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  • Slovitt

    From slovitt on The Question

    gone from da I see, the 6 messages you left unanswerable since you killed your acct there. write to my yahoo address,

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    2020/01/25 at 5:21 pm
    • Ifyouplease

      From ifyouplease on The Question

      yep left too much pornographic material on that site too much spam and after the chat I was invited for my successful poem Re-happening, a laptop I used which was not mine was infected. still using it. it’s not mine.

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      2020/01/26 at 10:41 am
  • Griffonner

    From griffonner on Creating spasms

    Thank you for this. It is always interesting to see how others view this aspect of “42”. I myself have had seventy-six mini years, and have – at the moment – come to the conclusion that our ego prevents us from conceiving that our personal purpose, our prime personal objective, may have happened in the 441504000th second of our time – and we can no longer remember what it was that happened at that moment, or who/what it changed/affected/taught/et cetera.

    I think a major one of mine came at around the 20th year, when I had a very personal experience that ‘I think’ showed me something of the non-physical side of my present ‘reality’. But who knows! If I read you correctly you think, as do I hope, that “an explanation will be provided which will leave us speechless” – in due course. 🙂

    Further, whatever our personal “God” might be, is unlikely to be truly visualised by our (in comparison) puny brains, so he/it/she/they or whatever would certainly be BIG in that sense.

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    2020/01/24 at 1:19 pm
    • Ifyouplease

      From ifyouplease on Creating spasms

      I’m inclined to believe this is a ruthless incompassionate simulation a challenge for divine awareness which exists in everything with a soul.

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      2020/01/26 at 7:02 pm
  • Supratik

    From supratik on Creating spasms

    Nic, I understand where it is coming from (perhaps!) and I will never contradict. Your own interpretation is always, always right for you. I mean who is the liar who says the glass is not half empty, it is…so the question of right or wrong ceases to exist…the onus is on the persons who see what they want to see…and about names Nic…what is in a name…you seek the help of pronouns or adjectives, it really doesn’t matter. A sane individual has to see what works for him or her..that’s it. Only half-intelligent people think of definitions such as agnostic, atheist, theist, gays, lesbians, transgenders and what have you. Like there are people whom I cannot throw out of my class during my lecture on Hamlet because they distracted the attention of serious listeners by pointing out some spelling mistakes and grammatical errors thinking they had arrived at the moon, I cannot stoop as low as that can I? These insect-like creatures also exist and have the right to exist.
    At all times, one has to know what works for him or her. As for me, any disease I have in my body has been caused because of my uncontrolled thought…forgiveness heals the body, mind and the spirit. So if I forgive those white insects, I don’t do them any favor, I do myself a favor.
    Whatever said and done, your raw rants do make me think. Thank you. Keep writing.

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    2020/01/24 at 8:03 am
    • Ifyouplease

      From ifyouplease on Creating spasms

      it’s difficult for me to separate the Christian God from the real God if there is such a thing, but christianity must be abolished last from all religions, not first. the west lost its faith prematurely, because the west due to this particular faith became mature enough to question everything pertaining to dogma. so the Gnostics helped me with the concept of an immature jealous god the Demiurge as opposed to the Source, this world is evil and not to focus on and strive for its salvation: it is inherently doomed.

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      2020/01/26 at 6:58 pm
    • Griffonner

      From griffonner on Creating spasms

      Sometimes we forget what it is that is in the half empty part! 😉

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      2020/01/24 at 1:02 pm
  • Shoam

    From Shoam on The Process

    I agree with the first verse (and love your phrasing) but not with the second. I am delighted to see the new blooms and spend a moment to mourn the dried ones, but a writer’s world is created inside his head and what an exciting world that can be

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    2020/01/22 at 11:44 am
    • Griffonner

      From griffonner on The Process

      Thank you for taking the time to comment, Shoam. I am really frateful for your input.
      Inside you head, or simply ‘within’. Bringing them to paper is the hardest part. 😀

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      2020/01/24 at 12:58 pm
  • Shoam

    From Shoam on Line in the sand

    Wow! This is such a beautiful write. I believe we can live in questions… and moments. One need not always search for answers and definitions.

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    2020/01/22 at 11:28 am
    • Griffonner

      From griffonner on Line in the sand

      Thank you for reading and evaluating, Shoam. It is very kind of you and is much appreciated. 🙂

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      2020/01/22 at 2:04 pm
  • Griffonner

    From griffonner on The Ancient Love Lore

    I enjoyed your poem. I actually found you mirroring something that is inside of me. 😉

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    2020/01/21 at 10:54 pm
    • Shoam

      From Shoam on The Ancient Love Lore

      Thank you for pausing to comment, Griffonner. I’m quite thrilled you recognised the metaphor 🙂

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      2020/01/22 at 11:04 am
  • Griffonner

    From griffonner on When We Were Kids

    Ah ha! Love it! How true. (‘cept I played with gunpowder and weed killer rocket fuels – but I never once planned to blow anyone or anything up!) 🙂

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    2020/01/21 at 10:48 pm
  • Supratik

    From supratik on Walking it off

    Good one!

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    2020/01/21 at 1:31 pm
  • Ionicus

    From ionicus on Mo Mhathair (My Mother)

    An excellent representation of mother’s love, Jim. For a moment I thought that it might be in Gaelic and beyond my comprehension but thankfully it was crystal clear. Thank you.
    Best, Luigi.

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    2020/01/21 at 12:12 pm
    • Franciman

      From franciman on Mo Mhathair (My Mother)

      Cheers, Luigi,
      My burgeoning Gaelic is not yet up to poetry… One day, I hope.
      I’m pleased you liked it.
      Thanks,
      Jim

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      2020/01/21 at 12:20 pm
  • Franciman

    From franciman on River bank

    Hi Nic,
    Not sure if this reminds me more of Salvador Dali, or Egyptian Hieroglyphics? The imagery is fabulous and the journey left me breathless… ‘hauntingly pleasing’ … yes, exactly. Love it
    cheers,
    Jim x

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    2020/01/21 at 11:59 am
  • Supratik

    From supratik on River bank

    It has definitely worked with me Nic. What a range! Massive! Keep them flowing.

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    2020/01/21 at 5:21 am
  • Supratik

    From supratik on Treading the Boards

    Flabbergasted! I can completely understand this and leave it to things beyond explanation. Intelligence is the trap here…it will always think of something being leaked beforehand, but when the same intelligent mind is belittled with similar experience, it really becomes experiential. All the best to Jessica, she’ll continue to enthrall her audience for sure, not only her overprotective uncle. With the uncle, considering the unfortunate incident that happened between him and Elizabeth, I saw shades of Clamence, the protagonist of The Fall written by Albert Camus. Much enjoyed the reading Luigi.
    In the line “she decided to do do the opposite”, is there a repetition, or am I missing something.
    Best.
    Supratik

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    2020/01/21 at 5:13 am
    • Ionicus

      From ionicus on Treading the Boards

      Thanks Supratik for your in-depth analysis of my story. I can see why it brought to mind the Fall by Camus but while its protagonist, Clamence, is consumed by guilt for not having prevented the suicide of an unknown woman, the emotion felt by Jeremy, the character of this narrative, is one of grief for his beloved fiancée.
      Your eagle’s eye has correctly spotted the repetition of ‘do’ which I will amend right away. Thanks for pointing it out.
      Best, Luigi

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      2020/01/21 at 10:48 am
      • Supratik

        From supratik on Treading the Boards

        Yes of course I agree with the difference… that of guilt and grief, but it’s the difference that draws you in, as you imagine the scene where the judge penitent and the unknown woman flashes on your mind. Also you have, very intelligently used The falls…although I doubt if you have used that on purpose, for me this is clever writing.
        There are other interesting elements in this very short piece, that of Sherlock Holmes, Jessica’s profession as a failed actor which create interest in the mind of the readers. You have craftily created the atmosphere for the climax, and the absence of dramatic irony made it so much more interesting Luigi. Keep them coming.
        I laughed at myself thinking what if you’d have kept the title as, Tell me about Elizabeth.. it’d have spoilt the thrill. But why did you have to end with a comma… like “Tell me about Elizabeth”, she says, instead of a period? This has made me think. When writers like you do that there must be a reason, but I couldn’t understand. Please let me know.

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        2020/01/21 at 11:09 am
        • Ionicus

          From ionicus on Treading the Boards

          Thanks for coming back with additional remarks, Supratik. The use of a fall as a literary device was purely coincidental. Consider the comma at the end of the story as another typo. I pressed the wrong key and did not realise it.

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          2020/01/21 at 11:39 am
  • Supratik

    From supratik on The Ancient Love Lore

    “And my thirst will never be quenched…” Understandably so. Quite an adventurous recount. Keep writing.

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    2020/01/21 at 5:02 am
  • Ifyouplease

    From ifyouplease on Three 50-words mini-tales

    i think the first one is indeed impressive.

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    2020/01/20 at 3:58 pm
  • Ionicus

    From ionicus on When We Were Kids

    Thanks for reading and commenting Nic. It is a reflection on the childhood of my generation and that of today.
    xx

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    2020/01/20 at 3:52 pm
  • Guajiros

    From guajiros on Three 50-words mini-tales

    Three good ones Luigi did you just do these or are they from your files
    If its the former I am very impressed

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    2020/01/20 at 3:49 pm
    • Ionicus

      From ionicus on Three 50-words mini-tales

      As you can see I have left the original copyright date (2018). I don’t think I submitted them to that BBC competition but if I did they got nowhere. They got a ‘cherry’ on ABCTales though. A cherry being the equivalent of a ‘pick’ on UKA.
      Cheers. Luigi.

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      2020/01/20 at 4:01 pm
      • Guajiros

        From guajiros on Three 50-words mini-tales

        Ah as I’m as unobservent as ever!
        You had the fruit of your labours so to speak
        I imagine you have enough cherries to make a lot of jam, Luigi

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        2020/01/20 at 4:37 pm
  • Ifyouplease

    From ifyouplease on When We Were Kids

    interesting last strophe and very well written in general.

    yes lots to think here about the days we were kids….

    xx

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    2020/01/20 at 2:59 pm
  • Ionicus

    From ionicus on Walking it off

    A lot can be said with few words but it takes skill to tell a story succinctly. You have managed it well. The last line sums up the situation

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    2020/01/20 at 2:32 pm
    • Guajiros

      From guajiros on Walking it off

      Thanks Luigi things often depend on what’s written in the bottom line

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      2020/01/20 at 3:47 pm
  • Guajiros

    From guajiros on River bank

    I don’t have the patience to mess around with format but you ask an interesting question I should try and think about it

    In the meantime where the fuck is everyone?

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    2020/01/20 at 2:03 pm
    • Ifyouplease

      From ifyouplease on River bank

      in the meantime.. probably on facebook/instagram/twitter distracted. tee hee

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      2020/01/20 at 2:18 pm
    • Ifyouplease

      From ifyouplease on River bank

      if I knew about microtales back then (2004 or earlier) I would never make it a poem, always felt this was a very short story — existentialist. thanks for reading and commenting.

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      2020/01/20 at 2:06 pm
      • Guajiros

        From guajiros on River bank

        A uk newspaper and the bbc I think have competitions to write the best story in exactly 50 words it’s been going on a long time and it’s difficult

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        2020/01/20 at 2:10 pm
        • Ifyouplease

          From ifyouplease on River bank

          Thanks guys

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          2020/01/21 at 10:16 am
        • Ifyouplease

          From ifyouplease on River bank

          link please

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          2020/01/20 at 2:13 pm
          • Guajiros

            From guajiros on River bank

            Luigi can send you a link probably
            I’m not sure which newspaper still do this
            I’ll look it up
            I think the prize is about £10000 but I cannot be sure maybe Andrea or Richard might know a link

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            2020/01/20 at 4:48 pm
          • Ionicus

            From ionicus on River bank

            Here is a list of several sites that do or have done contests.

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            2020/01/20 at 6:16 pm
          • Ionicus

            From ionicus on River bank

            https://www.christopherfielden.com/short-story-tips-and-writing-advice/flash-fiction-competitions.php

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            2020/01/20 at 6:16 pm
  • Ifyouplease

    From ifyouplease on Walking it off

    depression?

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    2020/01/20 at 12:09 pm
    • Guajiros

      From guajiros on Walking it off

      Hi Nic thank you for reading and commenting

      This is a little more complicated than depression, more like a cause . It concerns the awful situation where a partner/spouse has a good job and income but it takes them away travelling a lot. The one that is left behind wants to support the partner but although they have a great standard of living, the loneliness is crushing. They are losing their love and the guilt is unbearable. it happens a lot in relationships

      I put this up as micro fiction prose but I’m thinking it should be in poetry as a prose poem

      What do you think I would be interested in your opinion
      X

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      2020/01/20 at 12:53 pm
      • Ifyouplease

        From ifyouplease on Walking it off

        I recently made a comment on someone’s work elsewhere on the matter of ‘distance’ physical distance.
        There isn’t a greater absence than that of skin;
        two people in love must be together
        every single day for at least 12 hours
        a ‘looking forward to’ be back from work
        is the only permissible ‘missing’
        as it is the only that doesn’t play games.

        am I too strict? perhaps.

        the loneliness is crushing.

        this can only work as a microtale I think, maybe add a sentence which clarifies the situation.

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        2020/01/20 at 1:00 pm
        • Guajiros

          From guajiros on Walking it off

          No you’re not too strict you are right but modern life can get in the way couples need to be very strong these days

          In third world countries this happens all the time but it’s about survival rather than material needs and that make the bond stronger I believe

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          2020/01/20 at 1:12 pm
          • Ifyouplease

            From ifyouplease on Walking it off

            we shouldn’t worry about how third world countries or second or whatever TPTB called them – we should worry about our relationship not even about our countrymen, when we are trying to find a solution thinking of other circumstances faced by other people doesn’t help.

            do you want her and does she want you then the rest is toothpaste as Greeks say. travel together if you need extra money. if your love is not the most important thing in your lives and material things are shadowing it then why is anyone depressed? he or she has what completes him/her some love and extra material things.

            but I sense a game here. one of them plays a mind game.

            I might be wrong. But she is truly in love he is not.

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            2020/01/20 at 1:36 pm
          • Guajiros

            From guajiros on Walking it off

            I’m not talking about a personal situation here
            It’s about how things go wrong for example he gets a great job with big money but he has to travel she is happy but eventually can’t handle being alone she doesn’t want to tell him because she knows it will be hard for hom to understand and change his job. Its a rock and hard place situation for her
            The truth is people don’t always discuss the negatives until it is too late
            Commitment means commitment but ????? Life has a way of dumping shit on everybody

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            2020/01/20 at 1:55 pm
          • Ifyouplease

            From ifyouplease on Walking it off

            love makes a couple as smart as possible real love that is.. I do not worry about the fake feelings that dumb people down blinding them even more. they usually are not with a potential soulmate – it’s just a contract and they are usually very materialistic. yes I understood it was not a personal situation. She is ready for real love and she must leave to find it.

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            2020/01/20 at 1:59 pm
          • Guajiros

            From guajiros on Walking it off

            Forgive me for saying this Nic but I find that a little clinical
            She has a big decision to make she doesn’t know how he/she will react
            It could be him (or her of course its a modern world) that decides if they have real love

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            2020/01/20 at 3:45 pm
          • Ifyouplease

            From ifyouplease on Walking it off

            he is not ready judging from his usual reaction “This can’t go on. You’d best see Doc James and get some tablets,” he would have to be heartbroken first to set his priorities that she already knows how to and walks it off – it’s not a matter of male and female. they could be reversed roles. would you rather have them walking it off or walk out of it?

            I don’t think I’m clinical. really! I really care about your two characters here

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            2020/01/20 at 3:54 pm
          • Guajiros

            From guajiros on Walking it off

            Ever thought of being a marriage councillor?
            Thank you for caring that’s really human
            If he’s a man you could forgive him we are not the cleverest half of our species often we don’t see problems even when they are smacking us in the face

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            2020/01/20 at 4:01 pm
          • Ifyouplease

            From ifyouplease on Walking it off

            he has the tablets she needs, he finds the tablets he needs when he’s back from work.

            there was a greek forum and they used a special description for me after a while, asked me first then changed it – the new permanent description was: I am the Counsel. I guess I could do that – a marriage counsel. people like me would really be hated by lawyers.

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            2020/01/20 at 4:13 pm
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