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  • Sweetwater

    From sweetwater on You and me

    I like your wording very much but for me the poem itself doesn’t really come together. Sue.

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    2017/11/12 at 10:55 am
    • Jamalbbd

      From jamalbbd on You and me

      I highly appreciate your comment…any suggestion. thank you. Jamal.

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      2017/11/12 at 1:31 pm
      • Sweetwater

        From sweetwater on You and me

        Hi Jamal, I think at the moment in places it reads more like some of the lines are single sentences, statements of fact. In other places it flows very well. It may just be the way I am interpreting it and other readers may see it completely differently. I don’t know if that’s of any help to you. Sue.

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        2017/11/12 at 9:37 pm
  • Stormwolf

    From stormwolf on Life on Mars

    hehehe, well hopefully I will be safely away from this place by the time they send them north!
    I wager it will not be the leaves on the tracks 20 minutes up the line that will be their undoing. Killiecrankie Pass will put paid to their wild schemes.

    Aye, I would love to see Richard (tax exile) Branson and his like, sent home “to think again!”
    mwahahaha

    Alison x

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    2017/11/10 at 3:07 pm
    • UNCLEMAC

      From UNCLEMAC on Life on Mars

      Scotland was intended to be a serious suggestion in some quarters, but I think that they were worried that the crew would find Sutherland so attractive and humming with life that they would jump ship.

      unclemac

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      2017/11/10 at 5:30 pm
      • Jay12

        From jay12 on Life on Mars

        I think we should finish exploring the vast open, emptiness of Scotlands wilds before we venture anywhere near Mars. As for BoJo the Clown, I’d keep him away from any decision making outside of, “does the cabinet meeting require custard creams or rich tea fingers?”

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        2017/11/15 at 1:31 pm
        • UNCLEMAC

          From UNCLEMAC on Life on Mars

          I believe there is more to do in the evening on Mars than there is in Sutherland.

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          2017/11/15 at 2:44 pm
  • Chrissytotoro

    From chrissytotoro on Parkland Tryst

    I liked this very much. It was sad and not truly ‘of this world’ and that’s the kind of thing I like to read about.
    For me it flowed calmly and maybe a little wistfully.
    Thank you for sharing for me to read.

    Chrissy

    Do no harm

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    2017/11/09 at 10:31 am
  • Sweetwater

    From sweetwater on Some Guys

    I like this a great deal, please don’t tidy it up too much, I enjoyed its simple honesty and genuine feel, reminding us there are always men that are kind and caring and not foul mouthed bullies or prowling predictors.
    Sue.

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    2017/11/08 at 7:31 pm
  • Amman

    From amman on Parkland Tryst

    I believe you likened one of my poems to Verlaine a year or three ago, Gerald. Yours would seem to be leaning in the same direction; a gentle, wistful commentary on the natural passing of time. Perhaps ‘each time’ instead of ‘every time’ Seems to flow better. A real gem.

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    2017/11/08 at 8:06 am
    • Nemo

      From nemo on Parkland Tryst

      Thanks, Amman. I thought about ‘each time’ when I wrote the poem but decided that ‘every time’ was stronger for stressing the repetitiveness of the process and also because it adds a softening weak syllable to the line.
      Regards, Gerald.

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      2017/11/08 at 11:28 am
  • Savvi

    From savvi on Fiction Challenge - Doubble

    I enjoyed the read Victoria, and you capture the whole piece in such a short piece, poor Sadie but nicely done. Keith

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    2017/11/08 at 1:15 am
  • Stormwolf

    From stormwolf on No More.

    Absolutely beautiful. Your muse from another time is using you well. Alison xx 😉

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    2017/11/07 at 5:57 pm
    • Sweetwater

      From sweetwater on No More.

      Thank you Alison, it’s written for the loss of my beloved dog, a wonderful friend and main companion. For a couple of months I had no heart to write anything I was so lost. Today I really felt he was around me, I truly hope he is. Sue Xx.

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      2017/11/07 at 6:22 pm
      • Stormwolf

        From stormwolf on No More.

        I can hardly bear it…the loss. I will face this some day when my canine companion of 14 years leaves me too.
        Many cannot comprehend the pain of losing an animal friend but I can.
        I nominate this. A profoundly beautiful poem on its own with a deep spiritual feel but now you have alerted me to your ‘muse’ (in this instance) I hope it brings you some comfort.

        Alison xxx

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        2017/11/07 at 7:08 pm
        • Sweetwater

          From sweetwater on No More.

          Alison, thank you so much for nominating this poem, not only because a nomination is such an amazing thing to have, but the fact the poem is for Harvey makes it even more special.
          I sincerely hope you have a lot more time with your dog and do not have to face this loss any time soon.
          Losing my mum was the very worst loss I have ever experienced of course, but losing a beloved companion whatever form of being they are is right up there just inches behind.
          Apart from his first early weeks it’s just been Harvey and I, we had an unbreakable bond: I can only hope it can still be that way, regardless of our changed circumstances. Sue.xxx

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          2017/11/07 at 7:58 pm
          • Stormwolf

            From stormwolf on No More.

            It will be that way. They never leave us in my experience. I have woken a couple of times to the noise of my old dog Chief (had for 13 years) wagging tail banging the bed as always used to happen and hearing his panting, only to find the room empty.
            My dear old mum has also felt her old cat Felix jump up on her bed. Yes, she’s got dementia but she was perfectly lucid when she told me about it and it gave her comfort.

            They also visit in dreams 😉
            xx

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            2017/11/09 at 9:31 am
          • Sweetwater

            From sweetwater on No More.

            That’s such a lovely thing to experience, I agree it is very comforting. I had four cats all brought up together they all died elderly and sadly about 18 months of each other, my last remaining cat seemed to be a link to their world and ours, and would often bring one or two for a quick visit, each cat was different and I immediately saw which cat it was and just had time to say their name and have a word or two before they had gone again. Heartbreakingly a year or so later I lost my last cat and although I hoped I would see them all as I did before. I haven’t.
            I have had several experiences of spirits all my life so I do believe there is more about this world than we know. Sue. Xx

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            2017/11/10 at 9:57 am
  • Stormwolf

    From stormwolf on Stand fast all you soldiers!

    Hello there, 😉
    Excellent! Perfect timing too for Remembrance Sunday.I enjoyed the dual voices, a very original and effective touch. The rhyming involved between the voices skillfully done.
    Raises the bar for poetry here.

    Alison x

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    2017/11/07 at 5:46 pm
  • Nemo

    From nemo on Stand fast all you soldiers!

    Aplogies for being a pain but I’m not sure if you are aware of the ‘rule’ regarding posting: only four items per week: two for Monday and two for Friday.
    Regards, Nemo.

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    2017/11/07 at 3:50 pm