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At the Close
by franciman
Originally published on December 11, 2015 in Poetry        


Tis the season…



The lake,
in widow's weeds
of change,
lies beneath
the lilac dawn.
The petals
of the winter
flowering sun;
like a company
of strangers,
float on
the mirror surface.
Mother Nature
and her children
sit drinking wine.
They pour libation
to the Boreal gods
of Closing Time.
Who with
a sigh,
a cry,
a hivernal chant
evoke
the Winter Solstice.


© franciman (franciman on OLD UKA)

UKArchive ID: 35963
Archived comments for At the Close


Gee on 11-12-2015
At the Close
Such wonderful descriptive words. I particularly liked the beginning

“The lake,

in widow's weeds

of change, ”

as it definitely set the tone for the rest of the poem.

Author’s Reply:
Hi Gillian,

There's a little lochan near the top of Arthur's Seat. It looks out over the Forth, like an infinity pool, in a way. That was the inspiration for this one winter's morning around 8 o'clock.

cheers,

Jim x


swissterrace on 11-12-2015
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This is what making writing fascinating, the different way we interpret events with words. I like the image of strangers floating on, a really nice line. Carl

Author’s Reply:
Hi Carl,

Really pleased you liked and commented on this piece. As a writer of nice lines and striking images yourself, it means a lot to hear you mention them.

cheers,

Jim


swissterrace on 11-12-2015
At the Close
This is what making writing fascinating, the different way we interpret events with words. I like the image of strangers floating on, a really nice line. Carl

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Bozzz on 12-12-2015
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'The widows weeds' brilliant not only for the obvious double entendre, but also because lakes are often stagnant water and grow old and stale because of that. Keep the nibs flowing my friend, even if the water does not ! Yours David.

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Pronto on 13-12-2015
At the Close
“The lake,

in widow's weeds

of change,

lies beneath

the lilac dawn.”

I, too, loved this opening. Very clever penmanship indeed.

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sweetwater on 13-12-2015
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I think the above comments have said it all, so I will just add that it was stunningly beautiful, and I just wanted to read it over and over again. Sue.

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