how interesting, indeed the opposite of death is birth not life, and indeed jail after jail few get rid of the mask. very deep poem. excellent presentation, highly philosphical
New submissions should be visible on the front page? Your ‘doom in the air’ sentiments, the pervading mental state for all in these precarious times, I’m afraid Sue? Experiencing the extremes of Nature’s death cough, generalised anxiety is justified, but today, for us, it appears to compel no resolution, that’s the tragedy. Fine writing (I think ‘there is an edge to it’ would be better?). Trevor
Thank you very much Trevor, I hadn’t thought of it in terms of the falling apart of the world but you have a very good point. There always seems to be a new catastrophe waiting just around the corner since 2020.
I was interested to read your suggestion of the slight change to one line, and wondered if I had missed something with my line. I always appreciate suggestions because there seem to be so many technicalities I know nothing about, but need to learn. Sue 🙂
I was thinking Sue, that, before, when we were ignorant of any serious threat to the natural world, no matter our personal woes, there was always ‘hope’ to hang on to. Now, even that last mental comfort has been released from Pandora’s box! Trevor x
Ah, yes that makes sense thank you.
I agree, I would never have imagined a virus had the potential to wipe us all out, or that a war in a country so far away could potentially involve us in a dreaded nuclear war.The NHS putting lives at risk by striking… The list goes on. A nightmare I am doubting we will ever wake up from. X
May I take the last six lines of this delightful poem and scatter them on the hills here so I may embrace a velvet patch of gold too.
An uplifting poem for our dreadful weather. Loved it. sue.
You are welcome. although sometimes the sun does delay a bit. but it has been excellent last day or two. Glad you liked it. Took mr ages to find copy [I painted] but found it and used it for cover of my poetry book.
There’s something reassuring and loving about furniture that has lived your life with you, and carries its own memories along with your own.
I loved this poem. sue.
Excelent poem to a well loved table. I have some tables i feel the same about but write less now as can’t see well. But I do like your poem ans glad your daughter writes on it,
Daffni
Thank you. I am glad you liked it. My daughter used to write on it, as a toddler she would often dance on the table, I still remember her reciting many rhymes, a particular one would be, ‘an elephant walks like this and that’, with her enactment she’d learnt from her kindergarten. Yes, many fond memories. Thank you, Daffni once again, wish you a speedy recovery so you could also sit and restart writing your lines.
Supratik xx
I have read and re read your first poem, and the more I read the more I find in it. It says so much. It keeps drawing me back to see what more it will tell me.
The second one.. I hope it won’t come to such a sad end.
But of course you speak the truth. So many are now missing or heartbreakingly lost forever.
For me this site and the contributors have inspired me when I had thought I would never be able to say ‘I write poetry’ with any conviction.
Mike Verdi in particular took me under his wing and taught me so much. I still hear his whisper in my ear telling me to remove all unnecessary words. sue.
Thanks Sue, for your fine comment. The site’s in a sad state. Without new membership it’s stagnating. Perhaps a little too technically complicated for artistic people talented predominately in different forms of creative writing. But, easily learnable, keeping work at first in draft form allows for experimenting by trial and error with form and layout until the basics and individual preferences become just routine, before submitting. Even editing after submitting a piece, changing words and typos, adding images, is made easy by Richard’s site design.
Yes Mike’s enthusiasm and straightforward, open social nature with no ‘hidden agendas’ is sorely missed, for along with a few other similar ‘give and take’ contributors, but especially all-encompassing Andrea, it kept the site vibrant, inclusive, and attractive, including for new members at all levels?
See what happens over the next few weeks as decisions are made.
Trevor
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