UKArchive ID: 36538
UKArchive ID: 36538
Archived comments for Innocence returning
stormwolf on 20-05-2016
Oh Keith. So very sad. As you may know I am watching my mum being lost to Altzeimers and it's an agony all round.
The poem made me cry as some of your have done in the last. Well done on the nib.
A couple of apostrophes missing ( grandad's grandma's ) but very moving and insightful
Sorry about your Mother Alison it is really tough, this is only a memory know for me but it is still sad. Thanks for the Nit will sort it out. Sorry I am only just coming back, I had hoped to be more consistent with my presence, hence why I posted but alas, not so.
Mikeverdi on 20-05-2016
'Gently I place an arm around the confusion' This is so gut reachingly descriptive. The whole piece reaches inside of me.
Great writing about a growing problem.
Mike you are very kind with your comments. much appreciated Keith
sweetwater on 21-05-2016
So, so sad, beautifully expressed, a complete story in those few lines. I too have tears in my eye. Sue.
Many thanks Sue such sad times but they always seem to find a way into my pen. Best Keith
pdemitchell on 22-05-2016
Yeah, a piece all carers would resonate to and I agree with Mike “Gently I place an arm around the confusion” sums it all up. Mitch
I agree Mitch the poem turns on that line so its good to know it works, many thanks Keith
TOMBO on 22-05-2016
A very fine, sad poem. I particularly like the lines
“using soft words we stumble outside
Towards real moments.”
and “like ghosts in field mists”
But the whole poem hangs together very well with a good rhythmic flow. Very impressed
Many thanks for the 10 very happy you liked the poem. best Keith
Gothicman on 22-05-2016
For me Keith, freely-written poetry at its best, you at your best, and into favourites, and nominated (if it hadn't already been!)
Your comments are very kind and I'm very grateful for the Nom but not sure who to thank. I have lots of new poems but I am holding off posting until I can spend more time reading and commenting on others work. Best Keith