An excellent presentation of a sad and tragic occasion setting a responsibilty factor against a humanitarian one of high-risk, not an easy decision, nor one most people would like to call, difficult to rationalise as the right choice, and as you say, even long afterwards? (Typo: ‘or you’re the next one…’).
Goth
This is well penned and has a pleasing flow thats easy on the ear….I always read out loud, there is a balance here within the words that ooze a sense of equilibrium with ones inner self an acceptance I fear only comes with age and experience. very much enjoyed your poem. Best Keith
Thanks. You put it exactly as meant Keith, there comes a point late in life when you realise only acceptance, free of regret, of all that has been, will lead to inner peace and contentment in the few years left of its long journey; keeps it all feeling worthwhile and humbly lived.
Trevor
This one, is my cup of tea! Black coffee and nicotine though would hasten my demise! Really like the heavy rock sound, are you the words, and the other guy, the music, both part of a band? Very professional, I’ve enjoyed listening to it a few times, very catchy, a real foot tapper! Old member Mitch (from Cardiff) did songs, and would have liked this (I wonder if he’s still around?).
(Three typos in the lyrics: possessive comma missing in ‘nights, ‘by’ should be ‘buy’, and ‘where’ should be ‘we’re’?). What a talented band of musicians you are, and much enjoyed!
Hi Trevor pleased this was up your alley so to speak, its just the two of us on this we did a five track ep on soundcloud and a few others for good measure, never been near a stage and I guess this is as close as I’ll get, Richard is about 30 and a great musician, if I tell him I’m 60 he might kick me out of the band LoL Just having fun really, he sends me the music and I write the words and try and sing them then he does a final mix its all a bit derivative but no one writes music like this anymore so i’m happy keeping it simple. Thanks for taking a listen. Best Keith
My type of poetry, liked the ‘suspended drama’ in its flow, and the ‘perception – thought associations’ awoken, because this is how our brains work, at least within our own minds! Really adheres to the ‘suggest, don’t tell’ rule, with the only give-away being the title.
Enchanting poetry describing winter as it can feel as it bursts in, achieved by the use of some interesting phrasing. I remember you were always good at this much loved style of metaphorical poetry. Be good to see your work entering ‘Recently Published’ as a change, which is decided by ‘hits’. An enjoyable read!
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