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  • sweetwater

    From sweetwater on Summer Regrets.

    I wrote this a couple of weeks into autumn, we had some lovely summery weather after weeks of rain.
    But as you say it’s now time to turn our heads to harsher weather.
    sue 🙂

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    2020/11/06 at 10:02 am
  • Guaj

    From Guaj on Summer Regrets.

    Yes, I also feel summer is always reluctant to leave. However, now it’s Autumn’s turn to look over her shoulder, there’s a cold hearted monster on her tail.

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    2020/11/06 at 9:47 am
    • sweetwater

      From sweetwater on Summer Regrets.

      Perhaps we should look forward to warmer days that await the turn
      of the year, but we should not underestimate the icy spears the winter may throw. But Autumn is beautiful this year as compensation. sue xx

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      2020/11/09 at 1:06 pm
  • Guaj

    From Guaj on A Death Refracted - Part 3

    Ahh it’s becoming clearer now. I don’t know if I missed something, but for some reason in the opening preface I got the impression Derry was beaten to death. So now we know she jumped in front of a train, however you leave space for the possibility she was pushed. Interesting.

    I may need to re-read this, but I didn’t see anything that might need changing, except in my opinion you do not need to repeat moment three times in the opening para.

    I would suggest ‘moment, that moment’ and in the later sentence ‘that moment, the moment.’

    However, this is a really interesting and well written part. Certainly looks like you have done you research well.

    I once saw someone cross the track because he didn’t want to miss his train and an Inter city 125 at full speed missed him by inches. Everybody on the platform was stunned. I can imagine the horror of seeing someone actually hit by a train.

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    2020/11/06 at 9:35 am
  • Bhi

    From Bhi on Time For Tea

    I am left wondering what type of tea you would have preferred.

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    2020/11/05 at 11:10 am
  • Guaj

    From Guaj on Time For Tea

    You read a lot more into this little poem than I intended, Trevor

    For me, this was irony.

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    2020/11/05 at 9:33 am
  • ChairmanWow

    From ChairmanWow on Beamo's Gold part 2

    Thanks for the comment Bhi. As a matter of fact Riddley Walker was an inspiration for this project. I think my speculative language is more accessible than that novel which I had to work to get through.

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    2020/11/05 at 2:45 am
  • ifyouplease

    From ifyouplease on Achilles' Rising

    we meet our destiny when we see the high walls of Troy, so why not Is too? or anti-is.

    I had a problem here with English, but I doubt a google translation into Greek would help me.

    no unknown words for me but very difficult to formulate a meaning.

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    2020/11/04 at 7:39 pm
    • Bhi

      From Bhi on Achilles' Rising

      As the Dai Lama would have said, and this was going to be the next poem:

      Yesterday I was,
      Today I, still, am was,
      Can be no more than I was
      While this is of mine
      is striped by the will of them;
      But Inside I am that which must be
      Untouched;
      That none can deny.

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      2020/11/05 at 11:07 am
  • ionicus

    From ionicus on SOVIET HOSPITALITY part 2

    It is all very interesting, Daffni, but it would be much better if you could put the English translation next to ALL the Russian nouns, which is not always the case, for the likes of me who do not know that language. https://ukauthors.com/wp-content/plugins/wise-chat/gfx/emoticons/set_4/confused.png
    Luigi x

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    2020/11/04 at 1:17 pm
  • ifyouplease

    From ifyouplease on Flack Chuckers!

    yes. the rainbow. something tells me this poem has a spiritually challenging side

    really thought-provoking

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    2020/11/03 at 9:40 pm
    • griffonner

      From griffonner on Flack Chuckers!

      Hello, Nic. Thank you for commenting. i’m sorry I have taken a while to respond. I know (from something you have said) that you will understand me when I say that sometimes the driving force for a ‘write’ is something rather mysterious: Subtle, would be a good word.

      In all honesty I did not start writing this with the intent of it having hidden meaning, but of course some of the ‘flack chuckers’ (taken from the oft spoken ‘flack from above’) have much more devious intent than simply accumulating wealth and using others to create it for them! They are not only amoral, but also downright evil.

      Allen
      x

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      2020/11/05 at 10:07 pm
      • ifyouplease

        From ifyouplease on Flack Chuckers!

        the rainbow is part of my theory. a big part, or should I say the post big bang part. I may try to illustrate it somehow some day over the rainbow (funnily enough this song has a hidden meaning, intentional or unintentional.)

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        2020/11/06 at 10:12 am
  • stormwolf

    From stormwolf on Fifteen-Years Later

    Life is both hopeless, and beautiful.

    Ain’t that the truth. My children were brought up with every animal under the sun. I tried to give them the life I longed for as a child.
    My estranged daughter recently told me (before the portcullis went down yet again) …that I had been responsible for my grandchildren being animal lovers before they could even talk.

    Still they were taken from me.
    Life is often painful in the measure to how much we have loved.

    Your poetry is so full of meaning and emotion skillfully almost concealed behind matter of fact words.

    Alison
    x

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    2020/11/03 at 7:10 pm
    • slovitt

      From slovitt on Fifteen-Years Later

      yes, hopeless. and beautiful. you have a good heart and that’s more than half the battle. Alison, oh Alison, thanks. Swep

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      2020/11/03 at 10:07 pm