their drip, drip, drip.
Archived comments for Life waits inside us
littleditty on 29-11-2010
Life waits inside us
leeeeiiiiiiiiiiiiila -nice! like the slow turn from a stary night poem to the damp drippy stars, leila style - makes a big poem turn in a few easy light lines - how long before they dry out? I'm going to be thinking -good way to leave a poem -good to read a poem by you again Ms Leila - ditty xx

Author's Reply:
ah littleditty what a pleasure to see your name here with the first comment and thank you very much for the good words, much appreciated, Leila x

Gee on 29-11-2010
Life waits inside us
Your poetry always makes me stop and think and this one is no different. Beautifully expressed as always, Leila.

Author's Reply:
Dear Gee you are very kind, thanks for reading and the lovely comment, Leila

pdemitchell on 29-11-2010
Life waits inside us
Damn those drippy stars! A rare gem and well writ Leila - very atmospheric with a wistful nod to the odd sweaty dune. I enjoyed greatly. Where's the NIB-nurse! Mitch

Author's Reply:
Hi Mitch you magicked a nib -nurse, thanks to the nibbing person and a big thanks to you too for taking time to read the poem and your positive comment...Leila

Ionicus on 29-11-2010
Life waits inside us
This is indeed a gem, dear Leila, and rare insofar as we had to wait six months for it. Where have you been all this time? I hope you are well.

Luigi x

Author's Reply:
Hi Luigi you are generous reader and thank you for dropping in here...yes where has that six months gone...another crazy year whizzing by and I never seem to catch up! I am always dipping in and out of UKA though, keeping up with the poetry well trying too. I've been a member here so long it does feel like home among old friends...Leila x

Corin on 29-11-2010
Life waits inside us
Congratulations on the Great Read Recommendation Leila - Well deserved.

Wonderful images - Wet Sunday morning in Winter contrasted with a warm starry night on the dunes - If that was the cause of the love within I hope all goes well:-)

David


Author's Reply:
David many thanks for reading this poem and the warmth of your comment, much appreciated...Leila

Bradene on 29-11-2010
Life waits inside us
Love this image Leila. Wonderful poetry, we don't see enough of your work these days. Love Valx

Author's Reply:
Thanks Val you are very kind, I do still read most of the poems every week but haven't had much time lately for commenting, and I don't like to post my own poems if I don't have time to comment on other people's. I have to say Val you are consistently producing great poetry that is a pleasure to read. I trust you are keeping well at the moment...Leila x

teifii on 01-12-2010
Life waits inside us
Marvellous imagery, especially for me the first two lines. Lovely poem and I like the ambiguity of the ending.
Daff

Author's Reply:
Hello Daff I hope your well what's the weather like there? We have had so much snow here in the Highlands! Thanks so much for reading the poem and leaving such a great comment, I'm delighted you enjoyed it...Leila

ifyouplease on 01-12-2010
Life waits inside us
very interesting Leila and composed.

Author's Reply:
Hey Nic how are you, well I hope great to find you popped along and left a comment, thanks, I will have to read through your postings under 'if you please'...best wishes Leila

stormwolf on 05-12-2010
Life waits inside us
Hello Leila,
I found this very expressive and captured the deep feeling of despair and desolation wonderfully well.
Alison x

Author's Reply:
Hi Alison thanks so much for reading this and all your good words, much appreciated ...Leila x

e-griff on 05-12-2010
Life waits inside us
well, this is indeed lovely! For me, the imagery of driftwood stars/rain/damp/dim/cold compared with light/sun/beach is very good indeed.

'peeling back light' is a great way to say it gets dark, revealing the stars. One thing only, I couldn't fit the 'morning' in.

Author's Reply:
Hi John thanks for stopping by with your positive thoughts on this one...really pleased the imagery worked...re the morning...the thought is you wake with expectation...
Like a Sunday morning
peeling back light (to reveal)...

and the stars are 'driftwood stars'...
hope that helps a little with the idea behind the poem...Leila







sunken on 12-12-2010
Life waits inside us
Great to see a sub from you again, Leila. And what a sub. As with all your work, it oozes class. It's been too long. Luigi has even been counting the months. He's Italian ya know? They're big on counting. They also like pizza. Granted, this has nothing to do with your poem. You wouldn't really expect in-depth crit from a sunk tho, would you? A truly great read. Well done on the nib. Sorry about the Beagle.

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Author's Reply:
Hello Sunken...it's always great to see your name come up with a comment because I know you are going to make me smile...so thank you for this and woof to Bernard. When are we going to see a much needed sub from your good self I am certain Luigi, me and many UKA'ers are counting the months and hoping it won't be too long...Leila






anth2011ed on 30-04-2011
Life waits inside us
Leila, sorry to intrude, but can you send your permission and bio for the 2011/2012 Anth pse?

- Details Here

Author's Reply:
oops sorry just seen this...sorry Andrea!!!

Kat on 02-11-2011
Life waits inside us
The title really says it all, for me, and I just love how this segues from line to line, so smoothly, from start to finish. The last 2 lines are particularly effective.

Kat x

Author's Reply:
Thanks Kat for such positive feedback means a lot to me...Leila x


What hands will do (posted on: 24-05-10)
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Is this how it was meant to be- an impossible ending with no goodbye no hands waving no last minute grasp no skin on skin no wrap around of can't let go I want to turn the clock - one second before the beginning to feel that spark when you reached out to me and I reached right back.
Archived comments for What hands will do
pdemitchell on 24-05-2010
What hands will do
A heartfelt stanza and no mistake that felt as though it could have been longer still. Normally split sentence-lines like "out to me and I" fail horribly but not in this case. Brief but enjoyable! Mitch πŸ™‚

Author's Reply:
Hi Mitch thanks very much for reading this and your positive comment, glad you enjoyed it...Leila

e-griff on 25-05-2010
What hands will do
interesting poem, lots of feeling - nothing to offer from me on the technique or words. However, being of adjacent' mind, I wondered how much the poem wold be altered if the last line were changed to:

... and I
withdrew.

*mischievous chuckle* πŸ™‚

Author's Reply:
Thanks for reading John and your good words, perhaps there's an altogether different poem waiting to be written with that ending...Leila

sunken on 29-05-2010
What hands will do
I wouldn't change a thing. A heartfelt and beautifully written piece. Good to see you on Uka again, Leila. Well done on the nib.

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Corin on 31-05-2010
What hands will do
Congratulations on the 'Great Read' Recommendation Alison - very well deserved.

Is there a typo here - a missing word? or two?

"I want to turn
the clock - one second
before the beginning
to feel that spark "

Should it be? :-

I want to turn *back*
the clock - *to* one second
before the beginning
to feel that spark

David



Author's Reply:
Hello David, sorry it's taken me some time to reply. Thanks very much indeed for reading this and leaving your thoughts, I'm so pleased you enjoyed it. It was intentional to leave out 'back' as that appears later in the poem, I wanted to emphasis one second before the beginning, the idea of a spark just as the hands are about to touch. Thanks again, Leila

littleditty on 29-11-2010
What hands will do
That moment -excellent xx

Author's Reply:
Oh dear Littleditty I have only seen this now...thank you how are you where are you...Leila xx

Kat on 02-11-2011
What hands will do
Another delightful poem of yours to catch up with, Leila. Just beautiful.

Kat x

Author's Reply:
Thanks Kat for your precious time spent reading through the older posts...Leila x

Buschell on 26-02-2014
What hands will do
I have tried to imagine what kind of person writes this way.
I have an idea that it's someone like you. Merry old soul. Dazza.

Author's Reply:
ha ha, lovely comment, I am indeed that merry old soul...Leila


Clearing the Path (posted on: 08-01-10)
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Nightly, all week, dreams have slipped the sheets leaving me snow-bound in a January fog Over and over, drumming up the past, I have kissed my mother, sewn a button on father's worn work shirt and danced the coastline of my lover's words Strange how the stumble into new year leaves splinters of the old- the need to break the skin expose the pain that presses bone.
Archived comments for Clearing the Path
Romany on 08-01-2010
Clearing the Path
Yes indeed, and I know just what you mean!

Romany

Author's Reply:
Romany thank you- very kind of you to read and leave a comment letting me know you identify with the poem. Leila

discopants on 08-01-2010
Clearing the Path
January was always the month of restlessness for me, after I'd spent Christmas or New Year back where I grew up, drinking in some old haunts.

Anyway, love the way you've tied in the personal with the time of year and the reality of this weather we're having...

Author's Reply:
Thanks disco for making all the connections and letting me know you enjoyed the poem.
Yes January can be difficult in many ways for many reasons, I hope 2010 is a good one for you with lots of inspiration for your own writing. Leila

chant on 08-01-2010
Clearing the Path
very elegantly written, and like Romany and disco i entirely identify with the sentiments expressed here. this year, more than others, for whatever reason, i feel like i've stumbled into, and perhaps for that reason (because i stumbled with you) wondered about:

'Strange how we stumble
into new year
leaving splinters of the old- '

Author's Reply:
hi chant, thanks for this I am pleased to have come up with something readers are identifying with. I think as you say more people than ever this year are feeling this way. Also thanks for your good suggestion, it has highlighted that I have 'leaving' in verse 1 and 'leaves' in verse 3, I had somehow missed that so will have to make a change to one of those. Hopefully will do that over the weekend.
Thanks again, Leila

macaby on 09-01-2010
Clearing the Path
I thought this was an exceptionally good poem. I once spent "hogmanay" on my own in a small room therefore I can relate to the sentiment in the last stanza. Good one Leila.
Regards
mac

Author's Reply:
Thanks Mac for your good words, I am starting to feel a bit guilty that I am bringing up painful memories for people! Hope you have a very good 2010...Leila

sunken on 09-01-2010
Clearing the Path
A nom, a nib and a host of positive comments. I feel it my duty, Ms. Leila, to bring you back down to earth with a smelly flea bitten Bernard. Good to see you subbing again. A tip top piece and no mistake.

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Author's Reply:
Yippee a Bernard that will do very nicely thanks Sunken. Glad you liked the poem I couldn't be more surprised or happier with the responses, so to whoever nibbed and nommed it thank you very much and a special thanks to you Sunken for continued positive comments. How are you getting on in this weather? I've just been out and come back feeling slightly traumatised by the terrible conditions of the roads and pavements, not to mention having to try and push a car out of the snow!! It was the taxi that got stuck picking me up! Anyway I ramble...take care...Leila

Ionicus on 09-01-2010
Clearing the Path
I can only concur with the sentiments expressed above. A very polished and meaningful poem.

Luigi xx

Author's Reply:
Thanks Luigi for reading and leaving a lovely comment. Hope you are well and may 2010 be a very happy one for you. Leila x

Jolen on 11-01-2010
Clearing the Path
Dear Leila,

I read this the other day first thing and didn't have a chance to comment and now everything I would have said and done (suggest it be nibbed and nominated) is done. But please know that your work is always such an inspiration to me and that this poem is finely crafted and expands outward for the reader. Each verse was strong and it would be hard to select one favorite bit, but I think I am leaning towards the final verse. I just loved this and congrats to you, it's worthy of all praises!

Blessings,
Jolen

p.s. is your book available yet?

Author's Reply:
Hi Jolen, sorry to be late with a response to your wonderful words. What can I say, as a writer this is the comment you dream of, so a humble thank you. You are very generous and I certainly appreciate it.
Re the second collection, as many people now know bluechrome have ceased publishing and they were going to publish it, but can I just say for the moment watch this space and everything crossed! Very many thanks Leila

jay12 on 20-01-2010
Clearing the Path
I wasn't sure about this poem the first time I read it. I didn't absorb it properly. I've come back to it a couple of times and each time I seem to see a new meaning in it. It's a lovely little poem, but I haven't quite put my finger on what I feel it is saying to me. Nice writing though.

Author's Reply:
Hi Jay thank you for stopping by and coming back to read the poem more than once, couldn't ask for a better response than to have you read it a couple of times and leave this good comment. I am really pleased and grateful. Leila

Kat on 02-11-2011
Clearing the Path
This poem really spoke to me as well. 2011 has been my 'very difficult' year, which got off to a not great start and went downhill from there... ! Thankfully, things are on the up again, and I'm gonna make sure that 2012 is a goody and then some... hehe.

Thanks for your poetry, Leila.

Kat x

Author's Reply:
Well good to hear that 2011 has improved and hope 2012 will be a great and creative time for you. Thanks also for putting this on your list of favourites I seem to recall it did strike a chord with folks at the time. In fact here's wishing all of us some happy times ahead...Leila x


Flowers and Dust (posted on: 11-05-09)
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I leave the cemetery with a hole in my heart a pocketful of orphaned buttons and some half-remembered lines from an old movie Sat in a blackened car between my uncles, their lives furrowed seams etched in coal dust, we shift-pattern the faces of passing years In the Co-op tearoom licensed for today, I am shouldered by my cousins, no longer the tom-boy in goal, tolerated, or the quick-fire counter chalking up back-door darts In this village of rivers and dogs and the echo of cobwebbed clocks, the world is a litany of lanterned landscapes I sleep with memories trapped in the draughts of windows and doorways, in the lintels of stone that uphold the turn of seasons.
Archived comments for Flowers and Dust
discopants on 11-05-2009
Flowers and Dust
Lovely poem- I particularly liked the lines 'We shift-pattern the faces/of passing years' which almost encapsulates the theme for the whole poem.

disco

Author's Reply:
Hi disco thank you so much for reading the poem and for your thoughtful words, I think you are right about those lines and I appreciate you saying so...Leila

Sunken on 11-05-2009
Flowers and Dust
Hello Ms. Leila. It's me, sunks. How bloody marvellous to see you back on uka. This is Class with a bit 'C'. It's one of my faves of yours. I have many. You are still uka's best kept secret. I refuse to keep quiet about how good you are tho. You'll have to sue me. The 'pocketful of orphaned buttons' line is inspired and no mistake. I could go on highlighting stuff, but I think I'd probably end up highlighting it all. This is definitely getting a Bernard. I'm sorry, but someone has to have him. I'm not on my usual pc, so I'll be back later to slap one on you (a Bernard that is). Ahem. Thank you. Great to see you back. If this doesn't get a nib I will sulk until the cows come home. The cows only just left, so that could be quite a while. Good day. Hello?

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Author's Reply:
Hello Mr Sunken it is worth posting a poem at uka just to have a comment from you. It's my lucky day as you came back with a Bernard too. I wish I could be clever, funny and generous but I'm afraid I can only offer a great big thank you from my heart, because you always support my work and that means a lot to me. By the way the cows must be home...Leila

Mezzanotte on 11-05-2009
Flowers and Dust
Dear Leila,

a beautiful poem indeed. This stanza really stood out for me,

In this village
of rivers and dogs
and the echo
of cobwebbed clocks,
the world is a litany
of lanterned landscapes

But then again, as Sunken said, all of it is very good.

Best Wishes
Jackie

Author's Reply:
hello Jackie thank you very much for your warm comment and for picking out the stanza you liked best, it's always good to know what another poet feels works well. I am very delighted to read your words...Leila

Bradene on 11-05-2009
Flowers and Dust
Lovely work Leila, the last couple of stanzas are little pieces of magic. Val x

Author's Reply:
Hi Val I'm so pleased to have you read the poem and for those lovely, kind words, thank you...Leila

Sunken on 11-05-2009
Flowers and Dust
As promised, Ms. Leila, a smelly Bernard (-:

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and I'm barking too...

thank you Bernard!

Ionicus on 11-05-2009
Flowers and Dust
Beautiful, beautiful, beautiful. No more to be said apart from, perhaps, excellent.

Author's Reply:
Hello Luigi how lovely of you to stop and read and leave such a heart warming comment, you have used one of my favourite words three times and I'm very happy, thank you...Leila






RachelLW on 11-05-2009
Flowers and Dust
Really, Luigi is right - this is both beautiful and excellent. Some very clever lines....it's impossible to select one. Fantastically written stanzas. My favourites perhaps being 2, 3, 4 and 5....ok and 1! Ha ha, sorry, I really did intend to choose one I liked best!

Author's Reply:
I have no complaints Rachel ha ha I'm absolutely delighted you liked all the stanzas, thank you for saying so and also for the hot story pick you are very kind...Leila

Slovitt on 12-05-2009
Flowers and Dust
Leila: I have read this poem several times in the past couple of days, and with little constructive to say will simply approve of it as finely felt, and written. 'In this village/of rivers and dogs'/ sounds like a home. Swep

Author's Reply:
Swep thank you for reading and re-reading and I am very pleased to have your approval. It is about returning home and as you will have gathered for a funeral. I wanted to be sure I got this one right so thank you very much for helping put my mind at ease...Leila

macaby on 12-05-2009
Flowers and Dust
Wow, a first class poem, IMO. I couldn't pick out a fav. stanza, it wouldn't be right, each one is a little gem on it's own. Beautifully put toghether, thanks for sharing.
mac

Author's Reply:
Mac that is truly a lovely comment and I'm very grateful to you for reading and leaving your generous words...also for the hot story pick that's very kind...Leila

barenib on 14-05-2009
Flowers and Dust
Leila - very moving and lots of good lines. Congrats on the Bernard πŸ™‚ John.

Author's Reply:
Thanks John for reading and commenting, glad you liked it. I'm thrilled with a Bernard, made my week...Leila

cat on 15-05-2009
Flowers and Dust
Hi Leila

I'm afraid I am a little late to this you're stunning poem never the less I am more than pleased to be able to comment here.
You are as the lovely Sunk says ... Class with a big C!

My love and best Catherine x

Author's Reply:
Hi Cat (sorry for delay in responding) you are very kind to leave such a wonderful comment, it means so much to me to know you felt that way when you read the poem, I'm very grateful to you. With love to you too, Leila xx

Zoya on 16-05-2009
Flowers and Dust
Dear Leila,
There is something strangely disturbing,
yet poignantly beautiful about this text...
It evokes feelings of loss,
yet nostalgia is felt through out the text...
It at one elates and depresses...
You know what I mean?
It has all elements of good poetry about it!
I just loved it!
Love,
Zoya

Author's Reply:
Dear Zoya thank you for your close reading of the poem and for expressing your thoughts so beautifully. I am very glad the loss and nostalgia came across, I am delighted that you loved it. Here's love to you too and thanks...Leila

Sunken on 17-05-2009
Flowers and Dust
Well done on getting a proper bona-fide nib, Ms. Leila. Muchly deserved and no mistake. Well done on the nom too.

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Author's Reply:
A big Sunday hello dear Sunken, do you have a spare tea bag and maybe a chocolate biscuit as I've just been for a long walk. Thank you for keeping an eye on the poem and of course as everyone at UKA knows nothing beats a Bernard! Take care...Leila

teifii on 18-05-2009
Flowers and Dust
Certainly excellent. Think it's all been said above. Very wel deserved nom.
Daff

Author's Reply:
hello Daff, so sorry for the late response, sometimes a week just gets away from you! Thank you for reading the poem and for your lovely message, you are very kind...Leila

Jolen on 19-05-2009
Flowers and Dust
Hi Leila,

I'm sorry to be so late to your beautiful poem, but am glad that I had the chance to read it. It's really a tremendous piece. Worthy of nib an nomination and all accolades, certainly. Congrats too on your being published. When can I get a copy of your book?

blessings,
Jolen

Author's Reply:
Dear Jolen I am terribly late responding and I'm very sorry about that, it turned out to be a hectic week! I am absolutely delighted with your generous appraisal of the poem, thank you very much. The 2nd collection, from which this poem is taken, is with the publisher Jolen, it was hoped they would have it out this month but circumstances are such that they are taking a bit of time out at the moment for personal reasons and all books are delayed, thank you for asking about it I hope I can let you know when the time comes, again I appreciate your generous spirit...Leila

SugarMama34 on 25-05-2009
Flowers and Dust
Oh Leila what a beautiful poem you have penned, there are so many great lines in this that I can't pick one out as my favourite. I loved the poem on the whole and the deepness of it and the meaning. A very creative piece in my ickle opinion. I'm so glad that I came across it to read. Congrats on the nib and the nom very well deserved hun.

Lis'. xx

Author's Reply:
Dear Sugar, such a wonderful comment makes me want to jump with joy, thank you for reading this effort and for saying such generous things, I'm very grateful...Leila

shackleton on 01-08-2009
Flowers and Dust
Wow! I'd forgotten how good your poetry is. This one has swiped me sideways with its atmosphere and imagery. I actually haven't picked up your book for a while... I'll try to catch an hour with it later. Smashing poem, Leila!

Author's Reply:
You are really kind to look in on this one, thanks for the lovely words, I'm so pleased you still pick the book up from time to time, not sure if and when the second collection will be published, bluechrome are mostly quiet these days as Anthony has been pretty unwell, but I'm hopeful they'll bounce back as last word was they were going to publish it in the next batch and they have always be great to work with.
Glad to hear you are getting back to your writing, Leila






sybarite on 05-12-2010
Flowers and Dust
Wonderful title. I like "orphaned buttons" and "cobwebbed clocks" very much. Well rendered sentiment and the entire last stanza is gold. Lovely, sad poem.

Author's Reply:
It really is lovely when someone stops by and comments on an old post so thanks for this...Leila

Kat on 02-11-2011
Flowers and Dust
A collection of yours would certainly be a treasure, Leila. I do hope it's in the pipeline again. Please let me know as I've been out of the loop for a while and I'd love to have a book of yours.

Kat x

Author's Reply:
Dear Kat
So kind of you to be reading through some of the older posts and yes happily the second collection did make it into print last year with a new publisher. It's available through Central Books http://www.centralbooks.com/
the title is The Space Between Rain and I was really thrilled with the finished product. This poem did make it into the book I am pleased to say...thanks again Leila x


Sifting Karma (posted on: 06-02-09)
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Sifting Karma I wanted to ask you about Hesperus and early mornings like this in the North where the brightest star is a talisman and a crimson lake floats on a faraway sky I wanted to know how you slept and if your dreams were white clouds trailing over distant mountains and if your hands held blossoms or snow I wanted to tell you that on countless walks I have gathered these gifts- leaves, pebbles, a melted moon and three leftover kisses from a picnic on the dunes.
Archived comments for Sifting Karma
Mezzanotte on 06-02-2009
Sifting Karma
Wow,

what beautiful images. The melted moon and three left over kisses. How romantic, gentle and sweet.

I really enjoyed it.

Jackie

Author's Reply:
hello Jackie
thank you so much for reading the poem, I'm delighted that you enjoyed it and felt it was romantic, gentle and sweet, I could not ask for more. It is all about the reaction/interaction with the reader...Leila

Sunken on 06-02-2009
Sifting Karma
Wow indeed, Ms. Maisonette. Leila! Where the devil have you been? Don't answer that, I like the mystery. It's been years since I've seen you sub on uka. It's really good to see you back. I always liked your style of writing. This is a corker. As you can see, my commenting hasn't improved much. I had to look up 'Hesperus' on the net...

Hesperus (Greek Hesperos) is the personification of the "evening star", the planet Venus in the evening.

As ever, a brilliantly crafted pome that oozes style, sophistication and a sense of melancholy. It's great to read you again. I hope there will be more to come. I also hope you won't mind me slapping a Bernard on you. You deserve better but he's all I have. Nice one, Leila. Welcome back.

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Author's Reply:
Dear Sunken
it has been years since I subbed and I didn't realise just how many, I thought it was only last year...how time flies...but I have as ever been keeping an eye on uka and in particular the poetry. Thank you for your wonderful and generous support and a Bernard bark has made my day!...Leila

e-griff on 06-02-2009
Sifting Karma
Blow me down - out of the blue a (classy) classic adressive poem that reeks of skill! Very nice read. Ticks the boxes. Enjoyable.

only thing I would change is to put a colon after 'gifts' rather than a hyphen.

Author's Reply:
Those are very nice words John and I thank you for them. I'm glad it ticked the boxes. I agree about your assessment of the colon, I just need to get over my dislike of the pesky little devils in poetry! Leila

SugarMama34 on 06-02-2009
Sifting Karma
Hi Leila,

Aww, what a beautiful and sentimental poem this is. I love the imagery that you have created with your words. It flows well when read. I think may favourite stanza has to be:

I wanted to tell you
that on countless walks
I have gathered these gifts-
leaves, pebbles, a melted
moon and three leftover kisses
from a picnic on the dunes.

Just beautiful. One I have really enjoyed reading. Well done on the nib and Bernard.

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Author's Reply:
hello Sugar
thank you very much for connecting with the poem, I am so very happy that you enjoyed the imagery and felt that the poem flowed. I am pleased the last verse worked so well for you. I am thrilled with a nib (from the unseen nibber) and a Bernard from the inimitable dear Sunken. Leila x

macaby on 06-02-2009
Sifting Karma
beautiful poem with a touch of romance, your images are very vivid indeed. well worthy of the nib, (not to mention the bernard) a pleasure to read thanks for sharing.

Author's Reply:
Thank you macaby for reading the poem and being kind enough to comment in such a generous and positive way, I am very happy that you enjoyed the poem and I am grateful for your words...Leila

artisus on 06-02-2009
Sifting Karma
Very nice!

Author's Reply:
hello old friend it's good to see you here and good to find your comment on my poem, I hope all is well with you...Leila

cat on 06-02-2009
Sifting Karma
Dear Leila , hi, Such a beautiful write and as always room left to think! So pleased that you are posting again, already looking forward to the next. Oh, and congrats on th nib, very well deserved! Love catherine x

Author's Reply:
hello Catherine what a lovely comment thank you so much and yes there must always be room for the reader and you are a very fine reader and I am grateful for your thoughts...Leila x

teifii on 07-02-2009
Sifting Karma
It's all lovely but the first verse was the one that really captivated me.
Daff

PLEASE VOTE FOR MY SPRING FEVER POEM
My poem is competing in the Spring Fever poetry contest on writelink.
Your comments and vote would be appreciated! http://writelink.co.uk/springfever/entryDetail.php?id=9


Author's Reply:
Hi Daff thank you for your comment and I am pleased the first verse captivated you, it's good to know it worked from the beginning. It is always the hard bit to get in and out of a poem efficiently and to get the reader's immediate attention so I am very pleased and grateful for your words.
I have tried to look for your poem on the website that you mentioned but, unless I am missing something, the names of the poets are not all listed perhaps you could let us know which poem is yours so we can vote and best of luck...Leila

ruadh on 08-02-2009
Sifting Karma
Beautiful Leila, wonderful imagery. Loved the last verse, particularly the melted moon and left over kisses. Nice to see you back.

ailsa

Author's Reply:
Dear Ailsa I am absolutely delighted to read your comment thank you so much. I am a big fan of your work so it's lovely to hear your thoughts and it's been especially touching to have such a warm welcome back to posting as it has been a while, thanks again and I hope you are well...Leila

Jolen on 14-02-2009
Sifting Karma
And that, ladies and gentlemen, is how it's DONE! Wow! Such beauty here and enough space to allow the reader to float in and out of the poem and land softly before sighing in complete satisfaction.

Congrats on the accolades, this is worthy of every one of them!

blessings,
Jolen

Author's Reply:
Dear Jolen how kind you are, thank you for such an inspiring comment, I know you to be a passionate poet so your words are most welcome and very many congratulations on the publication of your poetry book with UKA Press...Leila

freya on 17-03-2009
Sifting Karma
Leila, some lovely images that just stun your reader. My poet eye and mind keep returning to the feast of:

a crimson lake
floats on a faraway sky...

and the skillful delicacy of:

if your dreams
were white clouds trailing over
distant mountains and if your hands
held blossoms or snow

I find myself in agreement with teifli: it's the first stanza that hooks me into your poem. A tiny thought: did wonder if you might want to more personally link your last verse to the lost or 'departed the scene' lover. Perhaps simply changing 'a' picnic to 'our' picnic, could work in that regard. My sensibilities also wanted a more haunting impression that your narrator is returning alone along paths the two once walked together. But you may prefer to let the reader make all those connections themselves. As of course, you already do.

Regardless, awesome talent, you! Love and Light, Shelagh xx

Author's Reply:
Dear Shelagh
such a pleasure to read a comment from you and very sorry for the delay in responding. Your generous words are singing around Findhorn and I thank you for them. I bought some crystals and incense from The Phoenix shop recently and sat outside the cafe drinking tea. Did you visit Newbold House when you were here, I have held some of my Reiki workshops there.
I am thinking on what you say about the picnic etc and of course you have read my intention correctly when you say I've allowed the reader to make the connections and am joyful when they do and take time to tell me so.
You are a sensitive reader and I am thrilled with your comments.
Love and light, Leila xx

reckless on 06-05-2009
Sifting Karma
This is terrific, and I really enjoyed reading it. It made me feel quite warm inside - a sense of reflection, a sense of calm - ab it like those Zen poems I used to read. There is beauty in your words.

Author's Reply:
hi reckless I am really delighted with such a lovely comment from you, thank you very much and for the mention of Zen poems which to me are beautiful and to say that my poem reminded you of them means a lot to me. Thanks again and for the hot story choice, you are very kind, Leila


Goodbyes (posted on: 06-01-06)
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There is no unfolding of gentle day the rhythmic churn of bodies turning uncurling bones, the scattering of ghosts there are no sighs as though a season faded slowly, the fall of leaf and branch there is only the ambush of night, doors and darkness and the trembling weight of rain.
Archived comments for Goodbyes
Dargo77 on 06-01-2006
Goodbyes
Leila, to me a touch of class. I especially liked the ending, and so very well written.
Best regards,
Dargo

Author's Reply:
Dear Dargo how kind of you to be the first to comment, it's always a pleasure to know you have read my work and enjoyed it. Thank you so much for the lovely comment, I do appreciate it...Leila

Apolloneia on 06-01-2006
Goodbyes
very good poem Leila. really liked this.
Nic:)

Author's Reply:
Nic thanks so much for visiting and taking time to let me know you really liked this one, I'm most grateful...Leila

littleditty on 06-01-2006
Goodbyes
i'm trying to explain to you why i like this so much...can't really - subtle and powerful...a meaningful poem, visual, and the last line sensually engages. Delicately ambushed!Favourite. xxxlittleditty x

Author's Reply:
littleditty your remarks are lovely, I'm so please you connected with this one and took the time to say so. Thanks too for making it a favourite, that means a lot to me...Leila

Sunken on 07-01-2006
Goodbyes
(-: Welcome back to the Uka fold young Leila of 'Goodbyes' fame. How Ironic that you should return with such a title. Your classy touch has been missed Ms. Leila. There are some right trashy types around here. Take that Jolen for instance. Don't worry, she won't see this. Brilliant write young Leila, I have come to expect nothing less. It's great to see you subbing again. The hamster says '10' and so do I - but I'm afraid 20's aren't allowed. I reckon Rudy needs his own account. Take care and a steam iron.

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Author's Reply:
Dear Sunken thanks for that warm welcome back...indeed I do seem to have been away a while (unintentionally)...it all seems to have started with the computer probs and then life just got manic, as it sometimes does. I never like to post work unless I have the time to fully participate in both replying to comments and commenting on other members work but I have read a few posts lately and I doubt I'll ever catch up with all the work of my old favourits and some exciting new stuff. Congratulations yourself on some fine work of late and as for the lovely Jolen...you better watch out young man! Also well done on your poems in Voices 3 which I'm currently reading through...anyway must go before I take up all the space...love to Rudy...oh and yes the reason for being here, thanks so much for the great comment...Leila

Bradene on 07-01-2006
Goodbyes
Leila this is a gem a real piece of magic I love the desolate feel of the last stanza really superb. Happy new year Val x

Author's Reply:
Dear Val, lovely to hear from you and Happy New Year. I hope you are well. I'm looking forward to trying to catch up on a wealth of poetry that's been posted. I am really grateful you read this and left me such an inspiring comment, thank you...Leila

red-dragon on 08-01-2006
Goodbyes
I read this last night at dusk, as the snow fell in great fat flakes. Fabulous poem, which conveys to me a great loneliness. Ann

Author's Reply:
Dear Ann thank you so much and I am glad I was able to conjure up that feeling with the poem, seems like you read it at just the right time, thank you so much for sharing your thoughts with me...Leila

ruadh on 08-01-2006
Goodbyes
Love this Leila. Sad and yearnful. Well done.

love ailsa

Author's Reply:
Hi Ailsa lovely to see you here, thanks for reading and taking the time to tell me you enjoyed this one...Leila

teifii on 08-01-2006
Goodbyes
Very mood filled. I love the rain image - the trembling weight of rain -- very effective.
Daff

Author's Reply:
Daff thanks for taking time to comment, I appreciate that and I'm so pleased you caught the mood and liked the imaging...Leila

Slovitt on 08-01-2006
Goodbyes
Leila: I can feel the pain, in the delicacy of the last stanza, of the last line. There is a hovering quality here, as of light through leaves and branches, and then the coming-to-grips of, again, your fine last stanza. Very fine. Swep


Author's Reply:
Swep thank you for connecting with this one and I'm delighted you felt the pain and delicacy and especially like what you say about the hovering quality, wonderfully put, thanks so much...Leila

uppercase on 08-01-2006
Goodbyes
It so sad and the sadness is understood....erma

Author's Reply:
Erma thanks for making a connection...all the best for 2006...Leila

Kat on 10-01-2006
Goodbyes
'...and the trembling weight of rain.' is the perfect end for this lovely poem, Leila!

Kat :o)

Author's Reply:
Kat thanks for sharing those thoughts with me, I'm so pleased you liked the poem...Leila

Yutka on 10-01-2006
Goodbyes
It is nice to find a real poetess here! One is swept away straight into autumn, the season of of melancholy and waiting. The word "ambush" felt very powerful, it associated brilliantly with "trembling".
Yutka πŸ™‚

Author's Reply:
Yutka hello, this is our first meeting on UKA and I thank you sincerely for your generous remarks. We are lucky here to have many fine writers and I will certainly take pleasure in seeking out your work. Thanks again...Leila

Lare on 11-01-2006
Goodbyes
Hi Leila...this is so right on...I so agree...you word 'ambush' is very powerful...and it makes this piece...powerful...and strong...

lare

Author's Reply:
Hi Lare it's a real delight to find some of the newer members commenting on my work, I'm afraid I've not been around much lately so this is our first communication I think. I'm so pleased you liked this and I'll certainly be taking a look at your work. Thanks very much...Leila

Dazza on 11-01-2006
Goodbyes
Leila, shark attack off Stradbroke, be careful! As we all know you are on another level with your dittys and thats why I'm telling you to proliferate! Love Dazza.

Author's Reply:
Sugar ...all this new stuff is confusing. Dazza I replied to your comment but you'll have to log in to read it sorry...Leila x

Leila on 11-01-2006
Goodbyes
Dazza! Hi get your message loud and clear. Talking of which Straddie and the like have been much on my mind. How I wish I could jump on the Combie Trader and head over to Moreton Island. I am working lots in the hope of getting back there soon as I can. I might post some of my 'OZ poems' in my journal as I rarely ever add to it. I'll let you know if I do. In the meantime thanks so much for popping by, always a pleasure to read your comments and keep up the fine work yourself...Leila x

Author's Reply:

Abel on 11-01-2006
Goodbyes
I can only call this brilliant, and how I've missed this one, I don't know. But the form is masterful, gentle, and a fave for me.

Ward

Author's Reply:
Ward those are most generous words and I'm truly delighted you liked this so much, thank you for letting me know and for making it a fave...Leila

shackleton on 11-01-2006
Goodbyes
You've done it again, Leila.

I've felt the 'ambush of night, doors and darkness' a few times in my life.

Good to read a new poem from you. Happy new year, Leila.

ps. I couldn't help meself - an invisible force made me hit the nomination button. I hope you don't mind.



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Mike what a pleasure to see your name on the comments list, I hope you are well. Thanks for all your support and I'm pleased you liked this one so much (seems to have struck a chord with many) and thanks also for pressing the magic button. I need to check if I have missed many of your posts, I'll take a look. Hope 2006 is full of inspiration and continued success for you, good luck with everything...Leila

MaxPower on 11-01-2006
Goodbyes
Regarding Goodbyes:the poem is excellent and a joy to read, These lines believe, they provoke thought, they sing out in the quietest yet most distinct voice, that is all.

Author's Reply:
Hello MaxPower and welcome. Thank you for the lovely words you have left here, I'm most grateful for your time and the way in which you expressed your feelings about the poem...Leila

RDLarson on 12-01-2006
Goodbyes
I think this poem will return to me every fall and early winter as I know will "the trembling weight of rain" will again be my companion. Delicate, true and so good.

Author's Reply:
How kind you are with your comments, I'm so thrilled thank you very much...Leila

narcissa on 12-01-2006
Goodbyes
This is beautiful and lonely. I love the "scattering of ghosts" and that "trembling weight of rain" - what stunning images.
The only thing that slightly jarred with me was having "ambush" at the end of a line- it broke the flow just a little bit, but not very much (not a huge thing, tbh)
A 10 and a new fave from me!
Laura x

Author's Reply:
Laura thank you for pointing out the images you enjoyed most and thanks for the time you took to comment. I'll certainly take into consideration your remarks about the placing of ambush...Leila

freya on 13-01-2006
Goodbyes
Leila, you have this gift of making the creation of a fine poem look so easy. Beautiful use of lyrical and sensate comparisons to first show what is missing in order to throw into stark relief the loneliness and 'trembling weight of rain' of your last stanza. For me, this short, yet powerful poem masterfully evokes an image of one deeply saddened by loss and close to a 'tremble of tears'. Brilliant. Shelagh XX

Author's Reply:
Shelagh I was delighted to see your name here and even more delighted when I read your thoughts about this one. I am so glad this pleased you, your words are singing in my ears...it was written after some time spent in Findhorn at the turn of the year. Thank you for taking time to comment...it's good to see you both commenting and posting...love and light...Leila xx

Transitions on 09-03-2006
Goodbyes
A beautifully crafted poem thank you

Author's Reply:
Very many thanks for taking a look at my work and leaving your positive comment. A warm welcome to uka, I will read what you've posted so far...Leila

Rosco on 14-03-2006
Goodbyes
As lovely as Hart Crane's My Grandmother's Love Letters:
http://www.marcopolopoet.com/PoemOP/My_Grandmothers_Love.htm
What a touch you have.

Author's Reply:
Ah thank you so much for visiting and your delightful comment...Hart's poem is quite beautiful, I am deeply honoured that you make such a comparison...Leila

Jolen on 19-03-2006
Goodbyes
Ross sent me here and I'm glad he did, he was correct. This is soft and moving. A delicacy to the senses.

blessings,
Jolen

Author's Reply:
Jolen thank you, you are most kind to say such lovely things and Ross most generous to point you here. I'm grateful to you both. Leila

SugarMama34 on 12-11-2006
Goodbyes
Hiya Leila,
Such touching words you have written for the emotion of "Goodbye" which could be taken both ways, either as a death or a parting. I loved the first stanza as it said so much and called out to the reader so well in it's plight.
It shows how the other person feels when left alone after the "Goodbye" is said. Emotionally written and heartfelt.

Hugs,

Sugar.xx

Author's Reply:
Dear Sugar please see below for my reply...sorry I'd forgotten about this change...Leila

Leila on 14-11-2006
Goodbyes
Hello Sugar thank you so much for leaving this lovely thoughtful comment on my poem. It's very kind of you to do so as I have not been here for a while. Sorry not to have replied sooner but I didn't receive any notification by email and was just looking through my work on here and saw it. Thanks again...Leila

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skinnyscot on 17-05-2007
Goodbyes
Havent been here for a while so it was great to see that the standard of writing hasn't dropped. This was a very lovely piece, thought provoking yet very peaceful i felt. Well done
Catriona

Author's Reply:
Hi Catriona, thanks so much for catching up with this one and leaving a very positive comment. It always cheers me to know that someone has enjoyed my work and very grateful that you took the time to say so. I hope your own writing is going well...finding the time for everything is a bit of a problem. Thanks again...Leila

fitbin on 26-06-2009
Goodbyes
Hi Leila, just having a peruse.
I particularly liked this one.
Succinct, but still conveying a lot of imagery and feeling.


Author's Reply:
Thanks fitbin really pleased you looked in on this and picked it out...it eventually won a poetry comp so I have a wee soft spot for it myself now, thanks again for your good words...Leila

Gothicman on 10-12-2015
Goodbyes
Leila, I don't suppose you visit this site now, my gut feeling says you've emigrated to Oz with the Munky, (Hahaha!) but after deleting all previous work and starting again, I wanted to reiterate that this is the poem that I like most of all after 13 years on this site, to me a moment of rare inspiration with its ghostly, uncanny wording. I have it of course in one of your poetry collections I've purchased, but wanted to say thanks here.
Trevor

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hello Trevor, UKA hasn't quite got rid of me but I am rather a silent visitor and I have forgotten my password to get on to the forums otherwise I might cheekily have let folks know I have a third collection out. http://www.indigodreamsbookshop.com/#/ech-tsm/4589983025
I did struggle initially with the new format on the website as Andrea knew but I have also been travelling a lot and doing many different things, but no munkys in sight! I had to pop along here though and reply to this lovely comment.I cannot believe how long ago it was that we started using this lovely website and it's so good to know it still flourishes. Thank you for your lovely words, all best wishes, Leila


Sacred To Lovers (posted on: 15-08-05)
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Jumping off the train
at Glasgow Central
we collide with the day
scoop the rhythm
of the city, the chill
of shadows cast

at Kelvingrove Art Gallery
we loop the chantries
of Old Masters and Impressionists
but it's the Pre-Raphaelites
who capture my soul

downstairs in the cafι-bar
nuzzling hot chocolate
and ruled by Venus
I decide to buy a miniature framed print
of Hesperus, the evening star,
ruled by Mars
you do not view this as a risk.




Archived comments for Sacred To Lovers
Sunken on 2005-08-15 08:19:11
Re: Sacred To Lovers
And this is why you are WOTM young Leila. I love the ending to this. How do you get that accent over the letter 'c' in cafe? I will google Hesperus later, I hope you don't view this as a risk (-: No risks in subbing this young Leila, it's Quality with a big 'Q' Well done.

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helping cats and dogs to get along


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bektron on 2005-08-15 09:13:36
Re: Sacred To Lovers
Love this L. a fave for me. Last stanza brilliant!
you started off the week well for me.
beks:)


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e-griff on 2005-08-15 12:06:14
Re: Sacred To Lovers
Excellently lovely!!!
Ringing phrases, nice meaning.
I loved 'looped the chantries' -- lovely words...

Big 'Griffpick' from me πŸ™‚

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AnthonyEvans on 2005-08-15 13:26:05
Re: Sacred To Lovers
perfectly captured. the movement from the outer world into the inner world of Art (yeehaa) and from their into the very self. i love that scooping and looping and nuzzling, puts you very physically there in a very personal way. best wishes, anthony.

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Apolloneia on 2005-08-15 19:18:54
Re: Sacred To Lovers
Excellent work Leila.

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e-griff on 2005-08-15 19:49:15
Re: Sacred To Lovers
and, hee-hee, the 'Nibbers' were following me again!

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Leila on 2005-08-15 20:13:59
Re: Sacred To Lovers
Hi Sunken thank you for being the first to comment on this and for your lovely words. You are such a generous reader and supporter and you encourage me to keep writing....Leila

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Leila on 2005-08-15 20:30:12
Re: Sacred To Lovers
Thanks beks I am so pleased you thought this worked and is a fave, I'm delighted...Leila

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Leila on 2005-08-15 20:31:19
Re: Sacred To Lovers
mmm the comments are out of order, sorry...L

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Leila on 2005-08-15 20:57:04
Re: Sacred To Lovers
Thanks Griff for that very positive and lovely comment and glad you liked 'looped the chantries' when that came to me it just felt that it summed up walking round those amazing rooms perfectly, so pleased it worked for you too. Thanks for the Griffpick...and hope this reply lands somewhere near your comment, the last two to Beks went astray...Leila

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tai on 2005-08-16 01:00:05
Re: Sacred To Lovers
Leila, lovely sacred to lovers poem this one! All I can say is, you are a very lucky woman, if you nailed this one! 10 from me.

Smiling

loving your stuff

Tai

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Leila on 2005-08-16 09:27:18
Re: Sacred To Lovers
Oh and Sunken with regards to the word cafe...it's all down to word, it came up automatically thank goodness otherwise I'd have struggled and hope you got to see Hesperus!...Have a lovely day...Leila

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Leila on 2005-08-16 09:29:54
Re: Sacred To Lovers
Anthony you have perfectly connected with the essence of this poem, thank you so much for reading and sharing, much appreciated...Leila

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littleditty on 2005-08-16 16:39:56
Re: Sacred To Lovers
Very fine - Ms Leila - what a fine poem, much enjoyed by me xxxxlittleditty x

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barenib on 2005-08-16 17:33:05
Re: Sacred To Lovers
Leila, you've captured that wonderful immersion into the gallery world that exists in many cities. I also love the slight intertwining of this world and your own at the end - the hint of the one somehow affecting the other.
Being a punctuation pedant for a sec, would a semi-colon after 'Mars' be appropriate?
Great read for me - John.

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Slovitt on 2005-08-17 11:44:57
Re: Sacred To Lovers
Leila: The pre-Raphaelites, and I'm not a fan of groups, may be my favorite group of painters. The red-haired Lady of Shalott and the nymphs of Waterhouse are gorgeous, and make me wonder if there were really women that ever looked like that, their faces so finely boned and focused. You've written a spare poem, one that establishes a place in the world. You conclude well. Swep

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uppercase on 2005-08-17 17:16:53
Re: Sacred To Lovers
Very nice poem. When I go see the art work of the great masters I just stand there with my mouth open untill someone comes and pulls me away to the next one. It's too bad they never knew how much we enjoy their work...love Erma

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Bradene on 2005-08-18 11:58:28
Re: Sacred To Lovers
This is fantastic work Leila I just the love the last stanza especially the line, nuzzling hot chocolate. Great I can almost taste it. Love Val x

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chant on 2005-08-19 14:58:02
Re: Sacred To Lovers
tightly written, good mix of art and astrology, excellent concluding line.

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nibs on 2005-08-20 16:16:11
Re: Sacred To Lovers
Not a word wasted. Excellent work.

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nibs on 2005-08-20 16:17:03
Re: Sacred To Lovers
Not a word wasted. Excellent work.

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littleditty on 2005-08-21 17:31:32
Re: Sacred To Lovers
came back -the last verse is brilliant -a favourite for me -thanks :o) xlittleditty x

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teifii on 2005-08-22 11:31:07
Re: Sacred To Lovers
As to the accented e, you can get it fron insert > symbol in word.
Nice poem too by the way. I like the toch of irony I think I detect.
Daff

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Leila on 2005-09-04 18:00:37
Re: Sacred To Lovers
chant thanks for reading and so pleased you liked this one, sorry for long delay in replying...Leila

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Leila on 2005-09-04 18:41:03
Re: Sacred To Lovers
nibs thanks so much for taking the time to read this and for leaving such a positive comment, I'm really delighted you enjoyed it so much...Leila

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Leila on 2005-09-06 17:42:49
Re: Sacred To Lovers
Hi Tai-Li thank you so much for your generous comments, I'm really pleased you liked this and sorry for the long delay in responding...pc nightmares!...Leila

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Leila on 2005-09-06 18:32:19
Re: Sacred To Lovers
Thanks Nic and also for the fav read, delighted you liked it...Leila

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Leila on 2005-09-07 19:28:31
Re: Sacred To Lovers
Thanks Tai for your lovely enthusiasm and sorry I couldn't reply earlier...Leila

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Leila on 2005-09-07 19:30:50
Re: Sacred To Lovers
Hi littleditty...thanks for coming back again, means a lot, so pleased you liked it and made it a favourite. Sorry for long delay in replying to you...Leila

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Leila on 2005-09-07 19:32:27
Re: Sacred To Lovers
The comments are wandering...hope you can track them down if you come back here...Leila

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Leila on 2005-09-09 21:07:54
Re: Sacred To Lovers
John thanks so much for reading and telling me what you liked about the poem, I'm very grateful and yes I agree some punctuation might benefit that particular line. So sorry to have taken such a time to respond, big computer problem. Thanks again...Leila

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Abel on 2005-09-09 21:59:21
Re: Sacred To Lovers
Superbly crafted...with depth, imagery, place (my favorite aspect, as usual)...feel. Just wonderful.

Ward

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Leila on 2005-09-11 13:29:00
Re: Sacred To Lovers
Swep I have two Waterhouse prints hanging in my home, The Lady of Shalott and Hylas and the Nymphs and I love them as I loved your comment on visiting my poem, thank you...Leila

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Leila on 2005-09-11 14:24:02
Re: Sacred To Lovers
Erma I am so pleased to see you here and hope you are well. Sorry for the long delay in thanking you for your comment...Leila

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Leila on 2005-09-11 14:25:23
Re: Sacred To Lovers
Val thanks for your lovely remarks and so sorry for taking this long time to reply, had major computer headache...Leila

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Leila on 2005-09-11 14:26:21
Re: Sacred To Lovers
Ward your wonderful comment has made my day, thank you so much...Leila

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Leila on 2005-09-15 17:34:17
Re: Sacred To Lovers
Daff thanks for reading and also for the explanation, hope all's well...Leila

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shackleton on 2005-09-16 22:08:05
Re: Sacred To Lovers
It's got that warm glow of hot chocolate, Leila. Smashing poetry! I feel all wibbly-wobbly after reading this. Take care now.

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Leila on 2005-09-17 20:38:02
Re: Sacred To Lovers
Thanks shackleton and also for the lovely comment you left on my website, means a lot...Leila

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True North (posted on: 25-07-05)
*

And this place is you
with its sky-led dreams
its seaway scent
waves that traffic words
upon cupped lips

cloud creeps and stacks
we keep one step ahead
thigh urging thigh
eyes accelerating

arrive at your door
in time for rain
to beat sweetness
and testify
that nothing can rob this day.

Archived comments for True North
tai on 2005-07-25 12:30:40
Re: True North
Wonderful work leila...so nice to see it!

9 from me although couldn't any flaws.

Smiling

Tai

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e-griff on 2005-07-25 12:56:01
Re: True North
I realise that in common parlance, the verb to 'rob' is currently often used in place of 'steal', but it still strikes me as incorrect, sorry...

eg: you steal *something*
you rob *someone/thing* of *something*

πŸ™‚ G

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Leila on 2005-07-25 19:07:07
Re: True North
Tai you are most generous with your reading of work and your positive comments, much appreciated...Leila

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Leila on 2005-07-25 19:09:12
Re: True North
Ah Griff you know what this poetry lark is like, of all the words on the table this was my choice. Didn't really have steal in mind more along the lines of deprive but thanks for your take on it anyway...Leila

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eddiesolo on 2005-07-25 19:21:03
Re: True North
I really enjoyed this, thought it was a good write.

Si:-)

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Sunken on 2005-07-25 19:57:59
Re: True North
Perfect. I am reminded of Kylie, I am reminded of Abba, I am reminded of Billie Piper in Doctor Who, I am reminded of Britney, Beyonce and Donna Summer singing 'I feel love' (god, that PJ's right - I have such gay tastes in music.....) I am reminded of Metallica, Guns n roses, Cradle of Filth, Napalm death (only joking) - Leila, what I'm trying to say is, your poem 'True North' is like all of the things I like rolled into one. Imagine that? I also can't get that song out of my head now 'Hit the north' by...? The Fixx? I'm not sure. Anyway, thing is - I love that song too. It's all too much for a munky. I may need to go and lie by a babbling brook for a while. It often helps. If voting was done via colour chart - this would be lilac. I think that says it all. Thanks.

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supplying the people at Tarmac with mysterious black gunk.

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Leila on 2005-07-26 16:45:40
Re: True North
Si, thanks so much for reading and leaving this comment, I'm so pleased you enjoyed it and thought it good...Leila

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Leila on 2005-07-26 16:59:13
Re: True North
Sunken once again you make me smile with your unique brand of commenting. Not only are you funny but so insightful...let me explain. Well what greater accolade could there be from you than to have one's work compared to the lovely Kylie, however some of your other comparisons are astonishingly accurate. For example Billie Piper in Dr Who, you picked up on the motion/travel thing. Donna Summer..the feel good factor with a hint of sensual. Napalm Death, well that sky looks ominous. Guns and Roses and Cradle of Filth, who knows what went on when they got inside the door. Finely as for the lilac award, a favourite colour of mine as is violet, the colour of the 'Crown' chakra, though I see on another comment you favour the 'Dulux' range. Since this comment is now longer than the poem I must leave you with a little song in my heart...Leila

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Dazza on 2005-07-27 09:06:52
Re: True North
I love stacked clouds. I want to be sky-led, I am. Leila what a treat to see you here, we are so different and wow! so alike. Please hit us with more...Dazza.

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Leila on 2005-07-27 17:17:10
Re: True North
Dazza, we are old souls, have walked Bribie and others, separately yet spiritually connected, sensing the ki. Thanks always for making the connection. The treat is mine to see your comment, thank you and for the hot story pick...Leila x

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e-griff on 2005-07-27 17:31:55
Re: True North
yeah, OK I *squinted* my perspective a bit and understand it now... πŸ™‚

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Leila on 2005-07-27 17:35:00
Re: True North
Thanks Griff, good of you to pop back...Leila

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Gerry on 2005-07-27 22:07:22
Re: True North
A nice descriptive poem--leading the reader to think about the words. I like it...

Gerry.

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Leila on 2005-07-27 22:17:51
Re: True North
Hi Gerry, hope you are well, thanks so much for stopping by and letting me know you liked the poem, appreciate that...Leila

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Apolloneia on 2005-07-31 21:10:43
Re: True North
Favourite stanza: the second, favourite line: the first.
Nice!
Apolloneia

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Leila on 2005-08-02 19:24:38
Re: True North
Thanks Apolloneia, I am so glad you liked it and sorry for the delay in replying..Leila

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Rosco on 14-03-2006
True North
Jesus, I've forgotten how good you are. Time must be almost still when you write. The words themselves seem to be feeling their way rather than the writer. Thank you.

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Once again I'm humbled by such words, thank you so much from the heart...Leila


Do You Love Me? (posted on: 25-04-05)
Carpe Diem!...lighthearted

Perhaps your words
were cryptic
and I was clueless
tilted like a
one-handled basket
on an uphill bicycle

midway to anywhere
coursing the draglines
of your dovetailed voice
my soul pinched
where eyebrows meet

so I return to the ocean
catechize crystals in my pocket
sail mantras off my tongue
next time I see you
I will simply ask.

Archived comments for Do You Love Me?
Apolloneia on 2005-04-25 06:10:51
Re: Do You Love Me?
Simply great Leila.

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Sunken on 2005-04-25 08:02:01
Re: Do You Love Me?
Bloody hell. I may just pack away my writing implements and go and do something less challenging instead. Stunningly good stuff young Leila, so much so that I had to log on and say so. I often have a log on in the morning, but that's not important right now. Loving the 'tilted like a one-handed basket on an uphill bicycle.' In fact, I could quote the lot. If I had the power to nib, I would do so. I don't, so instead I shall offer you an invisible ink blot...? I know its not quite as good, but its the best I can do. Well done on a great write. Do I look good in envious green?

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Take bows, I predict applause.

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bektron on 2005-04-25 08:51:34
Re: Do You Love Me?
Wow Leila, just WOW!
beks:)))
*now has 'why do you love me' by garbage stuck in her head, thank you*

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tai on 2005-04-25 10:21:11
Re: Do You Love Me?
Hi leila, A Perfect poem. 10 from me.

All the best

Tai

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Leila on 2005-04-25 16:34:02
Re: Do You Love Me?
Dear Sunken whatever would I do without your constant support and encouragement. And I see you purple-blue! Forget green, as I seem to recall your last poem here was outstanding. Thanks for reading and the most generous comment...Leila

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Hazy on 2005-04-25 17:12:24
Re: Do You Love Me?
Love this, Leila.

I'd know the question even without the title. Maybe I'm starting to suss this poetry malarkey lol. I never used to comment on these cryptic ones, but I'm def understanding more - or thinking more - I'm not sure which.

Adored that middle stanza - all lines fab.

Hazy x

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chant on 2005-04-25 17:35:05
Re: Do You Love Me?
hm, beautiful.

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Leila on 2005-04-25 18:02:25
Re: Do You Love Me?
Thank you for your kind words Apolloneia, I'm glad you liked the poem...Leila

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Leila on 2005-04-25 20:23:40
Re: Do You Love Me?
Tai you are a generous reader and I thank you for your welcome comment...Leila

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Leila on 2005-04-25 20:26:19
Re: Do You Love Me?
There's nothing quite like a good wow I say, thanks beks for reading, commenting and the hot story thing. I know of the band but not the song so don't know if I should smile or feel guilty!...Leila

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AnthonyEvans on 2005-04-25 21:12:31
Re: Do You Love Me?
it's a little charmer, leila, though i must admit to getting my peddles, saddle and japanese shoes wet as i unexpectedly ended up in the ocean. best wishes, anthony.

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Leila on 2005-04-25 21:19:55
Re: Do You Love Me?
Ha ha Anthony, thanks for letting me know you read and enjoyed...it was almost warm enough here today to dry off in the sun...I say almost!!...Leila

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Leila on 2005-04-25 21:22:15
Re: Do You Love Me?
Thanks Hazy for your generous appraisal... it was one of those poems where the title and the last line were right for each other...L

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Leila on 2005-04-25 21:23:13
Re: Do You Love Me?
Thanks chant and I've chased the book up for you...Leila

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Leila on 2005-04-26 21:43:40
Re: Do You Love Me?
Dear Trevor you really are too kind. I'm afraid Phoebe Hesketh has passed me by but I looked her up on the net and sadly she died this year, a good innings though. There a plenty of sites that mention her but few examples of her poetry, but some lovely things have been said about her work, so I thank you for the comparison. As to your other question, well who knows were the inspiration comes from, somewhere deep inside. I find walking on the beautiful beaches up here is inspiring and frees the mind. I read so much poetry, have maybe a hundred or so poetry books. I may play with an idea in my head for a while but when it comes to getting it down on paper that usually happens very quickly. I can't work at the computer at that stage, it's all handwritten. However it's only after it's typed and printed off that I look to fine tuning it, change or most likely remove a word here or there or change layout, but at that stage it's usually minimal. I wish I was more disciplined. I look at my older work and think it could be improved, however it's all a journey, and I like to think I'm learning and improving all the time, so I tend not to re-work old poems. I suppose I just work to the rhythm of my soul. Sorry I'll shut up now but thank you so much for your generous words, they mean a lot...Leila

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Slovitt on 2005-04-27 00:17:28
Re: Do You Love Me?
Leila: 'My soul pinched/where eyebrows meet' is very nice, and your 'next time I see you/I will simply ask' is the light-hearted, practical approach though the utterance belies the underlying hurt.
A good poem. Swep

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Leila on 2005-04-27 10:39:57
Re: Do You Love Me?
Swep I am so glad you thought it a good poem and thank you for taking the time to say so and your insightful comment, much appreciated...Leila

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steadyeddy on 2005-05-05 15:41:16
Re: Do You Love Me?
beautiful poem I loved it..

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Leila on 2005-05-05 15:51:46
Re: Do You Love Me?
Thanks a lot steadyeddy, I'm so pleased that you thought so and took the time to tell me, many thanks...Leila

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Dazza on 2005-06-26 20:04:14
Re: Do You Love Me?
Yay, Leila posts! It is without doubt a solid fact that you write with more soul than anyone round these parts. Dazza.

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Leila on 2005-06-26 20:42:24
Re: Do You Love Me?
Dazza thanks for finding this and for being so kind...Leila

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pullmyhair on 2005-07-06 19:38:22
Re: Do You Love Me?
This is definitely evidence of your style blooming. There's a subtlety and a wonderful way with images, shown in

"tilted like a
one-handled basket
on an uphill bicycle"

I like! I like! pully x

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Leila on 2005-07-06 22:41:51
Re: Do You Love Me?
Thanks pully for your generous words and I'm glad you like...Leila

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tai on 2005-07-12 20:20:36
Re: Do You Love Me?
Hi leila, I have been waiting to read some of your work. I must have missed this one. I love it.

Very skillfully executed too.

Smiling

Tai

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eddiesolo on 2005-07-25 19:17:41
Re: Do You Love Me?
I shall echo what others have said...bloody marvelous!

A great read.

Si:-)

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Leila on 2005-07-26 20:10:45
Re: Do You Love Me?
Si thanks for visiting this also and that great response, I'm delighted...Leila

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Leila on 2005-07-26 20:13:09
Re: Do You Love Me?
You may have visited twice Tai, but I'm not complaining, that's a great comment and much appreciated...Leila

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Undercurrent (posted on: 07-03-05)
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Trick of light tussles morning the patchwork room swallows sounds of criss-cross lives I shadow your curves that snake the carpet and chairs for spindrift clothes The thresh of day drums on doors and walls as I brush the sheets for last night's rain.
Archived comments for Undercurrent
AnthonyEvans on 2005-03-07 11:30:06
Re: Undercurrent
dear leila, it has a nice feeling to it this one. i like the swallows sounds of criss-cross lives and the thresh of day. hope all went well with your move (are you still up in Scotland?). best wishes, anthony.

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bektron on 2005-03-07 12:09:08
Re: Undercurrent
HI Leila, this poem is so aural, I could hear all of the sounds described so clearly, full of grace and crispness.
bek

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Sunken on 2005-03-07 20:23:04
Re: Undercurrent
I love -

'I shadow your curves that snake the carpet and chairs for spindrift clothes'

This is so good Leila that I feel the need to add expletives. I'll try no to though. I may be wrong, but there's a kind of sensual undertone to this. Maybe it's my delicately poised position, but really - I get a steamy vibe from it. I'm sorry if that's wrong of me. I'll take a cold shower and think of Maggie Thatcher (usually works.) Another completely satisfying read from one of my Fav Ukaneers. Top marks from me. I'll get the Munky to demand a nib for ya (-: Not that he managed it for me, the useless primate. Nice one Leila. One of these days, fellow Uka members will realise your talent and I'll be able to say, 'Told ya fuckin so'
Oh balls, I knew I'd end up expleting )-:

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Leila on 2005-03-08 11:44:42
Re: Undercurrent
Anthony how kind of you to stop by and leave your most positive remarks including particular favourite lines. Thanks also for the good wishes re the move. Yes I am still in Scotland and the 'move' is completed in spite of the heavy snowfall that week. However the work is ongoing and I still haven't found a 'home' for the computer (lots of boxes out of storage to be gone through) so sadly I have very little time for the joys of reading through the work on here. But it will settle eventually. Sorry I've gone on when really I just wanted to say thank you. Best wishes...Leila

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Leila on 2005-03-08 11:47:24
Re: Undercurrent
bek what a delightful comment and it's much appreciated. I hope to be taking more part again on the site once everything settles down and I look forward to catching up with your fine work. Thanks again...Leila

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Leila on 2005-03-08 11:53:46
Re: Undercurrent
Oh sunken you are such a wonderful supporter of your fellow writers and your comments are just a delight. I am so honoured that you think so well of my work and can only say a huge thanks to you for all the support. Please, please though I wouldn't want you to suffer thoughts of Maggie...!! Thanks sunken you are a star...Leila

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Abel on 2005-03-08 15:00:14
Re: Undercurrent
"The thresh of day drums on doors and walls as I brush the sheets for last night’s rain." I wish I had written these lines. Beautiful, delicate, inspiring.

Ward



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Leila on 2005-03-08 15:03:49
Re: Undercurrent
Ward thank you for the generosity of your beautiful comment, much appreciated...Leila

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pullmyhair on 2005-03-08 21:39:45
Re: Undercurrent
Very tactile and textured poem, Leila. I can almost stroke each word, especially "spindrift" and "tussles". I think you could begin on "Trick of light", as it's a strong opening, rather than repeating the title. Other than that, I'd be happy to tuck this poem in with me at night. Very cosy and some really nice motions like threshing, snaking and brushing. Onamatopeia seems to be one of your strongest points. Lovely stuff! pully x

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Leila on 2005-03-08 22:46:37
Re: Undercurrent
Oops that's just the title repeated 'cos I cut and pasted it in...so I might go edit that now! Thanks so much pully for reading and leaving such a splendid comment...I'm so pleased you liked this one...Leila

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shackleton on 2005-03-08 22:55:44
Re: Undercurrent
Hi Leila. You capture these moments with a beautiful, soft femininity. Smashing poetry. Bye now.

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Sunken on 2005-03-08 23:05:29
Re: Undercurrent
Mmm, I'd watch that Shackattack with his charming little comments (-; Glad you're finally getting the attention you deserve Leila. Eat lettuce, drink water and contemplate a world without snails (it really could happen)-:

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Leila on 2005-03-08 23:08:24
Re: Undercurrent
Thanks Mike for taking the time to read and for your great comment...Leila

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Leila on 2005-03-08 23:11:13
Re: Undercurrent
sunken how sweet are you to come back and keep an eye on this and thanks for the advice!!...Leila x

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Leila on 2005-03-08 23:12:44
Re: Undercurrent
Hi Mike thanks again!! Look below...ha ha...Leila

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Leila on 2005-03-08 23:14:48
Re: Undercurrent
Oops...I give up the comments have gone out of order..L

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Slovitt on 2005-03-09 00:49:40
Re: Undercurrent
Leila: This poem has a delicate atmosphere with its 'I brush the sheets for last night's rain.', a line one has to love. And at the same time there are vigorous words, 'tussles', 'snake', 'thresh', and 'drum', which create an attractive dynamic, ergo a poem. Very nice. Swep

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Leila on 2005-03-09 14:27:48
Re: Undercurrent
Swep you have understood perfectly my intention with this poem and your thoughtful, insightful comment has truly delighted me. Thank you very much. Leila

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Dargo77 on 2005-03-09 17:21:13
Re: Undercurrent
Leila, this reeks of a poet, who knows their craft. I found this to be one of the best poems I have read for a very long time.
Best regards,
Dargo

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Leila on 2005-03-09 22:27:17
Re: Undercurrent
Dargo it's lovely to see you here and you are too kind. I am most grateful for your warm thoughts, thank you very much...Leila

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KevTheRev on 2005-03-10 09:09:57
Re: Undercurrent
Great, just superb.

Its so narural, earthly, the balace of words. I find so hard to do myself, you put me to shame.

Warm regards

Kevin

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Leila on 2005-03-11 01:18:26
Re: Undercurrent
Kevin, first of all welcome to uka and I'm sorry as yet I am not familiar with your work, I think you joined recently and I've not been around much the last few weeks. So I will have a read of your postings soon. I am very pleased that you liked this enough to take the time to leave such a warm comment. Thank you...Leila

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Leila on 2005-03-11 01:22:38
Re: Undercurrent
Dear Trevor it's lovely to receive a comment like this, it really makes it all worthwhile. Thank you for your tremendous support and encouragement, I really am grateful. Best wishes...Leila

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Dazza on 2005-03-14 18:47:00
Re: Undercurrent
I'm dreaming this one and in it I am Spring with showers of strange sound and light. You make me feel nether worldly. Dazza.

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Zydha on 2005-03-15 10:28:58
Re: Undercurrent
Shadow quoted my favourite lines, Leila, but that is not stricly true, as this is beautifully written from the first word to the last.

Poetry at it's best, IMO. I must spend some time in here reading through more of your work. A definate ten and a fav, because I enjoyed such a well written piece so much, Zydha

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Leila on 2005-03-15 22:43:09
Re: Undercurrent
Thanks Dazza, I feel quite floaty now and ta for the hot story thingy too...Leila

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Leila on 2005-03-15 22:46:04
Re: Undercurrent
Zydha thanks for your lovely comment and hot story pick and please excuse if this comment is out of order...Dazza's has just floated off somewhere, well I did say I felt floaty, let's see where this one goes...Leila

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Leila on 2005-03-15 22:47:26
Re: Undercurrent
Dazza my reply has drifted down below...Leila

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Bradene on 2005-04-03 18:09:23
Re: Undercurrent
this is a touch of magic, especially:-

The thresh of day
drums on doors
and walls
as I brush the sheets
for last night’s rain.

Beautiful poetrry Leila. Love Val x



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Leila on 2005-04-03 18:16:21
Re: Undercurrent
Val thank you so much for visiting here and leaving your warm and lovely comment. Hope you are feeling better...you have been missed...Leila x

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steadyeddy on 2005-04-06 12:13:25
Re: Undercurrent
beautiful write, I really enjoyed reading it,,so I thank you

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Leila on 2005-04-06 12:24:16
Re: Undercurrent
steadyeddy hi and welcome to uka. Thank you for reading this and taking time to comment. I am so pleased you enjoyed it. I will be sure to check out your work as I am currently trying to catch up on the last month or so postings as I've been too busy moving house and stuff to be around lately. Best wishes Leila

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Jolen on 2005-07-18 17:18:12
Re: Undercurrent
Leila,

I agree with the rest, an amazing little poem here. I too enjoyed the final line... Wonderful work.
blessings,
Jolen

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Inner Rainbow (posted on: 07-01-05)
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Inner Rainbow

North and the sky
is liquid blue
the sun is afternoon

I have faith
you are only
half a mile away

so I picture you
in chakra colours
remember slipping secrets

into the sleeves
of old LP's that circled
crunched clothes

the road floats downstream
a heart hovers, as moth-eaten
dreams arrive at your door.

Archived comments for Inner Rainbow
deepoceanfish2 on 2005-01-07 11:51:37
Re: Inner Rainbow
Leila,

This is a stunner....bringing past and present together with such tender clarity. Loved the final verse:

'the road floats downstream
a heart hovers, as moth-eaten
dreams arrive at your door. '

A Brilliant read!

Regards,
Adele πŸ˜‰





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Bramwith22 on 2005-01-07 15:54:16
Re: Inner Rainbow
Leila,

A tender and well crafted piece. Well done.

Regards,
Bram

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Leila on 2005-01-07 15:57:17
Re: Inner Rainbow
Trevor I could not wish for a better comment, you are a truly generous reader and those words have made my day. Thank you so very much and also for letting me know that you read my other efforts over the festive season. I do hope you get some time to relax. Huge thanks...Leila

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Leila on 2005-01-07 15:59:22
Re: Inner Rainbow
Adele I am so pleased to have your lovely comment and thanks for taking the time and for your great support....Leila

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Leila on 2005-01-07 16:01:28
Re: Inner Rainbow
Bram thank you for reading and for leaving your thoughts, I am delighted you liked this one...Leila

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flash on 2005-01-07 16:08:40
Re: Inner Rainbow
Cool dreamy piece L...you're obviously a deep romantic at heart. Beautifully crafted as always and evoking just the right atmosphere.

i'm not sure i know wot i'm talking about, but i do know i liked it very much indeed.

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Leila on 2005-01-07 16:14:30
Re: Inner Rainbow
Flashy thanks, glad you liked it and took the time to say so...you're a bit of a romatic one yourself me thinks...Leila x

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Leila on 2005-01-07 16:17:54
Re: Inner Rainbow
uhmm that was romantic...I'm sure your'e not 'romatic' but I'm sure you're 'a romatic' in the nicest way...ok ok...I know, I'll go away, thanks again...L

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dylan on 2005-01-07 16:22:20
Re: Inner Rainbow
Very well-crafted, picturesque piece, m`dear.
The strength of the poem for me is in the descriptive passages-" in chankra colours, slipping secrets into the sleeves, circled crunched clothes"
Nice alliteration, also.
With emotive work-love, loss,tenderness, I always feel an understated piece carries far more power.
This is handled perfectly-the overall effect is of poignant memory.
The only slight quibbles I have (well I am an old grump, remember) is in the phrases "the road floats downstream, a heart hovers". Perhaps just slightly oversweet?
I personally would have something like "the road rushes to here.I wait breathless".
Just a thought-a very fine poem.
XXX
D.

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Leila on 2005-01-07 16:36:35
Re: Inner Rainbow
Dylan great to see you hear and thanks very much for taking the time to leave all your thoughts. I agree that the strengths are those lines and the alliteration. I was trying to tie up the ending...liquid sky-floats and the feeling of being carried along with a hopeful heart...I appreciate your point, I know you don't like 'em too sweet. Thanks again...Leila x

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Sunken on 2005-01-07 17:22:26
Re: Inner Rainbow
I'm so chuffed you're getting plenty of comment on this young Leila (cue guitar riff.) I have a thing for rainbows. I use to have this recurring dream in which I was swinging from a rope suspended from the center of a huge frowning rainbow. I always seem to be swinging in my dreams - Should I rephrase that? Anyway, I digress - i also accidentally dye white shirts blue - It said on the label 'Pre washed denim' You just can't trust anyone these days Leila (cue guitar riff.) You can however, trust me when I say (how corny was that?) that your work continues to impress me more than Kylies... pout. Her arse is so played out. Have you seen the sleeve of her new cd? Now that's one hell of a pout young Leila (cue Eric) and no mistake. In keeping with my fruit based awarding system (details can be found on teletext page 2005) I would like to award you not just one banana, but a whole bloody bunch. I love this style of writing and you nail it every time. It's not easy to write like that, I've tried, I've failed and I've left vultures picking over the bones. Leila (cue Clapton) what the fuck am I on about? It could be the time of year, it could be the way the moon is spying on the earth, or it could simply be that the drugs aren't working. Fear not, I am of sober mind - which is even more worrying? I shall depart, for this comment is now in danger of falling off the bottom of my screen. Take care and a torch. Much respect.

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Leila on 2005-01-08 12:51:55
Re: Inner Rainbow
dear Sunken I wish my poems were as entertaining as your comments! Thank you hugely for the fruit award, I do believe it's a great idea, and I am thrilled to get a bunch of bananas... my favourites, you are definately psychic.. and thanks for mentioning Eric more than once...L

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Sunken on 2005-01-08 15:59:44
Re: Inner Rainbow
I never noticed the nib last time Leila, of Eric Clapton fame? It's only right you have one. Long may your ink flow. Thanks.

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Dargo77 on 2005-01-09 05:09:07
Re: Inner Rainbow
Leila, an absolute pleasure to read. A Hot Story for me. My only wish is that you post more often.
Best regards,
Dargo

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Leila on 2005-01-09 07:19:31
Re: Inner Rainbow
Sunken another mention of Eric, I'm liking it! Yeah I only noticed the nib yesterday, don't know when it appeared, nibs are a mystery so maybe you can put your supernatural powers to work there, anyway thanks to the nibby people and thanks again to you for coming back to this one...L

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Leila on 2005-01-09 07:26:11
Re: Inner Rainbow
Dargo thanks indeed for that kind comment and hot pick...re posting it's always a time thing and I get lots of pleasure from reading the work here and never manage to get through as much as I'd like. If you read through the comments here yours and Chants excellent work gets a mention and I am thrilled to be mentioned alongside you both....L

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pullmyhair on 2005-01-09 10:26:47
Re: Inner Rainbow
Reckon my favourite stanza is the final one, which is the most surreal, breaking slowly off from reality as the speaker almost daydreams. Very peaceful, drowsy poem. Very summery in that respect. Nice half-rhymes in preceding stanzas, like "sleeves" and "LPs", too. I reckon my only crit would be that ""moth-eaten" is as bit cliched. Maybe customise the phrase to "moth-gnawed" or something along those lines. It's just a tiny blip in a grand poem, but it stands out a little.
Mucho enjoyo, Ms L! pully x

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tai on 2005-01-09 10:35:01
Re: Inner Rainbow
Leila, All I can say is...

Stunning work indeed.

Thank you for sharing.

All the best writers are sensitive souls

Tai

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Leila on 2005-01-09 10:56:24
Re: Inner Rainbow
pully thanks for your appraisal and glad the poem came over as I intended. Re moth-eaten you have caught me out, it glared at me and I changed it a couple of times...considered moth-fretted, because fretted means eaten away and also ruffled water surface which would tie in well...just can't decide if it sounds ok! Anyway if you come back here again what do you think...thanks again...Leila

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Leila on 2005-01-09 11:06:01
Re: Inner Rainbow
Tai what you have said is just lovely and than you very much for reading and taking time to comment...Leila

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shackleton on 2005-01-09 13:18:11
Re: Inner Rainbow
Soft and gentle as a sigh, Leila. Smashing poetry.

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Leila on 2005-01-09 15:58:08
Re: Inner Rainbow
shackleton, thanks so much for reading and letting me know you liked this. Good to have you back...Leila

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Bradene on 2005-01-11 16:38:45
Re: Inner Rainbow
A beautiful piece Leila, soft and tender, with some lovely lines. Love Val x

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Leila on 2005-01-11 16:43:52
Re: Inner Rainbow
Val it's so good to have you read this and leave your lovely comment, thanks and hope you are well...Leila x

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AnthonyEvans on 2005-01-15 17:39:59
Re: Inner Rainbow
Leila, i know some people don't like to be the first to comment but what about us who come late to the party when all the good things have already been said. great poem. best wishes, anthony.

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Leila on 2005-01-15 17:46:54
Re: Inner Rainbow
I could not have wished for a more welcome late comer. I am smiling here as I think I must have been reading and commenting on your latest piece at the exact time you were reading this. Your thoughts are most welcome and thank you...Leila

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teifii on 2005-01-31 20:03:08
Re: Inner Rainbow
This is lovely. Very atmospheric. I especially like the first and last stanzas. the road floats downstream is a marvellous image.
Daff

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Leila on 2005-02-01 12:35:27
Re: Inner Rainbow
Daff I was delighted to receive 2 emails telling me you'd left a comment and also that you had picked this as a hot story. I am so pleased you thought it worthy and thank you also for letting me know the bits you most enjoyed, I am most grateful...Leila

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Dazza on 2005-02-07 17:20:45
Re: Inner Rainbow
Cha-iku of the highest order! Lots of little diamonds on a necklace from the biggest jeweller there is. You have cornered the market on delicate! Dazza.

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Leila on 2005-02-14 01:44:23
Re: Inner Rainbow
Dazza, sorry to be so long in thanking you for such a beautiful comment and so pleased you see a spiritual element in my work. Your words have made my day, thank you very much...Leila

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Jolen on 2005-07-09 23:29:34
Re: Inner Rainbow
Amazing...... Now, that's a delicate piece and beautiful... I loved this... So deserving of the nib.

A pleasure and I look forward to reading more of your work with great antipation.

blessings,
Jolen

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Leila on 2005-07-09 23:40:41
Re: Inner Rainbow
Jolen thank you for stopping by here and taking the time to leave your welcome and lovely comment...Leila

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Scrying (posted on: 27-12-04)
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Scrying

Frankincense burned
as we shaped the night
with angel cards
words tumbled to perfection
R.E.M. played out dreams
we talked in hours
beyond the shadow of a door
a lifetime latched.

Archived comments for Scrying
Sunken on 2004-12-27 03:27:29
Re: Scrying
Wow. How do you get som much in to such a short piece? '...beyond the shadow of a door a lifetime latched' Loved that line. 'rapid eye movements played out dreams' Brilliant, sublime, not fair on the rest of us. Good to see you back Leila.

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Leila on 2004-12-27 06:16:08
Re: Scrying
sunken...thank you so much, it's lovely to log on and discover such a lovely comment, thank you for your positive comment and support for my efforts...Leila

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deepoceanfish2 on 2004-12-27 08:41:39
Re: Scrying
Leila,

Ah! Such an impacting piece, written with such succinctness. Loved this:

'beyond the shadow of a door
a lifetime latched. '

Jewel of a final line!

Regards,
Adele




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richardwatt on 2004-12-27 13:09:49
Re: Scrying
A very short piece, yet not one that is lacking in intent. Things veered from sixth-form territory 'Frankincense' and became special, with a sort of brittleness that gives the illusion of being easily broken. Scrying (good title, btw) is a foreshadowing tool that usually ends in come-uppance, so let's hope the concerned parties have a key for the door.

A small jewel, Leila

The official scoundrel for Euro 2004,
rick x

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Leila on 2004-12-28 08:41:38
Re: Scrying
Adele thank you very much for your warm response and rating for this poem, I am so pleased you liked it...Leila

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Leila on 2004-12-28 08:45:54
Re: Scrying
rick thank you for reading this and responding so positively, glad you liked the title too. Your comment has brought a smile to my face, thanks indeed...Leila

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Bramwith22 on 2004-12-30 10:39:20
Re: Scrying
Leila,

A fine, romantic read. Nicely done.

Regards,
Bram

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Leila on 2004-12-30 11:40:46
Re: Scrying
Bram, thank you for reading this and taking time to comment, glad you enjoyed it and thought it worked...Leila

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Abel on 2005-01-05 09:00:15
Re: Scrying
"(B)eyond the shadow of a door
a lifetime latched." Love this image. Sounds like an evening with Mr. Stipe & Co. was inspiring indeed. You have crafted a fine, to-the-point piece that I really, really enjoyed.

Best,

Ward



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Slovitt on 2005-01-05 10:52:53
Re: Scrying
Leila: I had read this and been attracted to it when it was first posted, but I didn't know the word scrying and my dictionary didn't show it.
This morning I've googled your title and your poem has opened to me, and it's a piece I very much like. As others have already cited your very fine closing lines I will only note my agreement. Your capitalized R.E.M. is the band, isn't it? A good poem. Swep

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Leila on 2005-01-05 12:11:41
Re: Scrying
Ward I am delighted you really enjoyed this one and thank you for taking the time to let me know, it's much appreciated...Leila

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Leila on 2005-01-05 12:18:16
Re: Scrying
Swep it was most kind of you to take the time to search out the title of this poem and you are correct on both counts; I believe knowing the word 'scrying' does open the poem up for the reader, and R.E.M the band. I am very glad you liked this and the closing lines seem to have pleased. Thanks again...Leila

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Bradene on 2005-01-05 15:32:59
Re: Scrying
I too had to google for the word Scrying Leila and it's true it does open up a wonderful poem, a great and inspired work Love Val x

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Leila on 2005-01-06 03:48:11
Re: Scrying
Val very many thanks for your time on this little one much appreciated and for your generous comments, you are most kind...Leila

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pullmyhair on 2005-01-23 16:31:08
Re: Scrying
Can't believe I've not commented on this one yet, Leila! So concise, peaceful and gentle and you can't go wrong with a spot of REM! That last line is excellent. You really get the sense of either a couple of people or maybe a group of close friends by candlelight. Great stuff! pully x

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Leila on 2005-01-24 06:19:26
Re: Scrying
Dear pully, what a lovely surprise to log on this morning and discover you'd left a comment on this one. You are an intuitive reader and I'm pleased that the scene/atmosphere came across so clearly for you. Thanks for letting me know...Leila

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Accident (posted on: 20-12-04)
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Accident

A tenacious tourist
helped me up
while my world
was still spinning
before I plunged

tongue-tied
crystal-dipped
into the wild water
of your smile

tiny salt-licked cuts
stung momentarily
bruises silently inked

the hour-glass tilts
fingers thrum grazed knees-
I wonder how far a person
can fall, with no-one
to pick them up.



Archived comments for Accident
Sunken on 2004-12-20 02:12:22
Re: Accident
This is a stunning piece Leila.
'I wonder how far a person can fall, with no-one to pick them up'.
There are so many different meanings that could apply to that one line. I for one am chuffed that you are posting again. Two months is far to long. Though the wait was entirely worth it, you'd better not leave it so long next time. You'll have the poetry police on your back if you do. I was seriously considering grassing you up myself! Well worthy of the nib young Leila. A truly great little piece that deserves many reads.

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Leila on 2004-12-20 07:21:44
Re: Accident
Gosh Sunken that's a lovely comment which is very nice to receive as is the nib, so to the nibby people thanks also. You pushed me on to post in your reply to my comment on your work, it's purely a time thing and I have been trying to catch up with some of the work on here, but I am slow, end up reading pieces anything up to ten times...anway just a big thanks for your kind words...Leila

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Sunken on 2004-12-20 14:17:17
Re: Accident
You are more than welcome young Leila. I've needed pushing big time lately, so I know how ya feel. I'm just glad you posted and I hope you'll keep it up. The nib proves what I always knew, you have noodles of talent.

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Dargo77 on 2004-12-20 18:07:08
Re: Accident
Leila, I agree with Sunken, so nice to have you back posting. This poem to me is full of class and the flow is absolutely amazing. A Hot Story for me.
Best regards,
Dargo

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deepoceanfish2 on 2004-12-21 10:26:15
Re: Accident
Leila,

Absolutely stunning! A fav for me.

Regards,
Adele πŸ™‚

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Leila on 2004-12-21 11:42:42
Re: Accident
Dargo as ever you are a generous reader and thank you most sincerely for you kind words and hot story pick...Leila

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Leila on 2004-12-21 11:44:38
Re: Accident
Adele thank you for the compliment and for making this a fav...hope 2005 brings some good news...Leila

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Leila on 2004-12-21 11:46:26
Re: Accident
Beks thanks for the great rating, most grateful and to whoever pressed the nom buttom, cheers and thanks...Leila

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flash on 2004-12-21 17:38:41
Re: Accident
Stunning!!! Sorry to repeat Sunky's line, and i luv the last line so much.


Brilliant.

Flash

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Leila on 2004-12-21 19:28:37
Re: Accident
Well Flashy stunning is a word I like so thank you very much and it's good of you to read my work and leave such a positive comment...Leila

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woodbine on 2004-12-22 17:00:36
Re: Accident
A poem which asks essentially how badly can romantic love disrupt my life is especially apposite this week when wretched Mr Blunkett, with a thousand monkeys
of the British press on his back, plunged to the obscurity of the back benches. I think if by chance he should read your poem it would give him food for thought. Nicely done.

Happy Christmas,
John

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Leila on 2004-12-23 11:23:55
Re: Accident
John you are right and thank you so much for taking the time to read my poem and leaving your thoughts, much appreciated.
All good wishes...Leila

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Leila on 2004-12-23 11:29:53
Re: Accident/ To Freya
Dear Freya, I just knew you had read this and I am delighted you picked this as a hot story and thank you for the great rating too. I am pleased this met with your approval and look forward to the day you will treat us by posting some of your accomplished work. Had the most wonderful sunset over the Bay a few days ago.
Christmas joy to you and yours...Leila x

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Dazza on 2005-05-16 20:32:03
Re: Accident
Leila, even though you are not producing i have plenty of great back cataloguing to do! This was a special start, Dazza.

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Stepping Backwards (posted on: 15-10-04)
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Stepping Backwards

Somewhere between sunshine
and rain
where the rustling tendrils
of Autumn leaves
tease the whispering wind
we meet.

We are silent
our shadows dark against the past
afraid of Leyden jar
expressions, excuses
we circumvent the charnel house of lost love.

Two hooded crows
guard the wishing well
the skulking moon appears

And I remember
your eyes and lips were planets
that left me breathless

Old longings
suffuse the crevices of night.

I pause-
my silver pockets tarnished
pebble-dashed
by shrapnel led dreams.



Archived comments for Stepping Backwards
ritawrites on 2004-10-15 03:07:08
Re: Stepping Backwards
yeah, I know, been there – I think you've told it very well --

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Dazza on 2004-10-15 05:55:28
Re: Stepping Backwards
Power schmaltz of the highest order. Some fall into the sugar trap and get syrupy. You have the great gift of keeping well back from the sugar sack. Spot on. Dazza.

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tai on 2004-10-15 09:15:54
Re: Stepping Backwards
The imagination and wonderful memories, are the stepping stone of happiness, in both directions! I love this poem.

Tai

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Bradene on 2004-10-15 14:07:04
Re: Stepping Backwards
Just the right tone and some of your lines are amazing, I especially love the last stanza. Excellence. Love Val x

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Leila on 2004-10-15 16:09:49
Re: Stepping Backwards
Thanks Rita...glad it worked...Leila

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Leila on 2004-10-15 16:11:34
Re: Stepping Backwards
Thanks again Rita...think that comment drifted up above...L

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Leila on 2004-10-15 16:13:18
Re: Stepping Backwards
Yeah I try to limit my sugar but I do succumb to the odd piece of chocolate, thanks for your read and comment...Leila

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Leila on 2004-10-15 16:15:08
Re: Stepping Backwards
Thanks Val for your generous comment, glad you thought the last verse worked...Leila

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Leila on 2004-10-15 16:17:08
Re: Stepping Backwards
Tai that's a great comment, thanks so much..Leila

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Abel on 2004-10-15 16:55:25
Re: Stepping Backwards
Such delicate, expertly chosen descriptions...
"afraid of Leyden jar
expressions, excuses
we circumvent the charnel house of lost love." and
"pebble-dashed
by shrapnel led dreams." Very fine work indeed.

Ward



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Leila on 2004-10-15 16:59:01
Re: Stepping Backwards
Ward you are a generous and thoughtful reader, many thanks for your positive words...Leila

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uppercase on 2004-10-16 10:20:05
Re: Stepping Backwards
Great lines in this poem, very well done....Erma

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Sunken on 2004-10-16 10:48:19
Re: Stepping Backwards
Hi Leila, just had to pop on uka to say how much I enjoyed this. Far too many great bits if you ask me. Please try to be a bit crapper and give us all a chance yeah? (-; Take buses and care.

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Leila on 2004-10-16 12:35:55
Re: Stepping Backwards
Hi Erma thanks for reading and letting me know you liked this...Leila

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Leila on 2004-10-16 12:38:22
Re: Stepping Backwards
Sunken glad to have you read my poem and thanks for the comment...made me smile on a rather grey, rainy day in the far North of Scotland..Leila

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Kat on 2004-10-17 00:00:34
Re: Stepping Backwards
A wonderful opening to a lovely poem.

Kat πŸ™‚

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Leila on 2004-10-17 07:12:15
Re: Stepping Backwards
Kat thank you for reading and taking the time to let me know you enjoyed the poem, I am most grateful...Leila

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Leila on 2004-10-17 10:00:41
Re: Stepping Backwards
Trevor you are very generous and kind, thank you so much...Leila

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Safron on 2004-10-19 21:09:48
Re: Stepping Backwards
Leila,

This is so well written I especially loved the ending.

"
I pause-
my silver pockets tarnished
pebble-dashed
by shrapnel led dreams. "

Safron

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Leila on 2004-10-20 05:59:06
Re: Stepping Backwards
Safron thank you very much for reading my poem and taking the time to let me know you enjoyed it. I am especially pleased that you felt the ending worked...thanks again...Leila

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flash on 2004-11-05 07:07:33
Re: Stepping Backwards
lovely Leila

A mutt like me shouldn't even dream of trying to comment on such beautiful words. But lines like...

Two hooded crows
guard the wishing well
the skulking moon appears

And I remember
your eyes and lips were planets
that left me breathless

I pause-
my silver pockets tarnished
pebble-dashed
by shrapnel led dreams.

They are just so, so good to my ear anyway, the image of the two hooded crows especially.

Great work

xxxxx
Flashy



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Leila on 2004-11-05 07:39:08
Re: Stepping Backwards
hey flashy...nice to see you here...I know you don't usually leave many comments on poetry, so your visit and thoughts are much appreciated..thanks very much...Leila

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margot on 2004-11-16 15:25:06
Re: Stepping Backwards
some very nice and effective imagery.

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Leila on 2004-11-16 16:00:48
Re: Stepping Backwards
margot hi, nice to see you here.Thank you very much for reading my work and taking time to leave a comment and for rating as well, much appreciated. Leila

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Skeeter on 2004-11-22 10:14:16
Re: Stepping Backwards
I love the way you have written this, immaculate phrasing, so considered, so spot on; and I love the content, fresh images, and a sensitive thoughtful treatment that delivers a punch even with an old old subject. I loved "and I remember/your eyes and lips were planets/that left me breathless"; so touching and true. A favourite for me.

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Leila on 2004-11-24 05:05:29
Re: Stepping Backwards
Skeeter hi, sorry to have taken so long to thank you for such a lovely comment. You are generous and thoughtful and I am delighted you picked this as a hot story, that means a lot to mean...Leila

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deepoceanfish2 on 2004-12-06 16:44:08
Re: Stepping Backwards
Leila,

A stunningly sensual read. Loved this:

'And I remember
your eyes and lips were planets
that left me breathless '

Beautfully written!

Regards,
Adele πŸ™‚

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Leila on 2004-12-06 16:52:49
Re: Stepping Backwards
Adele hi how's things? You are kind to read this and leave such a lovely comment and rating. Many thanks and it's great to have you around...Leila

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Sunken on 2005-08-28 19:27:34
Re: Stepping Backwards
Hope your pc probems get sorte soon young Leila. Purely for selfish reasons you understand, this is perfect.

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making do with acrylic

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Leila on 2005-09-04 18:48:21
Re: Stepping Backwards
Sunken a big thanks for all the comments you left on my poems over the last month during my computer nightmare. It really meant a lot to me and happily I'm now on broadband but still sorting out the bill with BT. It cheered me up to read your words especially on the odd occasion I popped into the libary to use the computer briefly. Take care...Leila

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Belonging (posted on: 02-07-04)
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Belonging

We never really slept-
just buried clocks
in the sanctuary
of night

every time I moved
you moved with me
winged eyelashes
on your cheek returns a kiss

small spaces of silence
in between borrowed breaths
arms tighten
at the whisper of a name

all the words of the heart
the unanswered questions
are at this moment
blue rolling waves

tonight our souls rest
fragrant in spiritual essence
candle-flamed, undamaged
utterly belonging.


Archived comments for Belonging
Leila on 2004-07-02 11:32:46
Re: Belonging
Trevor thank you so much for you thoughtful and lovely comment..also for the rating..much appreciated.Leila x

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Bradene on 2004-07-02 14:54:55
Re: Belonging
This is a lovely poem Leila it flows so well and your use of language is a delight, I loved the first stanza,
I felt it was the perfect way to start to your poem. Brilliant. Love Val xx

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Leila on 2004-07-02 15:16:23
Re: Belonging
Val thank you for the read, the rating and your lovely words...I am so pleased you liked this. Leila x

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Gerry on 2004-07-02 15:32:30
Re: Belonging
You captured the moment well.

Gerry xxx.

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Leila on 2004-07-02 15:37:47
Re: Belonging
Gerry thanks for reading, rating, and taking time to leave a comment, it's much appreciated. Leila x

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Dazza on 2004-07-02 17:17:50
Re: Belonging
Leila, you are a gentle soul (and an old one), I wish I could tap into your ether, Dazza.

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Leila on 2004-07-02 18:28:32
Re: Belonging
Dazza thanks, I believe in gentleness and yes an old soul...don't forget I've read a couple of your biography stories so I know you are only recognizing yourself, gentle old soul...Leila x

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ruby on 2004-07-03 03:53:56
Re: Belonging
Beautiful atmosphere you create here leila with all the soft textures and sounds in the poem - I like the way you mix physical and spiritual closeness through the power of your images,

ruby

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Leila on 2004-07-03 04:13:04
Re: Belonging
Ruby that is such a lovely comment and I really appreciate it, thanks so much..Leila

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Jack_Cade on 2004-07-03 14:43:35
Re: Belonging
Very bewitching. I always think I'm going to get fed up of bed poems, but this is really good, particularly the first three stanzas, which recall, acutely, sensations both familiar and distant to me (and, I'm sure, many others!) Love 'winged eyelashes', and the arms tightening, and the burying of clocks.

Not sure about the title, especially as its repeated at the end - perhaps a context-suggesting title? Like the name of the place (town or city,) or the time of year.

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Leila on 2004-07-03 15:18:36
Re: Belonging
Thanks Jack Cade I'm glad you found much to please you in this one and that you felt it worked. Re title yeah this is something I tend to do sometimes.. pick out a word in a poem or the very last word..your comments are well thought out and appreciated. Leila

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dylan on 2004-07-03 16:28:37
Re: Belonging
Very nice poem, Leila.
Being a heartless bastard meself, it is just a tad too pretty for moi.Which I realise is not a valid crit.
But I really liked the first stanza-
"We never really slept-
just buried clocks
in the sanctuary
of night"
Vey tender and well observed.


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Leila on 2004-07-03 16:39:32
Re: Belonging
aahh but you did think it was tender..not so heartless then...thanks for reading and commenting..L

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Faerie on 2004-07-04 03:08:02
Re: Belonging
Leila.. i started by picking out the first stanza as my favourite. and then i got to the next and decided that was my favourite.. and you probably know where i'm going with this πŸ™‚ the entire poem is excellent.. you capture that sense of unity very well.

nancy

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Leila on 2004-07-04 05:08:54
Re: Belonging
Nancy thanks for the read and leaving your thoughts...glad you felt it worked as a whole. Leila

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Kat on 2004-07-04 20:05:33
Re: Belonging
Hi Leila

A beautiful poem and my favourite stanza was...them all

Kat

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Leila on 2004-07-05 03:09:13
Re: Belonging
Kat that is so kind you to take time to let me know you enjoyed the whole poem, thank you very much. Leila

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PaulS on 2004-07-09 09:22:42
Re: Belonging
Every part of this evokes and builds up the image of closeness. Marvelous!!

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Leila on 2004-07-09 10:02:02
Re: Belonging
PaulS thank you for reading my work..I am so pleased you enjoyed this and it's kind of you to take the time to let me know. Leila

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prism on 2004-07-09 17:08:23
Re: Belonging
This is quite exquisite Leila. The words just sent a tingle down my spine.
Beautifully evocative.

Well done!

Bruce


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Leila on 2004-07-09 18:00:42
Re: Belonging
Bruce thank you so much for reading and your lovely comment, it was so thoughtful of you to do so. Leila

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shackleton on 2004-07-10 11:35:13
Re: Belonging
Wonderful stuff Leila. Enjoyed it. Bye now.

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Leila on 2004-07-10 13:27:18
Re: Belonging
Thanks shackleton good to have you read and comment. Leila

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Abel on 2004-07-12 09:19:46
Re: Belonging
The opening of this piece is absolutely breathtaking...what a wonderful description of love, night and one-ness, all combined. Great work!


Ward

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Leila on 2004-07-12 10:34:49
Re: Belonging
Thank you Ward your comments are thoughtful and generous and I am very grateful that you read and left such lovely words. Leila

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Harry on 2004-07-14 08:32:40
Re: Belonging
God, that brought it all back, Leila. Even after eighteen years. Thanks for the memory.

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Leila on 2004-07-14 09:04:50
Re: Belonging
Harry thank you for reading and taking time to comment...I am glad the poem reached out to you and brought back that special memory..Leila

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deepoceanfish2 on 2004-09-29 13:54:13
Re: Belonging
Leila,

I wasn't here when this was posted, so just got round to it now. This is quite striking...a fluid opening and splendid sensuality:

'We never really slept-
just buried clocks
in the sanctuary
of night'

Brilliant!

Cheers,
Adele πŸ™‚

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Leila on 2004-09-29 14:02:21
Re: Belonging
Gosh Adele that was weird...I love it when strange things like that happen...thanks for stopping by and so pleased to hear you liked this poem, thank you...L

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teifii on 2004-10-07 10:02:35
Re: Belonging
Lovely poem. I especially like the opening image and 'winged eyelashes
on your cheek returns a kiss'
and

'arms tighten
at the whisper of a name'

Daf



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Leila on 2004-10-07 12:14:06
Re: Belonging
Daf I am so pleased you stopped by for a read and grateful that you took the time to leave such a positive comment, thank you ..Leila

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Safron on 2004-10-09 09:53:17
Re: Belonging
Leila,

This is so good the flow and visuals in your poem made it intriguing for me to read. I really enjoyed this one.

Safron


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Leila on 2004-10-09 10:49:54
Re: Belonging
Hello Safron I am delighted you stopped by for a read and that you liked the poem enough to pick it as a hot story. You are most kind and I do appreciate you taking the time to do.
Leila

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Bramwith22 on 2004-10-12 18:02:46
Re: Belonging
Leila,

A well crafted and thoughtful poem, expressing the feelings of the moment. An enjoyable read.

Regards,
Bram

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Leila on 2004-10-12 18:07:14
Re: Belonging
Bram it's good of you to stop by for a read and glad you enjoyed the poem and thank you for taking time to say so...Leila

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ritawrites on 2004-10-13 09:42:57
Re: Belonging
A fab poem -- loved it πŸ™‚

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Leila on 2004-10-13 13:04:52
Re: Belonging
Thanks Rita it's great you stopped by and enjoyed the poem and many thanks for the rating...Leila

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flash on 2004-11-05 07:12:42
Re: Belonging
what a vibrant imagination you have L, i'm not a great reader of poetry, but your skill with words is captavating and interesting.


all the words of the heart
the unanswered questions
are at this moment
blue rolling waves


lovely stuff


xxxxx
Flashy


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Leila on 2004-11-05 10:52:48
Re: Belonging
Flashy you are a star for popping in here to leave such a lovely comment, ta muchly...L

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Rosco on 2005-04-03 20:00:54
Re: Belonging
I'm glad you posted a comment on a poem of mine, so I discovered your writing. I've read four or five and the feeling of solace is profound. I can't remember feeling that while reading poetry since hearing Walter de La Mare read on a recording.

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Leila on 2005-04-04 11:21:03
Re: Belonging
Rosco that's a huge compliment and I thank you most sincerely. It's been a while since I enjoyed the beautiful poetry of de la Mare but you have reminded me of the magical quality of his work and I must read some again...Spirit of Air, Ruin and Ghost come to mind. Thank you so much for bringing a lovely smile to my day...Leila

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Sunken on 2005-08-27 19:53:54
Re: Belonging
Can't believe I never commented on this young Leila. Maybe it was during my time at the local nick. If I remember rightly, it was around July when I got wrongfully arrested for impersonating an owl. Anyway, that's all behind me now and I have many more poems of yours to look forward ter-wit-ta-tooooo....? I never did it by the way. I can't even turn my head 180 degrees! I used that as my defense. Thank god for the British legal system - far more effective, may I add, than the British eagle system. Thanks. Consider banning me (-;

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reluctantly accepting a clean bill of health

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A Working Partnership (posted on: 28-06-04)
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A Working Partnership

Exhausted, exhilarated
we begin the clearing up-
lowering the lights
I kick off my shoes
you take off your jacket
loosen your tie

it had been a charged Sunday
from late lunchers
to evening eaters
and summer strollers

for months we'd been electric
exchanging looks, eddying words
the brush of skin on skin

you poured two glasses of whiskey
in splintering silence
I went to check
all was secure through the back

returning along the corridor
you were waiting
we were close enough
to share one breath

and your arms shoaled me-
we were hungry for that kiss
long, lingering
you prowled the shadows of my skirt

slowly we separated
responsible in respite

we took our drinks, sat down together-
the left side of your body
aligned to my right
in perfect symmetry

except for my bare feet
resting on your shoes-
whiskey like flint glass in my throat.






Archived comments for A Working Partnership
freya on 2004-06-28 06:42:30
Re: A Working Partnership
Leila, I first read early, early this morning and immediately thought your poem superb. Just a quick hello to tell you so. Will return to comment more fully. Shelagh

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Leila on 2004-06-28 06:53:07
Re: A Working Partnership
Shelagh, thanks for the positive vibe and I look forward to your further thoughts...Leila

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dargo77 on 2004-06-28 07:09:59
Re: A Working Partnership
Leila, one of the best poems I have had the good fortune to read in a long time. This is really top notch. A favourite read for me.
Dargo

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Leila on 2004-06-28 07:49:45
Re: A Working Partnership
Dargo your warm and generous comment is much appreciated. Thank you for the rating and fave read also...Leila

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uppercase on 2004-06-28 13:54:56
Re: A Working Partnership
It doesn't get any better than this....Erma

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Leila on 2004-06-28 14:08:20
Re: A Working Partnership
Erma, I thank you for that compliment, coming from you it means so much...and thank you also for the rating and hot story pick..Leila

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Skeeter on 2004-06-28 16:44:32
Re: A Working Partnership
First response: packs an emotional punch, very good, a sinuous feel to it. It is well written, with thoughtful word combinations, (e.g. 'eddying looks'). This is a very well crafted poem that, I think, expresses its message almost perfectly. Love it.

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Leila on 2004-06-28 17:22:16
Re: A Working Partnership
Skeeter I am so glad you read this and left a comment....and I love your comments...you are very kind and generous and it's much appreciated...Leila

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ruby on 2004-06-29 06:27:18
Re: A Working Partnership
What a sensuous moment you capture Leila - quite recalled something very special for me; beautiful level of description and I love the way the stanzas reveal bits of the moment at a time - like holding a multi-faceted crystal to the light.

ruby

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Leila on 2004-06-29 06:58:29
Re: A Working Partnership
Ruby that's a lovely comment and I thank you for it...L

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shackleton on 2004-06-29 14:01:48
Re: A Working Partnership
A litle bit special Leila. A beautiful love story. I enjoyed it - very good.

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Leila on 2004-06-29 16:26:40
Re: A Working Partnership
Thanks shackleton, always pleased to have you read and comment on my work...Leila.

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Sunken on 2004-06-29 16:33:41
Re: A Working Partnership
God this is perfect. I wouldn't change a thing. I'm so envious of the people portrayed. Sounds dumb I know, but thats how well you got this across. Your best to date without doubt and totally worthy of the nib.

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Leila on 2004-06-29 16:45:06
Re: A Working Partnership
Thanks Sunken that's a nice way to end the day reading your lovely comment and ta for the rating...Leila

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RobertChiswick on 2004-06-30 03:34:32
Re: A Working Partnership
Gasp! This once (!) happened to me! I know exactly where this came from so - mission accomplished, Leila...superb. Robert

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Leila on 2004-06-30 03:51:59
Re: A Working Partnership
Robert just the reaction I wanted.. thanks indeed for reading and taking time to leave a comment, it is very much appreciated. Leila

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Pilgermann on 2004-07-02 17:20:09
Re: A Working Partnership
Exhausted and exhilarated by the emotional charge. Superb control.

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Leila on 2004-07-02 18:24:50
Re: A Working Partnership
Pilgermann, very pleased to have you read and comment, thank you so much for those words. Leila

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teifii on 2004-10-07 10:32:21
Re: A Working Partnership
Great poem, very very descriptive in a nice understated kind of way. I love 'splintering silence' and 'whiskey like flint glass in my throat'
Daf

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Leila on 2004-10-07 12:17:17
Re: A Working Partnership
Thank you so much Daf that's a wonderful comment and is very much appreciated...Leila

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AnthonyEvans on 2004-12-27 13:11:56
Re: A Working Partnership
leila, liked this one a lot; 'eddying words' and 'your arms shoaled me' - great. best wishes, anthony

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Leila on 2004-12-28 08:54:07
Re: A Working Partnership
Anthony I am so pleased and grateful you read all my poems and I am delighted you liked this one a lot. It's probably one I am reasonably happy with myself and it was in fact published this month in a poetry magazine, so I am doubly delighted you picked it out. Thanks again...Leila

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Sunken on 2005-08-23 20:17:51
Re: A Working Partnership
This still reads as one of my Leila favs. I'm enjoying going through your subs again young Leila. It sucks that your pc is down during your time as Wotm. It doesn't take away from the fact that the accolade is very much deserved. A top right, if I could vote again I would. Eat tomato's.

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walking on water with the aid of a boat

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Leila on 2005-09-04 18:59:28
Re: A Working Partnership
yeah I remember the site went down when you were WOTM...we must be jinxed...anyway won't take up space replying to all your lovely comments but you did make me smile...Leila

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Sunken on 2005-09-04 19:05:35
Re: A Working Partnership
'right' ? Of course I meant 'write' - I blame early mornings. You deserve a bit of space young Leila, it's good to see you up and running again. Consider the plight of the homing pigeon. Thanks.

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asking the public to reconsider betamax

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The Man Who Planted Trees (posted on: 31-05-04)
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The Man Who Planted Trees

You waited with Fire
I arrived with Air-
the day was summer
but I had come wrapped

nervous, excited,
I watched you move uneasy
too, this was new, unknown
and we searched for a shared beginning.

The sun was hot
we sat outside-
you offered me your red shorts
not watching as I changed.

Trees swayed in the gentle breeze, symbiotic
and you asked me if I liked trees.
It made me laugh, that question
and you brought a book from your shelf

that told of the messages
trees bring-
we looked at pictures
I read aloud some words

you leaned over my shoulder-
as I turned the pages
I could smell the fragrance
of burning wood.

You told me about
the forest in Glen Affric
how you'd slept in an old bothy at night
and helped plant trees in the day.

I listened to your voice, hypnotic-
the wind laced pollen in my hair
as nature's healing spirits arrowed
magic spells that fanned the warm air.





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Faerie on 2004-05-31 05:51:52
Re: The Man Who Planted Trees
there's something about the atmosphere that this poem creates as you read it... i cant quite put my finger on what it is.. but it has a very comforting or serene mood to it..

nancy

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Gee on 2004-05-31 06:43:44
Re: The Man Who Planted Trees
Yes, I agree with the other comment. There's something so soothing and beautiful in this.
A lovely poem.

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Leila on 2004-05-31 09:52:08
Re: The Man Who Planted Trees
Nancy thanks for the read and comment, I am glad it touched you on some level...Leila

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Leila on 2004-05-31 09:54:04
Re: The Man Who Planted Trees
Gee thank you for reading and commenting and I am thrilled you picked this as a hot story, i appreciate that...Leila

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Skeeter on 2004-05-31 10:08:55
Re: The Man Who Planted Trees
I love the ending to this. I don't know if its deliberate, but the poem seems to move from almost reportage to a much more poetic end, so it has a cumulative effect. A snatched moment in time, lovely.

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Leila on 2004-05-31 10:19:35
Re: The Man Who Planted Trees
Skeeter I love your interpretation of the poem and pleased that it did have a cumulative effect with the ending working for you. Thanks so much for reading and leaving such a lovely comment..Leila

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freya on 2004-06-01 04:15:13
Re: The Man Who Planted Trees
I read this as a love poem. A very beautiful, slowly unfolding awareness of an electrifying presence and mutual attraction. Enjoyed the layered reference to the couple's sun signs (I think) and what qualities each brought to this meeting.
I thought the following expression of tension experienced by both in these moments masterful:

but I had come wrapped

nervous, excited,
I watched you move uneasy
too

and these details strikingly descriptive and lovely:

I could smell the fragrance
of burning wood.

the wind laced pollen in my hair
as nature’s healing spirits arrowed
magic spells that fanned the warm air.

I like, too, the spareness and pleasant flow of this. A very nice piece.

*As an aside, I read a reference, in the threads I think, to the fact that you have moved to Findhorn? I mention it because I was there to do research for a senior paper. Did an Experience Week first, then returned for two more weeks to study archive materials and record interviews with members of the community, as well as people in Findhorn village and Forres. I may be wrong, but feel Findhorn in your poem, and know of the great effort made to replant trees on stripped areas. My very favorite memory is of how graceful and completely in tune I felt performing Sacred Dance, and what an important role it played in a community gathering for one who had drowned in a flash flood while I was there. It was deeply moving to participate in that event. freya

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Leila on 2004-06-01 05:11:33
Re: The Man Who Planted Trees
Dearest freya how eloquently you have written about my poem completely capturing its essence. Perfectly correct about the sun signs and I am most moved that you included the word masterful and pleased that you could feel the tension and subsequent releasing and as a whole the poem flowed. How wonderful of you to have sensed Findhorn, it has been beautiful here last week with the sun glistening on the bay and I sat outside the Universal Hall and breathed tranquility. It is wonderful that you have been here and have such special memories. No one who comes here leaves untouched. I do hope we will see some of your work on here soon as I love reading your comments and this one has been especially insightful. Love and light Leila x

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Leila on 2004-06-01 07:03:07
Re: The Man Who Planted Trees
Trevor thanks so much for reading and I am delighted at the way the comments are unfolding- like the poem. Your gentle and sensitive appraisal from a male perspective is wonderful to read and I am most grateful and most importantly delighted that you thought it an accomplished piece. Thank you ..Leila

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Sunken on 2004-06-01 08:55:55
Re: The Man Who Planted Trees
Very beautiful and very calming Leila. I was that relaxed reading this that I actually farted.
That was a compliment by the way. I'm not a natural farter.
Are my commenting skills improving?

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Leila on 2004-06-01 10:43:43
Re: The Man Who Planted Trees
Sunken your commenting skills are unique as is your poetry as I suspect you are..and that's definately a compliment. Glad you came by for a read...how's the book progressing my friend??..Leila x

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Gerry on 2004-06-01 14:30:08
Re: The Man Who Planted Trees
Leila, I just liked it----

Gerry xxx.

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Leila on 2004-06-01 14:41:15
Re: The Man Who Planted Trees
Gerry that works for me and I'm glad you did...Leila x

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shackleton on 2004-06-01 16:32:09
Re: The Man Who Planted Trees
Beautiful poetry Leila. Your femininity shines through.

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Leila on 2004-06-01 16:41:39
Re: The Man Who Planted Trees
shackleton, thank you, so pleased you read and thought it beautiful..Leila

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freya on 2004-06-01 17:25:22
Re: The Man Who Planted Trees
Leila, I'm pleased I correctly intuited the Findhorn connection! Have you yet been to Iona? At the end of my research, I traveled there with members who were going into retreat. Stayed three days, though not with them. St. Columba, who lived in the 500's, initiated the spread of powerful monastic foundations in Northern England and Scotland, and thus literacy followed. It is accepted that the Book of Kells was begun on that Isle. So the education and privileges we take for granted as writers today, have their roots there. St Columba himself was a poet. An awesome, awesome place to be for any period of solitude and reflection. freya

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Leila on 2004-06-02 03:07:01
Re: The Man Who Planted Trees
dear freya, sadly I have not as yet been to Iona but it is on my 'to do' list. It certainly sounds as though your stay in Scotland was most memorable and rewarding for you. Yes Iona is steeped in history and I believe is a serene and beautiful place and I also believe some say St. Columba was a supporter of women's rights and yes he was a poet and writer. I am sure there are others on this site better informed on the subject than me and have probably visited Iona...Leila x

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RobertChiswick on 2004-06-02 12:53:21
Re: The Man Who Planted Trees
Leila, it seems that we have those moments in life, the ones that we remember so well and place them on pedestals. Sometimes they are so fleeting that unless we capture them there and then they would be lost. Other times, these memories come back most unexpectly. I've had those moments and this poem is so beautifully expressed, Robert.

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Leila on 2004-06-02 13:01:53
Re: The Man Who Planted Trees
Robert thanks for reading and leaving such a tender comment. I agree with you and I am glad you have had such moments in your life and I am glad we have poetry to share them...Leila

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Slovitt on 2004-06-02 14:49:04
Re: The Man Who Planted Trees
Leila: You've written a poem full of summer days, and trees, and a man and a woman shyly
investigating one another, a poem with little poignant details, the beginning of something personal, the offering of red shorts and the gentlemanly 'not watching as I changed.'/ It's a poem full of the good things people look for. Yet, there also seems to be a little more going on here, perhaps something slightly dark being overcome, 'as nature's healing spirits arrowed/magic spells that fanned the warm air.'
'The Man Who Planted Trees' was a nurturer,
he was a life affirmer. A lovely poem. Swep


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Leila on 2004-06-02 15:01:35
Re: The Man Who Planted Trees
Swep so pleased you stop by for a read and left your thoughtful comments, much appreciated. I believe there is always dark to overcome but it's so wonderful to reach the light..however brief. Thanks again..Leila

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mysticdawn on 2004-06-02 19:07:39
Re: The Man Who Planted Trees
Hi Leila, I love your poem; very relaxing with a dreamlike quality as if watching someone else's dream.
Mystic

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Leila on 2004-06-03 03:09:23
Re: The Man Who Planted Trees
Mysticdawn (that's a lovely name) thank you so much for reading and leaving that special comment and great rating. I am glad you enjoyed it...Leila

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silentmemories on 2004-06-03 03:26:26
Re: The Man Who Planted Trees
I agree with Faerie. I love trees and this is a really beautiful poem.
Silent.

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Leila on 2004-06-03 03:32:29
Re: The Man Who Planted Trees
Silent, thank you for the read, I am so pleased you thought the poem beautiful...Leila

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dargo77 on 2004-06-05 03:34:03
Re: The Man Who Planted Trees
Leila, I am sorry I got to this one late. This is a truly great read and a Hot Story for me.
Dargo

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Leila on 2004-06-05 05:25:41
Re: The Man Who Planted Trees
Dargo please don't apologise, I haven't had time to read the latest subs myself yet. Thanks so much for the hot story pick, I am really pleased you liked the poem...Leila x

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shangri-la on 2004-06-05 07:54:46
Re: The Man Who Planted Trees
This is a beautiful, tranquil, spiritual piece. You have painted a rich ambience between two people on the verge of a new beginning - those charged moments of chemistry shared between two people as they take their first tentative steps towards mutual discovery and adoration. The shared appreciation of their settings - the love of nature - the desire to nuture the beauty of it all really added to the magic of this multi-layered piece. Altogether a delightful read and a definite fave of mine.

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Leila on 2004-06-05 09:47:07
Re: The Man Who Planted Trees
shangri-la thank you so much for reading and leaving such a lovely, thoughtful comment. I am very glad you thought the poem had a spiritual element. Thanks indeed...Leila

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Harry on 2004-06-06 08:52:11
Re: The Man Who Planted Trees

A beautifully atmospheric piece. Personal to the point of keeping some part of its understanding from the prying eyes of the casual reader

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Leila on 2004-06-06 09:17:29
Re: The Man Who Planted Trees
Harry I really appreciate your reading of the poem and taking time to leave your comment...you are right of course. Many thanks ...Leila

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chrissie on 2004-06-06 09:26:50
Re: The Man Who Planted Trees
hi leila - only got to this today, but so glad i did! i read it as freya: as a love story and the lines that moved her were my favourites too. there is something discernibly both hypnotically sensual and dark about "as i turned the pages/i could smell the fragrance/of burning wood." - almost as if ancient smoke from the library at alexandria is acting as the incense for this coming together (okay, okay they were vellum or papyrus); at the risk of over-extrapolating, could this be a kind of tragic acceptance of the fact that something has to lost in order for someting new to be formed (trees - books; freedom - love etc)? i may be barking up the wrong tree (hehe). this is a gentle and eloquently crafted piece. i love the way that the bond between them is signalled by the opening of a book in response to the narrator's laugh. this is how i fell in love. we have been together for 22 years and we still laugh and share books together. thank you for sharing this - what a treat.

chrissieX

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Leila on 2004-06-06 09:38:53
Re: The Man Who Planted Trees
Chrissie hi, how weird, I've just pm'd you. Thanks so much for your comments. It's a pleasure to read your words...so positive and enthusiastic. Yes it is very much a love poem...the beginnings of something unknown and in your case a wonderful happy continuation. But yes there is also shades of something more...much love and thanks to you...Leila x

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zenbuddhist on 2004-06-19 06:26:02
Re: The Man Who Planted Trees
hey hey....its about time there was something decent written by the so called 'poets' on this site .......great enjoyed it..........honest and without pathetic pretention....WELL DONE.....Z..XXX

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flash on 2004-06-19 06:30:42
Re: The Man Who Planted Trees
I'm not sure a nutter who know nothing about poetry can contribute much th commentary here, but i'll try just by saying i thought it was honest, romantic and a bit special.

Flashy

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Leila on 2004-06-19 07:53:14
Re: The Man Who Planted Trees
Hi Z really pleased you found your way here and that you enjoyed the poem...thanks for leaving your thoughts and it was an honest piece and glad you found it so...L x

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Leila on 2004-06-19 07:56:40
Re: The Man Who Planted Trees
Hello nutter,(translates to talented writer) it's good to see you here...thanks for your words ...they mean a lot to me...L x

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BillClarke on 2004-06-22 03:19:55
Re: The Man Who Planted Trees
Hi Leila,
The title threw me, I expected to read about Apple John, or someone like. But this was a nice surprise. You have created a mood, and a very nice atmosphere. Thanks it was a good read. BBFN regards from Bill.

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Leila on 2004-06-22 05:05:10
Re: The Man Who Planted Trees
Hi Bill I am pleased this poem still gets a read, thanks so much for your comment and I am glad you liked the poem...Leila

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Redrose1 on 2004-06-27 16:47:21
Re: The Man Who Planted Trees
Excellent poem really enjoyed this piece.

Redrose

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Leila on 2004-06-27 17:00:06
Re: The Man Who Planted Trees
Redrose, thank you for reading and leaving a comment, so glad you liked it. Leila

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ruby on 2004-06-27 17:10:49
Re: The Man Who Planted Trees
This builds a wonderful atmosphere Leila. I especially like the presence of the beautiful leaf-laden summer-trees in the poem and their (dare I say?) fecund symbolism. Excellent build up, observation and structure - I enjoyed it very much.

ruby

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Leila on 2004-06-27 17:27:10
Re: The Man Who Planted Trees
ruby thank you so much for the read and your comment and yes indeed you may certainly say fecund symbolism and thank you for your observations, so pleased you enjoyed the poem. Leila

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flash on 2004-11-05 07:21:11
Re: The Man Who Planted Trees
hi L

You'll be glad to know i didn't fart during this, i was more enthralled by the serenity and atmosphere your words magically conjured up with this beautiful snapshot. My family is from the highlands, a place called Insch in Aberdeenshire, so the locale of your poem interested me.

I don't have much of an affinity with my bithplace, but magical poems like this sometimes send out a calling to come home.

Beautiful prose/poem


xxxx
Flash

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Leila on 2004-11-06 09:23:12
Re: The Man Who Planted Trees
Mc Flashy, thank you for leaving your lovely comment...Leila

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Slovitt on 29-04-2015
The Man Who Planted Trees
Leila: randomly pulled books from a shelf yesterday and THE SPACE BETWEEN RAIN was one of them. have leafed through it getting surprises every other page, i'd forgotten how good you were. i think this one was in one of the UKA anthologies.
very strong. Swep

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Dear Swep, I have just returned home after travelling and what a delightful surprise to receive an email alerting me to your comment...and such a wonderful comment, thank you very much. Your timing is excellent as I will shortly have my third collection published, again with Indigo Dreams, and to read your words is such a boost at this time. Unfortunately I have struggled a little with the new format of UKA and haven't been around much. UKA has always been kind to me and led me to discover poets I admire such as your good self. I hope you are well and writing...Leila


Night Vision (posted on: 17-05-04)
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Night Vision

She breaks into your night
like a scarf of rain
slips the mountain-
shakes the wind from her hair
allowing the colours of heaven
to fall on your floor.

Her spirit
edged to the moon
dances rainbow kisses
around your faded heart-
whispered love
falls like starlit blossom
into a wishing well.

Archived comments for Night Vision
silentmemories on 2004-05-17 03:36:15
Re: Night Vision
I think this one is a fine poem Leila.

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Pipj on 2004-05-17 05:31:40
Re: Night Vision
Great poem, well done!

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Leila on 2004-05-17 10:37:15
Re: Night Vision
Silent, thanks for reading and leaving a comment. I am so pleased you enjoyed this poem. Thanks again...Leila

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Leila on 2004-05-17 10:38:41
Re: Night Vision
Pipj, thanks for reading and leaving this lovely comment...Leila

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holly on 2004-05-17 10:39:46
Re: Night Vision
Hi
I like the use of "Wishing well"
thought it worked well


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Leila on 2004-05-17 10:41:49
Re: Night Vision
Trevor, I am delighted you thought this poem beautiful and thank you for saying so. I had to smile about the title because I changed it at the last minute. Thanks again.. Leila

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Leila on 2004-05-17 10:44:06
Re: Night Vision
Thanks Holly for reading and leaving your comment. I'm glad you thought it worked. Thanks again...Leila

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Leila on 2004-05-17 10:45:24
Re: Night Vision
Trevor if you come back here again my reply is out of sequence, look futher down. Cheers now...L

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Gerry on 2004-05-17 14:02:15
Re: Night Vision
A nice tender little poem.

Gerry.xxx.

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Leila on 2004-05-17 14:40:04
Re: Night Vision
Gerry thanks for reading and commenting, glad you enjoyed it...Leila

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Faerie on 2004-05-19 02:25:52
Re: Night Vision
Leila..
"allowing the colours of heaven
to fall on your floor.".. beautiful image..
such a heart-warming poem πŸ™‚

nancy


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Leila on 2004-05-19 03:30:57
Re: Night Vision
Nancy, thank you for reading and leaving a message, I am so glad you liked it...Leila

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Omma_Velada on 2004-05-19 12:04:47
Re: Night Vision
This is the kind of poetry I really adore - gorgeous images that tumble over one another. I wasn't sure about 'scarf of rain' as it made me pause to wonder what that could be (maybe 'sheet of rain'?), but all the other phrases were spectacular in their evocative beauty.

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Leila on 2004-05-19 13:24:28
Re: Night Vision
Thank you so much indeed for your generous comments. I am delighted you enjoyed the poem. Yes scarf I felt gave the poem that more sensuous feel, allowed more freedom than sheet. Also here where I live sometimes if you look at the rain on the mountains it can look as though it's falling in long, narrow strips, and sometimes only on one part...amazing. Anyway thanks again, I am so pleased you liked it so much...Leila

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Leila on 2004-05-19 13:41:53
Re: Night Vision
OOhh just got email saying you picked this as a hot story. I'm thrilled...many thanks...L

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chrissie on 2004-05-23 06:28:46
Re: Night Vision
hi leila. lovely imagery - a joy to read. am i alone in thinking this ends with some irony? the idea that all this whispered love and beauty disappears into a wishing well gives your poem a poignant edge. or perhaps i'm just reflecting (nice pun eh?) my own fears about the resting place of my own efforts. sorry, wasn't supposed to end with me. love this very much.

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Leila on 2004-05-23 06:52:04
Re: Night Vision
Chrissie thanks for reading and taking time to comment. Yes well spotted, your observations are correct. I thought there would be two ways to interpret this.. and you picked up beautifully on whispered love and wishing well. Thanks again...Leila

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ritawrites on 2004-05-23 23:09:20
Re: Night Vision
a lovely read...

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ritawrites on 2004-05-23 23:10:14
Re: Night Vision
a lovely read...

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Leila on 2004-05-24 03:05:15
Re: Night Vision
Thanks so much for reading and taking time to comment. I am glad you liked it...Leila

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Dazza on 2004-05-30 14:31:48
Re: Night Vision
Let her into my place! Magic stuff, a fleeting glimpse of love given life.

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Leila on 2004-05-30 16:02:00
Re: Night Vision
I'm so pleased you stopped by for a read and left such a lovely comment...I like magic...Leila

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Sunken on 2005-08-21 11:25:22
Re: Night Vision
Another top write from someone who just doesn't do bad. Sorry I didn't comment first time round, maybe I was busy swinging from trees at the time. Respect.

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Jolen on 13-04-2006
Night Vision
Leila,
This is beautiful. Like the others before me, I agree, your imagery is wonderful. The whole piece is delicate and makes me sigh.
blessings,
Jolen

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Removals (posted on: 16-04-04)
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Removals

It's like
standing at the top
of a cliff

from all directions
wind whips
hairline patterns
across my face

between
grey and blue
waves gather-

spread
break
wash up silent stones
fractured shells

with the last box sealed
I stare
swallow

that sentimental lump
in my throat.

Archived comments for Removals
Gerry on 2004-04-16 07:44:22
Re: Removals
Been there --done that. Many will relate.

Nicely done.

Gerry.

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barenib on 2004-04-16 09:07:07
Re: Removals
Very tight and effective - does the job that a poem should of giving a fresh perspective on something familiar to all of us. John.

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Jack_Cade on 2004-04-16 11:10:45
Re: Removals
I like the description of the cliff-top - especially the wind coming "from all directions" and the "silent stones, fractured shells."

I felt it was a bit of a come down to arrive back at the moving at the end (since I assumed from the beginning it was a metaphor for moving house, from the title and first line - "It's like...") Thought the lump in the throat was a bit of a cliche as well. Having never moved house like this myself, perhaps I just identify more with the cliff-top?

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dargo77 on 2004-04-16 11:42:01
Re: Removals
Leila, I love the way you have written this.
Dargo

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bektron on 2004-04-16 12:08:56
Re: Removals
Hi Leila,
really enjoyed the sparseness of this, and the beautiful/bleak imagery it does funny things to you packing up all the things you own and seeing them all out of context, my only suggestion for a tighter ending would be to change

that sentimental lump
in my throat.
to
a sentimental lump
in my throat

or ...
I stare and swallow
push back the sentimental
knot tight in my throat.

enjoyed it-bek:-) hope the move is going smoothly;-)



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Leila on 2004-05-10 16:20:38
Re: Removals
Thanks Gerry for reading and commenting. It's strange to look back on it some weeks later with all that's gone on. I've a lot of catching up to do...L

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Leila on 2004-05-10 16:22:22
Re: Removals
I really appreciate your comment John, makes me feel I achieved what I set out to do. Thanks...L

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Leila on 2004-05-10 16:27:30
Re: Removals
Jack thanks for reading and taking time to write your thoughts. I am glad you liked some bits and sorry others were a disappointment. it came from the heart at the time. Cheers now...L

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Leila on 2004-05-10 16:28:50
Re: Removals
Mr D thanks for those words, you are very kind...L

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Leila on 2004-05-10 16:31:20
Re: Removals
Bek hi hope all's well. Thanks for your comments on this poem a while ago. Yes moving brings so many emotions to the fore, I am glad you enjoyed my take on it. Cheers now...L

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daduna on 2004-05-15 13:49:46
Re: Removals
the void face ,such face whipped by a hair that it has made the beauty and shaped ...that "silent stones" that may wait for a time to rise !!it might get blunt before...or the"shells"by hint of hugging the slaps they get crashed,,,,a face that stares at the lumps ,at the hurt ,the wound and kept motionless...How heartbreaking!

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Leila on 2004-05-15 15:41:46
Re: Removals
Thank you for reading the poem and taking time to think so much about it and comment...L

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daduna on 2004-05-17 12:13:00
Re: Removals
the compliment not for the poet ,the creator ,,,,but the reader who finds ,all of a sudden may be,a taste in peeping through the words...unfortunately,it's a loss not to hum the tune

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chrissie on 2004-05-23 06:43:14
Re: Removals
absolutely loved this. for me, "the last box sealed" is not only signalling the last act before the move, but also resonates with the mystery and danger of pandora: opening the box will be a new beginning - the unknown. and i loved the "i stare/swallow" which for me was both a continuation of the "top of the cliff" imagery (ie watching a swallow fly south for the winter/return to find a mate) and pointing to the final lines. similarly with the "silent stones/fractured shells" which i feel the final "sentimental lump" refers back to. wonderful stuff!

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Leila on 2004-05-23 06:55:57
Re: Removals
Chrissie thanks once again for the read and keen observations. I really appreciate your reading of my work and your wonderful comments...Leila

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Dazza on 2005-05-21 22:00:25
Re: Removals
Third after death and divorce. A solid third. Leila I glean your back log, I am never disappointed! Dazza.

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Sunken on 2005-08-18 21:51:57
Re: Removals
Another winner from the pen of Leila. Great writing always provokes an image. This provoked an image so sharp that I almost fell off the bloody cliff! Please affix a warning to future submissions young Leila. You may also want to consider a disclaimer for any nasty falls that may occur whilst people are reading said poem. Thanks.

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cheating the common cold by wrapping himself in tin foil.

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Like a Dance (posted on: 05-04-04)
Poem

Like a Dance

We dance on
gossamer clouds
as galaxies capture
misty morning dreams.

The night was
slow to leave
we were grateful
for its shadow-

imagining stars
on the ceiling
scent of sea grasses
moist on my hair.

Moon-made music
stroked the beat
of the clock
clicking time.

You held me
I held you
as an ocean
cradles secrets-

rolling blue
on blue
like a dance
on gossamer clouds.






Archived comments for Like a Dance
Zydha on 2004-04-08 11:46:31
Re: Like a Dance
This is a lovely poem, so many lines I like very much, it's 'almost' mystical, but I had a feeling of 'stolen' moments, Zydha

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Leila on 2004-04-08 13:27:00
Re: Like a Dance
Zyndha thank you for reading and commenting, almost mystical and spiritual has been used in describing my poems and that's nice. Yes you could say stolen moments or those moments that don't come often enough in life. I am so glad you enjoyed this...L

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Leila on 2004-04-08 13:30:13
Re: Like a Dance
Oops sorry I put an extra letter in your name apologies Zydha lol

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shackleton on 2004-04-08 16:02:35
Re: Like a Dance
Beautiful. Reminded me of a gentle, loving, slow and rhythmic dance with a lover, along the margins of a bay, with the moonlight reflecting off the water. Smashing poem Leila. Bye now.

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Leila on 2004-04-08 16:46:34
Re: Like a Dance
shackleton,thanks for reading and commenting. I love what you said about my poem, thanks again you romantic devil!...L

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Jack_Cade on 2004-04-09 10:24:15
Re: Like a Dance
Mm. Appropriate title. Love the 'Moon-made music' stanza, and 'scent of sea grasses moist on my hair'.

One problem for me: 'gossamer clouds' - surely clouds are even lighter than gossamer? Gossamer makes me think of cobwebs. Seems you're under-rating the dreamy quality of clouds!

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Leila on 2004-04-09 10:38:38
Re: Like a Dance
Thanks for reading and commenting. The 'moon-made' verse is also my favourite so I am glad that worked for you. Will have a think about gossamer, I did worry slightly about that word, but it did convey a sense of fragility and non permanence that I wanted- you can brush a cobweb away so easily after all the work that has gone into it. Any other word you can suggest I would be interested. Thanks again...L

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Sunken on 2005-03-06 20:46:00
Re: Like a Dance
Sometimes I step back in time. It is a skill I acquired as a child for it helped me to cheat in exams. I am currently residing in April, I think the year is 2004 but I'm not sure as my watch only shows hours and minutes. Anyway, none of this matters. How I got here is immaterial, but I'm bloody glad I did. This is another stunning piece young Leila. Your book is bloody excellent by the way. My time traveling skills have allowed me to re-experience the gems that sparkle between the covers. Top stuff. One of Uka's best in my ickul opinion.

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Leila on 2005-03-06 21:15:56
Re: Like a Dance
Sunken you are kind to visit this one and I am so glad you like the book. What a lovely comment...thank you...Leila

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Sunken on 2005-08-13 08:01:09
Re: Like a Dance
Sign of a good poem - You can always remember the first time you read it. I recall this one vividly. Top. Nuff said (-:

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Leila on 2005-08-13 13:10:35
Re: Like a Dance
Sunken thank you for re-visiting my work this month, you continue to make me smile and inspire me to keep writing...Leila

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Little Poem (posted on: 26-03-04)
Daft Friday...make of it what you will!

I have a little poem
tucked up in my bed
it lives and breathes, is happy
and mostly is well fed.

It's veggie, did I tell you?
long ago gave up on meat
and if you listen closely
you can hear its little heart beat.
Archived comments for Little Poem
Claire on 2004-03-26 14:05:09
Re: Little Poem
I thought this is pretty good, for a daft Friday poem.

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Leila on 2004-03-27 10:24:47
Re: Little Poem
Claire, thank you for reading and befriending my little poem...lol...L

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shackleton on 2004-03-28 14:24:20
Re: Little Poem
Magical Leila. I can see this one (with a tuck or two and perhaps another verse) as a charming children's poem. Nice one!

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Leila on 2004-03-28 15:43:13
Re: Little Poem
Ssshhh, little poem is asleep, but we do like that word magical and thank you...lol

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Slipwater on 2004-07-15 13:21:50
Re: Little Poem
I ain't into poetry all that much, but this was a cute one... thanx for the read!

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Leila on 2004-07-15 13:40:21
Re: Little Poem
Thanks that's kind of you to read and leave a comment...it was written for an idea called Daft Friday and we all had a lot of fun. Leila

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pullmyhair on 2005-04-07 00:28:29
Re: Little Poem
Cute and quirky, with a sort of nursery rhyme rhythm to it. I like your surreal touches! pully x

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Sunken on 2005-08-10 08:00:37
Re: Little Poem
Lol, awww. I don't think I've seen this piece before. Maybe because it is so ickul? Very cute poem Leila. Little is big in my book, I would say that wouldn't I (-;

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Pilgermann on 21-08-2014
Little Poem
A little poem that will grow.....A bit more sunshine and loving care to make it bloom. It echoes well.

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The Letters (posted on: 12-03-04)
We all have them or have written them...

The Letters

I wonder if
you keep the letters still,
spidery and blotted
now, like old days
just withered away.

I remember sunlight bursts
that inspired
those winged words,
the spirit of spaces
flying paper aeroplanes of love.

I picture us then-
a perfect summer's night
calligraphy of stars
burning Indian fire

and I wonder if
you keep the letters still.

Archived comments for The Letters
bektron on 2004-03-12 04:42:38
Re: The Letters
great! and yes I have still got the letters, really enjoyed this-bek

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shangri-la on 2004-03-12 08:43:29
Re: The Letters
This is a beautiful poem, very dreamy, I enjoyed it.

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Gerry on 2004-03-12 16:03:34
Re: The Letters
Yes indeed many will relate to this.
nice one.

Gerry.

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Leila on 2004-03-13 04:54:19
Re: The Letters
Thanks Bek, glad you enjoyed this and delighted you made it a fav pick, thanks for that...L

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Leila on 2004-03-13 04:57:14
Re: The Letters
Thanks for the lovely comment, I am so pleased you enjoyed this poem...L

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Leila on 2004-03-13 04:58:57
Re: The Letters
Thanks Gerry, I think you may be right. Nice of you to read and comment...L

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britgrrl on 2004-03-13 05:36:19
Re: The Letters
I remember sunlight bursts
that inspired
those winged words,
the spirit of spaces
flying paper aeroplanes of love.

I picture us then-
a perfect summer’s night
calligraphy of stars
burning Indian fire

The heart of your poem, I think, Leila. Some very pleasing and innovative images. A good poem! But you know, sometimes it's best to burn them! There's no point in hanging onto lies, if that's what they turn out to be! Call me cynical: that's how I feel right now. Shelagh


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marym on 2004-03-13 05:46:49
Re: The Letters
calligraphy of stars ~ each word is placed with such care, to a perfect curl of being. Beautiful poetry.

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day_dreamer on 2004-03-13 05:49:43
Re: The Letters
- only 74 words but they capture your subject so well. Sue.

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uppercase on 2004-03-13 05:54:59
Re: The Letters
You said so much with so few words I like it it's soft and sweet...Erma

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Leila on 2004-03-13 06:09:36
Re: The Letters
Hi Shelagh, thanks for reading and commenting and pleased this evoked such a strong response. I agree in some circumstances it might be better to burn the letters, but maybe there was truth and honesty at the time...L

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Leila on 2004-03-13 06:11:15
Re: The Letters
Thanks Erma, glad you liked it and thanks for commenting...L

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Leila on 2004-03-13 06:12:36
Re: The Letters
Your comment was also beautiful, thank you...L

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Leila on 2004-03-13 06:14:49
Re: The Letters
Thanks Sue, I am glad you think I managed to do so. Thank you for commenting...L

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britgrrl on 2004-03-13 06:25:50
Re: The Letters
Leila, I'm immersed in Plath and her particular burnings - poetry, biography and journals! I relate! Anne Stevenson says there is no-one who has written so powerfully and astoundingly well about the subject of betrayal. She's right. Shelagh

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Leila on 2004-03-13 06:31:44
Re: The Letters
Aah Shelagh, I have Anne's book, also Letters Home, The Journals etc. Have you read Ronald Hayman's book? I believe it has just been re-printed...L

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Sunken on 2004-03-14 04:31:47
Re: The Letters
I agree with all above. Far too beautiful for these evil eyes I'm afraid (-;

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Leila on 2004-03-14 05:30:39
Re: The Letters
We all know you are a beautiful person Sunken! Pleased you liked the poem...L

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Sunken on 2005-08-08 19:27:16
Re: The Letters
Hiya Leila. I keep changing my mind about my favourite pieces of yours. This is just ahhhhhhh.
'Calligraphy of stars' - three words that just sit so well together, and they met because of you! How cool is that? Very cool. Thanks. Eat sprouts.

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scotch on 16-05-2006
The Letters
another likeable one Leila!

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Soul Mates (posted on: 23-02-04)
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Soul Mates

We spoke
of knowing each other
before,
in some other lifetime,

our shadows harmonised
we danced in gentle blue,
along familiar paths
that wait in whisper

for such souls as ours,
blown free,
who understand
the language of stones,
secrets of the sea.


Archived comments for Soul Mates
marym on 2004-03-13 12:17:23
Re: Soul Mates
Beautiful, but I felt sad that it had to end this quickly. But thanks... and keep writing. Regards, Mary

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Leila on 2004-03-13 13:13:50
Re: Soul Mates
Again Mary good of you to look this up and thank you for the 'beautiful' that means a lot...L

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tai on 2004-09-28 18:44:53
Re: Soul Mates
I was prompted to come here by one of the comments on freya's recent poem. I am very glad I did, and this poem, of so few words, is one very good reason.

Beautifully expressed definition of soulmates. I have met other's along the road of life, where there was no romantic entanglement but that instant feeling of having know them before. And as I get older I become more and more convinced that I have!

Tai

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Leila on 2004-11-04 11:18:46
Re: Soul Mates
Tai I am sorry I did not respond to your comment but for a while I wasn't getting notifications (all sorted now) and I only happened on it now while reviewing some of my work, thank you so much for looking this up and taking the time to let me know you enjoyed it and in such a lovely way...Leila

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Dazza on 2005-02-20 04:34:49
Re: Soul Mates
Sometimes it would be nice to say truckloads with few words. You have and tell me, who is the lucky guy! and aren't you a lucky girl! Dazza.

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Sunken on 2005-08-05 19:33:41
Re: Soul Mates
our shadows harmonised
we danced in gentle blue,
along familiar paths
that wait in whisper

Perfect Leila. There are not many who master the language of stones. If anyone can - you can. I'm glad you're WOTM as it's given me an excuse to visit your poems on a one a day basis. They are like little moments of bliss - moments that are all too rare these days. Top stuff Ms. Spiritual.

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Buschell on 07-02-2014
Soul Mates
I'd fogotten just how lucid you are! Blown free, that's the life for me...Dazza.

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Small Breaths (posted on: 23-02-04)
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Small Breaths

No matter that my heart sinks,
sighs, with the weight of skeletons-

paths I forgot to follow
have slowly sealed

rooms go unrecognised
for fear of change

and I cry at the uncertainty of rainbows.

All the daydreams I stole,
refusing to give them back

are stored as silver dust
and each day is a small breath.



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bluepootle on 2004-02-23 03:44:59
Re: Small Breaths
Each stanza is almost an intake of breath. V effective; I liked it a lot.

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spacegirl on 2004-02-23 03:47:22
Re: Small Breaths
All the daydreams I stole,
refusing to give them back

are stored as silver dust
and each day is a small breath

Great take on life. Our dreams are as important as our accomplishments

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Leila on 2004-02-23 11:32:38
Re: Small Breaths
Appreciate your comments, thank you very much.

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Leila on 2004-02-23 11:34:04
Re: Small Breaths
Glad you enjoyed it, thanks for taking time to say so, much appreciated.

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Faerie on 2004-02-24 03:52:30
Re: Small Breaths
wow.. love the last 2 stanzas.. they are perfect.. very thoughtful poem.. beautifully written

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Sunken on 2004-02-24 04:24:51
Re: Small Breaths
Oh bugger! Sorry to bring this down to my level. I clicked on to this because I thought it was titled 'Small breasts' I'm quite a fan of the smaller breast. Anyway, that has nothing to do with the poem. It is fantastic.

ref.

and I cry at the uncertainty of rainbows.

Great line. One of many. Well done.

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Leila on 2004-02-24 07:33:54
Re: Small Breaths
Thank you for your lovely comments.

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Leila on 2004-02-24 07:40:05
Re: Small Breaths
Thanks for that, much appreciated. I'm just glad to see you survived the birthday celebrations. Had fun reading all the comments yesterday. I would say how's the head but best not go there!! But maybe I will...don't want to make you too big headed but I agree with others you are a truly gifted writer, Cheers.

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Skeeter on 2004-06-17 15:53:15
Re: Small Breaths
There is something almost zen like about this, which is probably why i like it. I liie 'rooms go unrecognised' and 'the uncertainty of rainbows' -- those are nice images. I read the last line as more hoipeful than the rest, with its connotatoins of letting go: a la zen. Like it very much.

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Leila on 2004-06-17 16:05:28
Re: Small Breaths
Skeeter that is spooky. I have just logged on and as ever looked at recent comments...thought I recognize that title!!! It's lovely of you to read and also to leave a comment, thanks so much and glad you liked the poem...one of my most recent purchases is a book entitled Zen Wisdom...L

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Dazza on 2004-11-20 16:22:01
Re: Small Breaths
Back catalogueing! This is a platinum. Dazza.

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Dazza on 2004-11-20 16:22:45
Re: Small Breaths
Back cataloging! This is platinum! Dazza.

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Leila on 2004-11-20 16:29:42
Re: Small Breaths
hey that's spooky, just commented on yours, thanks for reading, much appreciated...Leila

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margot on 2004-11-21 08:35:01
Re: Small Breaths
picked at random ...well almost as i looked for one less commented on, read several and then this title drew me in. you have an enviable ability to avoid the trite and over sentimental by weaving together beautiful phrases to create quite powerful statements. margot

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Leila on 2004-11-21 09:46:53
Re: Small Breaths
margot that is a lovely comment and I am most grateful. It's always encouraging when someone takes the time to read through older work. Thanks indeed...Leila

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AnthonyEvans on 2004-12-27 12:55:08
Re: Small Breaths
leila, reading your poems at the moment, am up to here, liked the lines: 'paths I forgot to follow
have slowly sealed '; feels noirish. best wishes, anthony

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Leila on 2004-12-28 08:49:44
Re: Small Breaths
Anthony, thank you so much for taking the time to read my work and also for this comment, you are most kind...Leila

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reckless on 2005-07-01 01:51:20
Re: Small Breaths
a small breath indeed! I like that image, the brief passing of a moment, the tenuousness of life connected to us by nothing more than air.... a very nice poem, brief and lucid and deceptively punchy.

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Leila on 2005-07-05 20:09:19
Re: Small Breaths
Hi reckless, sorry it's taken me a few days to reply, but thanks very much indeed for taking a look at my work and for leaving such a lovely comment. It's especially pleasing to see the old posts get an airing. Thanks again and welcome to uka...Leila

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Sunken on 2005-08-06 08:36:52
Re: Small Breaths
This is a stunning write young Leila. Proof in one poem that your wotm status is fully deserved. I see that I already commented, but I am returning to your work on a daily basis during August. It's a terrible bind for you I know. There are helplines. I'd give this two nibs if I could. Do they do doubles? Oh balls, I'm getting dirty thoughts now, and I wanted this to be so special. I'll leave quietly via the back door... oh balls, another pervy thought. I'm hopeless. Respect.

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The Pianist (posted on: 23-02-04)
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The Pianist (after seeing the film)

Nothing
you could have done,
everything was lost-

the air drained of laughter
colours frozen, clouded grey.

All that you loved
untouchable,
your fingers-
signature of the soul,
knotted, gnarled with loss.

You were running,
hiding, desperate,
buried in the dust of doorways,
no longer open or closed.

Beyond guilt or fear,
half-dead, in crumbling ruins,
the shallow breath of survival
pierced your lungs-

and in the desolate darkness
a silhouette, a ghost of a chance.
You lived to play again,
stirring the dreams of innocents.

Archived comments for The Pianist
uppercase on 2004-02-23 12:14:26
Re: The Pianist
Great poem and the saddest movie I have ever seen....Erma

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Leila on 2004-02-24 07:31:53
Re: The Pianist
Thanks for reading and commenting. Wasn't sure about posting this one but I had to, just as I had to write the poem.

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shackleton on 2004-02-24 16:00:31
Re: The Pianist
Good poem Leila - interesting structure. I actually saw the film just a couple of days ago and you've captured the desolaion but the ultimate triumph of the human spirit in your poem. Don't ever hold back from writing or posting poetry on such themes - they must be written and they must be posted - for the sake of 'The Pianists' who didn't survive. Very good read. Bye now.

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Leila on 2004-02-25 06:34:50
Re: The Pianist
Really appreciate your comments, I feel the poem worked and the structure helped get it across. Cheers for that.

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Sunken on 2004-02-25 08:58:04
Re: The Pianist
I've not seen the film but after reading this I guess I should. Beautifully written. It's hard to pick a fav part. It's all good.

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Leila on 2004-02-25 14:08:11
Re: The Pianist
Thanks for stopping by Sunken and glad the poem worked for you even though you've not seen the film. Let me know if you get the chance to see it, cheers.

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dargo77 on 2004-02-26 02:41:25
Re: The Pianist
Just to let you know I really enjoyed your working of the film.
Dargo

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Faerie on 2004-02-26 07:57:01
Re: The Pianist
first thing i thought as i read this was exactly the same as sunken.. i havent seen the film.. living in a country where it takes ages for anything to reach us.. but reading your poem makes me want to see it even more now..

films can be extremely inspiring.. and at the same time frustrating.. because they can express so much with just an image.. or with music.. and sometimes writing doesn't have that same effect.. but your poem is one of those moments where you have managed to do just that. you have really suceeded in portraying a beautiful image.. i for one am really glad that you did decide to post it.

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Leila on 2004-02-26 09:04:53
Re: The Pianist
Thanks for reading and commenting, much appreciated.

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Leila on 2004-02-26 09:07:31
Re: The Pianist
Thanks for reading and posting your thoughts. Hope you get to see the film, it's very moving. Thanks again.

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Sunken on 2005-08-07 15:04:05
Re: The Pianist
Still not seen the film, young Leila of the north. I don't need to, I have your poem (-:

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No Escape (posted on: 19-12-03)
winter reflections

No Escape

Outside my door
a foot of snow,
rooftops hidden
grass hushed.

Winter's sounds are muffled,
the heart is stilled.

I grieve for the things
I cannot change,
friends I've lost,
the old cottage-

its windows frozen
with the breath
of ghosts
and ice cold dreams.

I shed a tear
because words fail,
after such a long time
I cannot escape myself.


Archived comments for No Escape


uppercase on 2003-12-20 12:10:10
Re: No Escape
I liked this poem very much. I felt the sadness and wistfulness of the writer. uppercase

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jojo on 2003-12-20 17:27:58
Re: No Escape
Hi Leila,I've just arrived so you are the first for me to read πŸ™‚ I enjoyed this,it touches that bit of us that is lonely,sad,regretful.I felt for the 'I' in this.You have conveyed empathy in a beautiful write.Very much enjoyed

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Leila on 2003-12-21 09:41:56
Re: No Escape
Thank you so much.

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Leila on 2003-12-21 09:43:49
Re: No Escape
Thank you for sharing your kind thoughts.

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richa on 2003-12-25 08:55:48
Re: No Escape
Enjoyed this, very realistic. Could identify with it.

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Leila on 2004-01-05 07:37:22
Re: No Escape
Glad you enjoyed it and thanks for taking the time to say so. Sorry I've been away and only logged back on.

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Sunken on 2005-08-04 08:22:28
Re: No Escape
Beautiful. I love the line about the breath of ghosts. Very haunting, very December. You are too clever.

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Leila on 2005-08-10 17:18:24
Re: No Escape
Ahh Sunken it was lovely to come back here to all the lovely comments you left on many of my poems. Thanks so much for that, you really are too kind. I won't reply to them all individually but be assured I'm most grateful...Leila

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A Celtic Tale (posted on: 12-12-03)
A modern Angus and Caer? well thanks for the inspiration anyway!

You are a Glasgow chancer
and I a Highland dancer,
perchance we meet
on a deserted Autumn beach,
your banter is appealing
my costume revealing
little of the turmoil in my steps.

We come here in peace
whispering shibboleth,
wary of the cat that got the cream
and the happy ever after ending,
but hey, I can be an enchantress
I wear a chain of silver
and you can be my Angus with attitude.
Archived comments for A Celtic Tale
marym on 2004-03-13 12:12:22
Re: A Celtic Tale
~wary of the cat that got the cream~ I like the modern "celtic" tone overall, but this line is a bit too modern for me... Maybe I am a bit old-fashioned. Anyway, a good read for me. Regards, Mary

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Leila on 2004-03-13 13:12:03
Re: A Celtic Tale
Thanks Mary, good of you to read through my older posts and comment..L

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royrodel on 2004-11-20 16:18:03
Re: A Celtic Tale
Enjoyed this one.

RODEL

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Leila on 2004-11-20 16:33:49
Re: A Celtic Tale
royrodel, thank you and good of you to say so, appreciate it...Leila

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PaulS on 2004-11-21 14:27:39
Re: A Celtic Tale
I like pieces of work that I have to read again to understand their true meaning.
Pardon my ignorance but does shibboleth mean
'I love you?'
Take care,
Paul.

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Leila on 2004-11-21 18:13:07
Re: A Celtic Tale
Paul thank you for reading and in answer to your question there is reference to this word in the bible and it concerned dialect (if pronounced correctly you were recognised as belonging to a particular group, if pronounced wrongly well...I'm afraid it wasn't pleasant). Hence I wrote..
We come here in peace (as in searching for peace)whispering shibboleth...I have used it in the context of recognising a kindred spirit. Thank you for your interest...Leila

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Sunken on 2005-08-03 08:44:28
Re: A Celtic Tale
This is quite a sexy little number young Leila. I love the opening lines. You are a clever one and it makes me slightly irritable. I shall go now before I turn completely green. Good stuff.

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