Thanks for your approbation, Jay.
This was written for a writing challenge which required the use of certain words. What resulted was this poem describing the feasibility of a criminal intent.
When read in a different context a piece acquires a new meaning, Gerry.
Our instructions were:
“Write a story or poem that uses these phrases: ball back, first serve, just out, all in white”
Well, Gerry, I have it on good authority that Agamemnon, Menelaus and all their mob didn’t think it was a laughing matter.
I’ll let you into a secret: I wrote this for a writing challenge that required the use of five names relating to body parts. You may be able to find a few more than five.
Cheers and good hunt.
Luigi
Daisy chains, and watching butterflies,
Holding hands, and looking to the skies.
Very tender and achingly sad, too. Your poem evokes a feeling of something special lost in some way, whether to time or for other personal reasons. (Came back to edit my first comment because it was shallow and didn’t do your poem justice) bel
Yes, what is poetry for. 🙂 I’m afraid I let it all hang out in my stuff. But self awareness and understanding of other players often result. A way of getting at the hurts and helping with healing/letting go.
Elf I realise that you must have had recent distress and i am truly sorry. I think it was Gandhi who said ‘words will only hurt if you consent’. I am an old codger. I have served in the armed services, the police force and thirty years in the medical profession. I know full well what words can do if you let them. I have had visits from the police because of lies, and been cheated out of inheritance. If your conscience is clear rise above it. Nobody wins who cheats— ever.
Gerry.
PS I had an article published some years ago, I will try and find it and post it on Friday.
Whether you agree or not, you may find it interesting…
Gerry, many thanks for taking the time to read and leave such a thoughtful comment.
” ‘words will only hurt if you consent’.” – gosh I wish it was that easy, I truly do. I will read your post.
Elfstone
“You’d have got money too
if you hadn’t been so
bloody-minded.”
Elf, wow! Another power-punch. A friend of mine just died. Her funeral today. The above quote sounds just like what she thought her mother would have had to say to her. A very embittered relationship which my friend never resolved. This is one of your best, imo. At least of the ones I’ve read so far. bel
Many thanks Belcanto for such a lovely comment. “A very embittered relationship *which my friend never resolved*.” — ah there’s the rub; no resolution, I spent the last 3 days in the hospice hoping my mother would say something — anything — that would indicate that she understood the damage she had done, but … nothing. No resolution.
My condolences on the death of your friend. I have recent reason to understand just how hard that can be. Elf.
Yes indeed Elf, words are multi-talented little critters.They can bring pleasure or pain. It all depends on who says them I suppose, My grandma used to say words can never hurt you…
G x.
Thanks Jay. No, there isn’t any more of this particular story. As I said above, it’s an old one of mine, since published in one of my own books and also by the Sunday People in 2014.
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