The Pillars

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The whole world is a pile of crap

Hiding more crap.

Where is the truth, one might ask.

The truth is that you think,

Not what you think,

That you feel, not what you feel.

Nothing is hiding behind these two

Pillars you can only sense

They’re there.

 

 

Athens

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Omecronon12
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I believe that you may have a promising start here for a good career …:)
More serriously; serene, short, sweet and if I may say so pretty adequate. Counters 1984 somehow.
Someone I once was aquainted with would say that it’s merely opinions but there’s a reason for most things …

Slovitt
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lines 4-6, a clarity.

Gothicman
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Edited out the crap, IYP. I shouldn’t rush my comments, especially when tired, even if time is pressing! I cannot resist leaving the humour though…..my first impressions for which I apologise.
Your poem describes the philosophy of the Dung Beetle, especially as the nocturnal African variant navigates and orientates using the Milky Way, but without language, and its often arbitrary use of reference words, it doesn’t know it’s doing it.

Slovitt
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your comment on self-portrait, and my reply to you, didnt show up under ¨latest comments¨. the uka messaging system isnt responsive. have several email addresses for you, message me at either yahoo or google with a currently valid one.
set the challenge as requested.

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