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  • Ifyouplease

    From ifyouplease on An ancient love dream

    intriguing thoughts…

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    2018/08/20 at 11:51 pm
  • Ifyouplease

    From ifyouplease on Lady leaders

    https://news.ku.edu/2017/06/09/art-religious-artifacts-support-idea-minoan-matriarchy-ancient-crete-researcher-says

    they tried

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    2018/08/20 at 11:45 pm
    • Ifyouplease

      From ifyouplease on Lady leaders

      who knows if there never was a huge volcanic eruption what would have happened

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      2018/08/20 at 11:46 pm
  • Savvi

    From savvi on The Silent Valley

    Love this especially the closing stanza, and who can forget the Don Revie years 🙂

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    2018/08/20 at 7:19 pm
  • Slovitt

    From slovitt on Zero Results

    realizing that i may regret continuing on, the poem doesn’t have enough to say to warrant 20 lines, in fact you’ve gone a long way for the punch line that is your concluding line. perhaps this is a father-daughter memory you’re saving and if so then i bow out with apologies.

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    2018/08/18 at 8:42 pm
  • Omecronon12

    From Omecronon12 on The parrot

    A rather laid back epic flow to it that I like and all of a sudden you’re there. Nice work indeed!

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    2018/08/18 at 4:59 pm
    • Supratik

      From supratik on The parrot

      Thank you! Did my presence make sense or was my being intimidating!

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      2018/08/18 at 5:01 pm
      • Omecronon12

        From Omecronon12 on The parrot

        As for content your presence made sense. Far better than mine. Thank you!

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        2018/08/18 at 5:24 pm
  • Slovitt

    From slovitt on Zero Results

    easy places to start, perhaps

    Cold, the sky starless,
    Dad laughing says
    He’s not going to win.
    *****
    I’m 46, googling find
    That other thing he promised,
    Archaic, something like
    Hot arse.

    not purporting to be final answers, just a finger pointing at the moon.

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    2018/08/18 at 3:47 pm
    • Ifyouplease

      From ifyouplease on Zero Results

      the poem has 4 stanzas 5 lines each it is not slack (negligent looseness) at all in my opinion,
      but i can tighten it. soon

      thanks for pointing at the moon

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      2018/08/18 at 8:09 pm
  • Slovitt

    From slovitt on Zero Results

    pretty slack, dear girl, needs some tightening, and some jagging up. perhaps, to start, look at cutting a line a stanza, consolidating.

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    2018/08/17 at 8:36 pm
  • Ifyouplease

    From ifyouplease on Self-Portrait

    a great poem of yours from the past. nice to read it again.

    it can be instructive too on how to write good poems.

    there’s a typo: listening.

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    2018/08/17 at 7:34 pm
    • Slovitt

      From slovitt on Self-Portrait

      thanks. have recently started to write again, as you know, and wanted to keep some momentum, hence this post of an older poem

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      2018/08/17 at 8:28 pm
  • Ifyouplease

    From ifyouplease on The parrot

    they tell us to enjoy it while it lasts, just be, just be and you’re free.

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    2018/08/17 at 7:30 pm
    • Supratik

      From supratik on The parrot

      Very well said! Indeed! Thank you. Most of the time, their call is a reflection of your thought… it really happened to me… I hear a simple hey…or a tee tee….or change change….ha ha ha!!! It’s amazing how it happens!

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      2018/08/18 at 4:50 am
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