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Old Men
by franciman
Originally published on April 1, 2016 in Poetry        


Mikeverdi said I could do better with this one. So when an inferior gets all superior with you, best to revise then! I hope to god you like it now Michael?


Beauty lies in lines
across hard hands,
And in the shallow creases
of old eyes.
Life is written large
on withered brows,
The brutal knowledge
graving old men wise.
Youthful once,
each man's untroubled skin;
Its optimism smooth
as all naive.
Now lined to mark
the compromises made,
That broke the heart
he wore upon his sleeve.
Bread won, brood raised,
the task is almost over.
though late they do not see
themselves as old.
A young ambition
squandered on their children,
The story of their lives
already told.
An old man's smile
is such a living beauty.
Benign, it blunts the fear
and salves our pain.
Though given free
his sons cannot inherit,
As all must pay
for knowing smiles again.

© franciman (franciman on OLD UKA)

UKArchive ID: 36395
Archived comments for Old Men


Supratik on 01-04-2016
Old Men
“An old man's smile

is such a living beauty.

Benign, it blunts the fear

and salves our pain.

Though given free

his sons cannot inherit,

As all must pay

for knowing smiles again.”

Brilliant!

Author’s Reply:
Sorry to take so long to get back. Story of my life, at the moment!

Thanks for the really kind comment.

cheers,

Jim


Mikeverdi on 01-04-2016
Old Men
Bloody cheek😂😂😂

No complaints with this beautifully composed piece. A little more tutoring from me and you'll get it right every time Jim😁

Mike

Author’s Reply:
Modesty becomes you, Mike.

So glad I reviewed this one. You were right, surprisingly!!

cheers,

Jim


stormwolf on 02-04-2016
Old Men
Beautiful poetry that speaks of the beauty of a well-lived face. The wisdom that cannot be inherited but has to be earned. Jim at his best.

Alison x

Author’s Reply:
Thanks Alison,

Having joined the ranks of the Damned (old, sorry) I have become more sympathetic in my verse?

cheers,

Jim x


pdemitchell on 03-04-2016
Old Men
I became aware of the bags under my eyes reading this and the salt n peper of my sixtieth year. Bravo. Mitch

Author’s Reply:
Hi Mitch,

64 and rising here. Almost invariably I am the hero in my own verse!

cheers,

Jim


Zoya on 03-04-2016
Old Men
Lot of empathy goes in to this deeply felt piece of poetry!

Yes, what experience can earn, youth cannot comprehend!

Old faces always tell a story!

Enjoyed this!

Zoya

Author’s Reply:
Hi Zoya,

Glad you dropped by and left such a positive comment.

cheers,

Jim


Zoya on 03-04-2016
Old Men
Lot of empathy goes in to this deeply felt piece of poetry!

Yes, what experience can earn, youth cannot comprehend!

Old faces always tell a story!

Enjoyed this!

Zoya

Author’s Reply:


Zoya on 03-04-2016
Old Men
Lot of empathy goes in to this deeply felt piece of poetry!

Yes, what experience can earn, youth cannot comprehend!

Old faces always tell a story!

Enjoyed this!

Zoya

Author’s Reply: